CSP: A Collection of Poems
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Comment from Domino
Hi. Sue.
This is a sad yet sensibly resigned goodbye to a loved Ryan. Very easy to read with nice rhymes and flow. I'm not a lover of repetition but it adds to the drama and the atmosphere here. Excellent. Best wishes, Ray xx
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2008
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Hi. Sue.
This is a sad yet sensibly resigned goodbye to a loved Ryan. Very easy to read with nice rhymes and flow. I'm not a lover of repetition but it adds to the drama and the atmosphere here. Excellent. Best wishes, Ray xx
Comment Written 01-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2008
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Ray, thank you for reading and for your very nice review. I'm glad you enjoyed it. With regards, Sue
Comment from NightWriter
"My Son Left Today" is a beautifully written poem filled with love. Poem has perfect rhythm and reads smooth from beginning to end. Well done.
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2008
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"My Son Left Today" is a beautifully written poem filled with love. Poem has perfect rhythm and reads smooth from beginning to end. Well done.
Comment Written 01-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2008
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Nightwriter, thank you so much for your kindest review and your specific comments on this work. It is so appreciated. With kindest regards, Sue
Comment from amada
This is a great contest entry for a Quatrain. I liked the sentiment and the emotion of it. I wish your son the best of everything, and a very safe return.
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2008
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This is a great contest entry for a Quatrain. I liked the sentiment and the emotion of it. I wish your son the best of everything, and a very safe return.
Comment Written 01-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2008
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Amada, thank you for your very kind remarks and glad you liked this poem. Thank you for your very kind review and well-wishes for my son. Most appreciate, Sue
Comment from becky7777
great quatrain poem. seems like you all had a great time while he was here and that is what counts. my daughter in law left friday for Cuba. she is in the service. seems like the joy of the holdiay has to end too quick. good luck in the contest.
Becky
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2008
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great quatrain poem. seems like you all had a great time while he was here and that is what counts. my daughter in law left friday for Cuba. she is in the service. seems like the joy of the holdiay has to end too quick. good luck in the contest.
Becky
Comment Written 01-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2008
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Becky, thank you for your very kind compliments and review. Yes, we love our kids to visit! And hate to seem them go. Thanks for your well-wishes for the contest. Much appreciate, Sue
Comment from cmay44
Hi Sixteezkid
I know what you mean, it is so hard when my kids leave to go back to Texas or we go there and have to leave and come back to Georgia. Excellent work on your poem though and keep writing the nice work.
Well done.
God bless
love from
Carolyn
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Hi Sixteezkid
I know what you mean, it is so hard when my kids leave to go back to Texas or we go there and have to leave and come back to Georgia. Excellent work on your poem though and keep writing the nice work.
Well done.
God bless
love from
Carolyn
Comment Written 01-Dec-2008
Comment from skye
What a lovely poem, well written, filled with those emotions and the sadness that comes when one has to leave.
A tribute to your son, so universal, such fun words inside the lines.
Well done.
I can see you will miss him very much.
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2008
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What a lovely poem, well written, filled with those emotions and the sadness that comes when one has to leave.
A tribute to your son, so universal, such fun words inside the lines.
Well done.
I can see you will miss him very much.
Comment Written 01-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2008
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It WAS fun! He create so much laughter in our home. Thank you for your very kind comments and review. With regards, Sue
Comment from LadyMary
My heart was right there with you. It is always difficult to see a loved one off to distant places. How special though that you could share your special time together. You have captured loving sentiments so well here. The rhyme works well in this quatrain format. Well done. LdyMary
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2008
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My heart was right there with you. It is always difficult to see a loved one off to distant places. How special though that you could share your special time together. You have captured loving sentiments so well here. The rhyme works well in this quatrain format. Well done. LdyMary
Comment Written 30-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2008
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LadyMary, Thank you for your very special, kind words. And for your most generous review. Most sincerely, Sue
Comment from LateBloomer
Hello Sixteezkid,
This is a beautiful poem of love and loss.
The poem reads and flows well and I particularly liked the last line as I feel it is the essence of this poem:
Sounds of memories are in play
(Our memories will get us through).
I just saw the new movie called, Australlia, with Nicole Kidman. I hope you get to see it too. If you do, you'll know what this means ...
I'm sure you and your son will ....
"sing you to me"
You may be apart but will forevermore be in each other's heart.
Regards, LateBloomer
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Hello Sixteezkid,
This is a beautiful poem of love and loss.
The poem reads and flows well and I particularly liked the last line as I feel it is the essence of this poem:
Sounds of memories are in play
(Our memories will get us through).
I just saw the new movie called, Australlia, with Nicole Kidman. I hope you get to see it too. If you do, you'll know what this means ...
I'm sure you and your son will ....
"sing you to me"
You may be apart but will forevermore be in each other's heart.
Regards, LateBloomer
Comment Written 30-Nov-2008
Comment from WordPainter
Interesting rhyme scheme, well done. My boy only travels a few hundred miles to his home away, but I know the feeling of the parting. Always good to have them come home for a visit. I thought the Australian and Illinois connection brought interest also, something for the reader to ponder a moment, teasing the mind as to what it may be.
Good work,
Lois
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Interesting rhyme scheme, well done. My boy only travels a few hundred miles to his home away, but I know the feeling of the parting. Always good to have them come home for a visit. I thought the Australian and Illinois connection brought interest also, something for the reader to ponder a moment, teasing the mind as to what it may be.
Good work,
Lois
Comment Written 30-Nov-2008
Comment from writerjen
Sweet poem about a son. Nice flowing style, good rhyming scheme and description. Thoughtful and full of emotion, but not mushy or over done. Great job.
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2008
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Sweet poem about a son. Nice flowing style, good rhyming scheme and description. Thoughtful and full of emotion, but not mushy or over done. Great job.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2008
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Writerjen, thank you for your kind words and review. Most sincerely, Sue