My Babies
free verse love poem65 total reviews
Comment from BeasPeas
This is so nice. These babies are adorable--your grandsons. What a joy. Your poem is well written and touches my heart and I think the heart of any mom or grandma who reads it. Marilyn
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2016
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This is so nice. These babies are adorable--your grandsons. What a joy. Your poem is well written and touches my heart and I think the heart of any mom or grandma who reads it. Marilyn
Comment Written 18-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2016
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Thank you Marilyn for the great review and for saying the babies are adorable. They still are now at nearly 6 years old. Thanks for six wonderful stars!
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You're so welcome.
Comment from Poetic Friend
Written by a proud grandparent. Aaah, this poem is so incredibly cute and appropriate for the love poem contest.
Are they identical or fraternal twins?
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2016
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Written by a proud grandparent. Aaah, this poem is so incredibly cute and appropriate for the love poem contest.
Are they identical or fraternal twins?
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2016
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Thank you so much:) They are identical twins. Even at 6 years old, I have trouble sometimes telling them apart.
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They're precious. :)
Comment from dragonpoet
This poem tells of the circle of life. Your baby has babies. It is always fun and prideful to watch babies hit each stage.
Good luck and keep writing.
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2016
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This poem tells of the circle of life. Your baby has babies. It is always fun and prideful to watch babies hit each stage.
Good luck and keep writing.
dragonpoet
Comment Written 18-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2016
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Thanks so much:)
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You are very welcome.
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Comment from johnwilson
Bravo! This is a lovely piece and I liked your use of the first stanza as the last except for love from past to present grandchildren. I also thought this worked well without rhyme as it would have seemed strained. It flows well and I liked the way it sits on the page!
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2016
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Bravo! This is a lovely piece and I liked your use of the first stanza as the last except for love from past to present grandchildren. I also thought this worked well without rhyme as it would have seemed strained. It flows well and I liked the way it sits on the page!
Comment Written 18-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2016
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Thank you so much:)
Comment from cterp
Don't blink this week--they're turning 12 tomorrow and 18 the week after that. Lovely memories of your motherhood and your children and grandchildren. (They of course will be mortified, so don't tell them.)
chris
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2016
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Don't blink this week--they're turning 12 tomorrow and 18 the week after that. Lovely memories of your motherhood and your children and grandchildren. (They of course will be mortified, so don't tell them.)
chris
Comment Written 18-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2016
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I know! Thanks so much Chris:)
Comment from Lisa Deverick
I think every mother -turned -grandmother on this site will get a lump in her throat reading your words (I know I did) I like how you repeated your first stanza at the end. well done.
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2016
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I think every mother -turned -grandmother on this site will get a lump in her throat reading your words (I know I did) I like how you repeated your first stanza at the end. well done.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2016
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Thank you - yes it has been a hit with grandparents for sure.
Comment from Susanne M. Psyris
Very emotive and touching love poem poetry contest free-verse entry. Nothing is sweeter to write about than babies!!!! That's an automatic six-star review (wish I had one left!). Are the babies a picture of your own or grandchildren? Adorable. Words in verses flow smoothly and with such ease. Content is so tender and loving. Nothing not to like/love about this work. If I had a six-star rating left, this would get it. Accept my virtual six-star rating. God bless and hugs, Susanne
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2016
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Very emotive and touching love poem poetry contest free-verse entry. Nothing is sweeter to write about than babies!!!! That's an automatic six-star review (wish I had one left!). Are the babies a picture of your own or grandchildren? Adorable. Words in verses flow smoothly and with such ease. Content is so tender and loving. Nothing not to like/love about this work. If I had a six-star rating left, this would get it. Accept my virtual six-star rating. God bless and hugs, Susanne
Comment Written 18-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2016
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It's a picture of my twin grandsons who are now 6! (already - overnight). Thanks for the virtual six:)
Comment from Gloria ....
This is an excellent theme to write for the love poem contest, Teresa. Certainly love comes in all forms and that for our children is significantly different than any other kind of love.
Your poem works well in illustrating the cycle of life from one generation to the next.
The only suggestion I have is to end the last line in present tense:
Oh, how I love you so.
Great job and best wishes to you in the contest.
Gloria
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2016
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This is an excellent theme to write for the love poem contest, Teresa. Certainly love comes in all forms and that for our children is significantly different than any other kind of love.
Your poem works well in illustrating the cycle of life from one generation to the next.
The only suggestion I have is to end the last line in present tense:
Oh, how I love you so.
Great job and best wishes to you in the contest.
Gloria
Comment Written 18-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2016
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Ah, great suggestion - I'll change that. Thanks Gloria:)
Comment from RoostyNester
I loved your poem. And I can relate to it so very well. Raise two twin granddaughters. Love it, but now they are grown with their own! Your poem was cute and lively, such as the little ones would be. Loved it!
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2016
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I loved your poem. And I can relate to it so very well. Raise two twin granddaughters. Love it, but now they are grown with their own! Your poem was cute and lively, such as the little ones would be. Loved it!
Comment Written 18-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2016
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You are on your third generation then of little hands and feet:) thanks so much.
Comment from Dean Kuch
A-w-w-w-w. Such cute little tykes, LOL.
You must be very proud. I think that's quite obvious after having read this delightfully rendered ode to them.
I liked the book-end start and finish to this, Teresa. It really makes a profound statement concerning the never-ending, wonderful cycle of life.
Well done, and I wish you the very best of luck in the contest's outcome.
~Dean
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2016
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A-w-w-w-w. Such cute little tykes, LOL.
You must be very proud. I think that's quite obvious after having read this delightfully rendered ode to them.
I liked the book-end start and finish to this, Teresa. It really makes a profound statement concerning the never-ending, wonderful cycle of life.
Well done, and I wish you the very best of luck in the contest's outcome.
~Dean
Comment Written 18-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2016
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Thank you Dean:)
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You're welcome. :)
