Little Billy
Viewing comments for Chapter 8 "The Devils Seed"memiors from my life experiences.
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Comment from Judian James
Rhyming couplets is always an exciting form to use to bring your point home in two line punches. This was very well written. I did trip a bit with the "commandment" and
"abandonment" but would not change it either. You conveyed your message well. excellent
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2010
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Rhyming couplets is always an exciting form to use to bring your point home in two line punches. This was very well written. I did trip a bit with the "commandment" and
"abandonment" but would not change it either. You conveyed your message well. excellent
Comment Written 19-Sep-2010
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thank you
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my pleasure
Comment from Shirley McLain
Like the poem, you tell a very true story in few words. It flows well and is easy to read. Your form is good and I did not see any problems. Great job.
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Like the poem, you tell a very true story in few words. It flows well and is easy to read. Your form is good and I did not see any problems. Great job.
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thank you
Comment from bard owl
Very thought-provoking. Pain ideed DOES spawn the devil's seed. Mortals are looking for a way to alleviate the pain they are enduring and satan grabs on to that oppertunity. Excellent imagery in this piece as well s a word to the wise.
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Very thought-provoking. Pain ideed DOES spawn the devil's seed. Mortals are looking for a way to alleviate the pain they are enduring and satan grabs on to that oppertunity. Excellent imagery in this piece as well s a word to the wise.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2010
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Comment from Eddie Z
Your meter and rhyming are fabulous. Very descriptive imagery that gives know doubt that the seed is being spread in all forms through our lives. Very clever poetry.
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Your meter and rhyming are fabulous. Very descriptive imagery that gives know doubt that the seed is being spread in all forms through our lives. Very clever poetry.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2010
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Comment from Jean Lutz
Perhaps there has never been another time when there is so much temptation. Ephesians Chapter 6 in the Bible lists spiritual weapons to use to defeat the Devil.
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Perhaps there has never been another time when there is so much temptation. Ephesians Chapter 6 in the Bible lists spiritual weapons to use to defeat the Devil.
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Comment from psalmist
Well done. This has such an eerie feel to it. Unfortunately, it is all too true. I like the first line, it is so descriptive. And the second couplet reminds me of the words, that as we think/desire in our hearts, that is what will eventually come out. Excellent job.
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Well done. This has such an eerie feel to it. Unfortunately, it is all too true. I like the first line, it is so descriptive. And the second couplet reminds me of the words, that as we think/desire in our hearts, that is what will eventually come out. Excellent job.
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Comment from InterestingRon
This stunning poem has already been recognized and achieved an All Time Best award. And it's very easy to see why. Beautifully crafted poetry with an excellent choice of illustration. Thank you. Ron
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This stunning poem has already been recognized and achieved an All Time Best award. And it's very easy to see why. Beautifully crafted poetry with an excellent choice of illustration. Thank you. Ron
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Comment from CodyJack
In one way or another most people have succumbed to temptation in some way. Your point out how the person would feel in a unique way. Great poem and rhyming couplets. Cody
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In one way or another most people have succumbed to temptation in some way. Your point out how the person would feel in a unique way. Great poem and rhyming couplets. Cody
Comment Written 19-Sep-2010
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Comment from anabellapongasi
This is a very intense poem about temptation. Your strong rhyming couplets carry so much hidden and implied meanings that are deeply personal. I think we all have given in to temptation of various degrees and forms and have experienced sad consequences and regrets.
Well done
Anabella
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This is a very intense poem about temptation. Your strong rhyming couplets carry so much hidden and implied meanings that are deeply personal. I think we all have given in to temptation of various degrees and forms and have experienced sad consequences and regrets.
Well done
Anabella
Comment Written 19-Sep-2010
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Comment from katz meow
Very interesting approach to giving in to the devil's wiles. I don't agree that pain is being the main downfall. Because pain can make you stronger. But this is a good write, with nice rhyme, and natural flow. It was an enjoyable read...katz meow.
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Very interesting approach to giving in to the devil's wiles. I don't agree that pain is being the main downfall. Because pain can make you stronger. But this is a good write, with nice rhyme, and natural flow. It was an enjoyable read...katz meow.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2010
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thank you for taking the time to review my poem and for the stars.