CSP: A Collection of Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "Free Will"A collection of poetry
63 total reviews
Comment from Alexander E Poet
Dear poet, Excellent this a wonderful poem and beautifully worded, i like how it flow a good job and a remarkable piece of work. Great talent. Rich amazing imagery There were no errors. No typo's and nothing to change as far as i can see. I look forward to your next one Alexander QQ...
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2009
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Dear poet, Excellent this a wonderful poem and beautifully worded, i like how it flow a good job and a remarkable piece of work. Great talent. Rich amazing imagery There were no errors. No typo's and nothing to change as far as i can see. I look forward to your next one Alexander QQ...
Comment Written 06-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2009
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QQ, thank you so much for your lovely compliments. I do love the triolet. And thank you for your very kind review. Sue
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
You have expressed your thoughts strongly in this triolet with feeling and also the work reads well and good presentation good luck in the contest regards Fuller
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You have expressed your thoughts strongly in this triolet with feeling and also the work reads well and good presentation good luck in the contest regards Fuller
Comment Written 06-Apr-2009
Comment from Domino
Hi, Sue.
Along with acrostics, this is probably my least fav poetry form. Too much required repetition, IMHO. The trick is to make the lines REALLY o/s and I can't imagine a better effort within the theme you've chosen. Well done, Ray xx
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2009
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Hi, Sue.
Along with acrostics, this is probably my least fav poetry form. Too much required repetition, IMHO. The trick is to make the lines REALLY o/s and I can't imagine a better effort within the theme you've chosen. Well done, Ray xx
Comment Written 06-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2009
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Before I respond, what is o/s ? I'm thick!!
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outstanding xx
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Ah!! I like the word, outstanding! :-))
You know, I don't like the acrostic either. Bores me to tears! HA!!
I'm glad you liked my poem even though you don't like the form!
Comment from NightWriter
"Free Will" is a beautifully written Triolet poem. You like challenges, but you always make it look easy! Well done as always.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2009
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"Free Will" is a beautifully written Triolet poem. You like challenges, but you always make it look easy! Well done as always.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2009
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NightWriter, I do love a challenge! And I love the triolet. Thanks so much for your most kind review. Sue :-)
Comment from Perp Ihebom
I completely agree with you that the free will we are endowed with is such a great thing to be cherished and even celebrated each day. Nicely done.kudos
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I completely agree with you that the free will we are endowed with is such a great thing to be cherished and even celebrated each day. Nicely done.kudos
Comment Written 06-Apr-2009
Comment from dportwood
A thoroughly enjoyable triolet and a contender for the contest challenge.
One thing:
Unique! We are, born with free will
(I don't think the comma is needed in this line).
Duane
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2009
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A thoroughly enjoyable triolet and a contender for the contest challenge.
One thing:
Unique! We are, born with free will
(I don't think the comma is needed in this line).
Duane
Comment Written 06-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2009
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Duane, you are right. I just saw that comma and wondered how it got there! HA!! Just removed it. Thanks so much for your very kind review. Sue :-)
Comment from Joan E.
I hope reviewers read your notes, so that they do not wonder about or criticize your explanation mark. I thought it was used to very good effect. I enjoyed your strong rhymes and meter. Your friend's artwork resonated really well with your theme about our birth gift of free will.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2009
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I hope reviewers read your notes, so that they do not wonder about or criticize your explanation mark. I thought it was used to very good effect. I enjoyed your strong rhymes and meter. Your friend's artwork resonated really well with your theme about our birth gift of free will.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2009
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I've read enough triolets to feel comfortable in changing the punctuation. In fact, I just love that treatment! (I hope they read the notes, also!) Thanks very much for your very kind review. Sue :-)
Comment from Hitcher
Thank God for that! I do enjoy having my free will and I'm very grateful indeed to be able to exercise it, a lot around the world aren't so lucky!
I've just had a go at one of these, they are very challenging[it was for me] you have done a fine job of course, good Luck Sue.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2009
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Thank God for that! I do enjoy having my free will and I'm very grateful indeed to be able to exercise it, a lot around the world aren't so lucky!
I've just had a go at one of these, they are very challenging[it was for me] you have done a fine job of course, good Luck Sue.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2009
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Hi Hitch! Yeah, I just read yours. Excellent! Thanks so much for your great review on mine. Yes, we are so fortunate to exercise the free will we are born with. The reason that freedom is so essential for all of mankind! Sue :-))
Comment from rama devi
Well written triolet, dear Sue. It is an interesting topic and you somehow made a didactic tone fit in the musical flow of this style.
Nicely presented too.
No nits or spag.
Love, rd
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2009
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Well written triolet, dear Sue. It is an interesting topic and you somehow made a didactic tone fit in the musical flow of this style.
Nicely presented too.
No nits or spag.
Love, rd
Comment Written 06-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2009
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rama devi, thank you for your very kind review. And thank you for making the comments about the didactic tone fitting well into the triolet. With regards, Sue
Comment from aviddbrut
hey, great poem. you do a wonderful job with this triolet... esp. like the way you manipulate your first line in the 7th line place. the flow is nice and coherent. great artwork to accompany.
david
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2009
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hey, great poem. you do a wonderful job with this triolet... esp. like the way you manipulate your first line in the 7th line place. the flow is nice and coherent. great artwork to accompany.
david
Comment Written 06-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2009
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David, I'm glad you like the change in that 7th line. I always enjoy doing that in the triolet. And thank you for your great review. Sue :-))