Ghost Ship
Elegy for the thirty-six killed in the Ghost Ship fire.69 total reviews
Comment from robyn corum
Andre,
It's so clever of you to combine the old with the new. *smile* I think the dead and wounded would like this memorial. It is very kind of you to remember them in this way. I can hear this being read dramatically. Thanks!
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2016
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Andre,
It's so clever of you to combine the old with the new. *smile* I think the dead and wounded would like this memorial. It is very kind of you to remember them in this way. I can hear this being read dramatically. Thanks!
Comment Written 11-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2016
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Thank you, Robyn, for your review and condolences. The fire resulted in no wounded. Either you got out alive or you died inside. The fire moved too rapidly. The real wounded are the family and friends who have to live without their loved ones.
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
No less than a six not only for the excellent way you presented it but also for the content and the use of the mythology that I love so well.
Author's notes were an excellent help.
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2016
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No less than a six not only for the excellent way you presented it but also for the content and the use of the mythology that I love so well.
Author's notes were an excellent help.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2016
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Thank you, Barb, for your generous, six star review. I am glad that my presentation, content, and mythology resonated with you.
Comment from winnona
A well-written poem. I love the reference to Kharon. I am also glad you put in some information on him for the reader. I wrote a story awhile back using him and some other characters from mythology and no one knew what I was talking about.
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2016
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A well-written poem. I love the reference to Kharon. I am also glad you put in some information on him for the reader. I wrote a story awhile back using him and some other characters from mythology and no one knew what I was talking about.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2016
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Yes, Winnona, it is sad that many do not know who Kharon is, but I suppose that he is the mythological character that we would like least to meet. Thank you for your review.
Comment from Thomas Bowling
A great poem with very good imagery. I can see the skiff loaded down with goods from far off lands. Included in the ship's hold are the souls of the dead.
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2016
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A great poem with very good imagery. I can see the skiff loaded down with goods from far off lands. Included in the ship's hold are the souls of the dead.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2016
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Yes, Thomas, I can imagine the boat overloaded, too. I am glad that you grasped my imagery. Thank you for your review.
Comment from Dean Kuch
No wonder there is so much genuine pain and emotion dripping like torrents of tears from nearly every line in your melancholy musing here, Andre.
Such a horrible tragedy...so many lives snuffed out far before their prime.
As for Charon, I know him all too well. I keep a gold coin in my pocket just in case. I believe in being prepared for the inevitable...the inescapable fate that awaits us all.
The cold, cruel clutches of death...
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2016
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No wonder there is so much genuine pain and emotion dripping like torrents of tears from nearly every line in your melancholy musing here, Andre.
Such a horrible tragedy...so many lives snuffed out far before their prime.
As for Charon, I know him all too well. I keep a gold coin in my pocket just in case. I believe in being prepared for the inevitable...the inescapable fate that awaits us all.
The cold, cruel clutches of death...
Comment Written 11-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2016
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Yes, Dean, we will all take a journey with Charon at some point. Yes, my poem about "a horrible tragedy" evoked "so much genuine pain and emotion dripping like torrents of tears from nearly every line." Thank you for your review.
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Sure thing, Andre.
You're very welcome, my friend.
Sad...
~Dean
Comment from Ulla
Hi Andre, what a lucky escape you had, and I'm pleased for that, but at the same time I mourn those who were not so lucky. You've paid a lovely tribute with this poem. You must feel devastated. I'm so sorry. All the best. Ulla:))
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2016
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Hi Andre, what a lucky escape you had, and I'm pleased for that, but at the same time I mourn those who were not so lucky. You've paid a lovely tribute with this poem. You must feel devastated. I'm so sorry. All the best. Ulla:))
Comment Written 11-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2016
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Yes, Ulla, it was a devastating loss for all of us in the bay Area and for many beyond. Thank you for your review and condolences. They are much appreciated.
Comment from barkingdog
The death of so may talented artists is an overwhelming tragedy. I cried watching the news and can only imagine the depth of emotion felt by you and your friends who lost so many.
I'm so glad you weren't there. So glad.
Your elegy is a loving tribute to the lives lost.
Thank you for saying what needs to be said with a heart that can say it as it should be.
:) e
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2016
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The death of so may talented artists is an overwhelming tragedy. I cried watching the news and can only imagine the depth of emotion felt by you and your friends who lost so many.
I'm so glad you weren't there. So glad.
Your elegy is a loving tribute to the lives lost.
Thank you for saying what needs to be said with a heart that can say it as it should be.
:) e
Comment Written 11-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2016
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Thank you, barkingdog, for your generous, six star review of my elegy and for your condolences for the many talented artists lost. Your prayers are appreciated.
Comment from WriteSins!
A very well written poem. Excellent use of word choice and structure to help progress the poem. I very much enjoyed your use of mythology, I've always been intrigued by it. Fabulous work!
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A very well written poem. Excellent use of word choice and structure to help progress the poem. I very much enjoyed your use of mythology, I've always been intrigued by it. Fabulous work!
Comment Written 11-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2016
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Yes, WriteSins!, given that the artists who lived in the warehouse named it Ghost Ship, and mourners left memorials that referenced lost treasures and shipwrecks, using the Kharon myth was a natural fit. Thank you for your review.
Comment from Mary Wakeford
Andre, my sympathies for the loss of friendship you have suffered. This was horrible news and I have followed it from the start, having no idea one of the best writers on FanStory would be touched by the tragedy.
So many gentle people being taken so horribly is devastating.
Paralleling Greek mythology to the ghost ship was brilliant, emotive, and beautifully expresses the sadness of the writer.
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2016
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Andre, my sympathies for the loss of friendship you have suffered. This was horrible news and I have followed it from the start, having no idea one of the best writers on FanStory would be touched by the tragedy.
So many gentle people being taken so horribly is devastating.
Paralleling Greek mythology to the ghost ship was brilliant, emotive, and beautifully expresses the sadness of the writer.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2016
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Yes, Mary, I work three miles from the Ghost Ship warehouse and know poets and storytellers who lost friends in it. I felt I had a duty to visit the memorial outside of the ruins and write something about it. Thank you for your generous, six star review and for noting that my "Paralleling Greek mythology to the ghost ship was brilliant, emotive, and beautifully expresses the sadness of the writer."
Comment from Pantygynt
As I read the poem, before reading the notes I sensed there was something personal in it. I had not heard of the fire and being based several thousand miles away it would have meant little enought to me had I heard. That you might have been lost to us though brought up short. It seems you had a lucky escape there. This is a fine piece of free verse that cries out against the senseless loss of so many creative souls.
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2016
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As I read the poem, before reading the notes I sensed there was something personal in it. I had not heard of the fire and being based several thousand miles away it would have meant little enought to me had I heard. That you might have been lost to us though brought up short. It seems you had a lucky escape there. This is a fine piece of free verse that cries out against the senseless loss of so many creative souls.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2016
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Thank you, Jim, for your review of my "fine piece of free verse that cries out against the senseless loss of so many creative souls." At another warehouse-venue at a different night, that could have been me. thanks again.