Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 57 "part four, chapter 17"Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from mr elis
When one lives under tension and pressure at the same time it's no joke,one really doesn't know what to do at a giving moment-,one is scare night and day at, the simple trembling of a leaf.
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When one lives under tension and pressure at the same time it's no joke,one really doesn't know what to do at a giving moment-,one is scare night and day at, the simple trembling of a leaf.
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Thank you for your kind review and support.
Comment from Allison78
This chapter kept me on the edge of my seat! You do such a good job getting the reader to see exactly what you are writing. Another wonderful job!
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This chapter kept me on the edge of my seat! You do such a good job getting the reader to see exactly what you are writing. Another wonderful job!
Comment Written 14-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Connie P
This is not good at all. Now, Sam is hurt, Michael has been kidnapped and someone has Anna in her apartment. I knew those lowlifes would pull something like this! A very exciting chapter.
Connie
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This is not good at all. Now, Sam is hurt, Michael has been kidnapped and someone has Anna in her apartment. I knew those lowlifes would pull something like this! A very exciting chapter.
Connie
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from RazberryBullet
Whoa! What an awful situation--Michael crawling away outside and Anna locked in her house with an unknown man.
suggestion: Anna rushed (to)the door and tried to unlock it.
What a hook :(
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2012
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Whoa! What an awful situation--Michael crawling away outside and Anna locked in her house with an unknown man.
suggestion: Anna rushed (to)the door and tried to unlock it.
What a hook :(
Comment Written 14-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2012
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Thank you for your eagle eye. I will fix that.
Comment from Karen Payton Holt
Hi Barbara.
This is a chilling chapter.
I can see Anna, with this man towering over her, threatening her safety anf all she will be picturing is Michael outside the door, defenceless and vulnerable.
My heart was in my mouth...is still, until the next post.
On the edge of my seat.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2012
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Hi Barbara.
This is a chilling chapter.
I can see Anna, with this man towering over her, threatening her safety anf all she will be picturing is Michael outside the door, defenceless and vulnerable.
My heart was in my mouth...is still, until the next post.
On the edge of my seat.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi Barbara,
The lady really does need to take lessons in listening and in being more observant. Now she's really in trouble.
Well done, the scenarios are true to the characters as are the dialogues.
Patrick
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reply by the author on 14-Mar-2012
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Hi Barbara,
The lady really does need to take lessons in listening and in being more observant. Now she's really in trouble.
Well done, the scenarios are true to the characters as are the dialogues.
Patrick
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Comment Written 14-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2012
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Thank you for the kind review. Anna is extremely naive.
Comment from adewpearl
Actually, many of my homeless clients at the shelter have cell phones - I think they have those kind you buy at Walmart where you get a certain number of minutes with them and you don't need credit or a long-term plan
You depict Anna's new attitude of determination and defiance well
Wow, that is one dramatic cliffhanger. Brooke
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Actually, many of my homeless clients at the shelter have cell phones - I think they have those kind you buy at Walmart where you get a certain number of minutes with them and you don't need credit or a long-term plan
You depict Anna's new attitude of determination and defiance well
Wow, that is one dramatic cliffhanger. Brooke
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Comment Written 14-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2012
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Thank you for the kind review. My ghetto first graders all have cell phones too, but Anna is naive and I figured she wouldn't know that.
Comment from c_lucas
You are moving this story right along. It has a smooth flow of words, making for an interesting read. Anna is beginning to discover her strength.
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You are moving this story right along. It has a smooth flow of words, making for an interesting read. Anna is beginning to discover her strength.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2012
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Thank you for continuing to follow my story. I appreciate the support.
