My grandchild's like...
A butterfly.87 total reviews
Comment from pattipac
Why didn't you post the beautiful description of your handsome grandchild tomorrow, Roy, so I could plant a shiny six on it? The pure wonder, joy, and tender-heart found in young children, does resemble the face of angels.
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2015
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Why didn't you post the beautiful description of your handsome grandchild tomorrow, Roy, so I could plant a shiny six on it? The pure wonder, joy, and tender-heart found in young children, does resemble the face of angels.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2015
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Thank you you Pat, what you've said is sufficient and worth six stars, such lovely remarks and review, my dear friend, blessings, Roy.
Comment from Nosha17
Our precious children and grandchildren are like magic in our eyes, and this is the time to absorb the sweetness of their nature before they grow up. Excellent imagery and rhyming. Just a thought, Roy, hope you don't mind. You had eight syllables per line consistently in the first verse, then it seemed to jump to nine syllables in two lines of verse 2 (jewels is 2 syllables) and in the last verse. Nice picture of your family, good luck in the contest. Faye
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2015
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Our precious children and grandchildren are like magic in our eyes, and this is the time to absorb the sweetness of their nature before they grow up. Excellent imagery and rhyming. Just a thought, Roy, hope you don't mind. You had eight syllables per line consistently in the first verse, then it seemed to jump to nine syllables in two lines of verse 2 (jewels is 2 syllables) and in the last verse. Nice picture of your family, good luck in the contest. Faye
Comment Written 21-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2015
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Yes I was aware Faye, sometimes it works out that, I'm usually diligent, but I thought it was ok this time, thanks for the lovely review and comments, my friend, blessings, Roy.
Comment from acerisestory
I love this sweet poem about your grandchild, Roy!
You've used lovely imagery throughout, especially in your first stanza:
"My grandchild's like a butterfly,
a flitting vapour floating by,
or dragonflies that zip then zap,
like meerkat heads that never nap"
Your couplets are perfectly rhymed, and your words have a great flow.
This is a strong entry for the contest. Best of luck, my friend! Alana
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2015
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I love this sweet poem about your grandchild, Roy!
You've used lovely imagery throughout, especially in your first stanza:
"My grandchild's like a butterfly,
a flitting vapour floating by,
or dragonflies that zip then zap,
like meerkat heads that never nap"
Your couplets are perfectly rhymed, and your words have a great flow.
This is a strong entry for the contest. Best of luck, my friend! Alana
Comment Written 21-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2015
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Thank you Alana, for this most encouraging, delightful review and comments, I appreciate them, blessings, Roy.
Comment from Eric1
Hi Roy, your love for your wonderful Grandson really shines through in this brilliant entry for this Butterfly competition, wonderful rhyming and a fantastic flow that should surely warrant a top three place, good luck my friend.
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2015
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Hi Roy, your love for your wonderful Grandson really shines through in this brilliant entry for this Butterfly competition, wonderful rhyming and a fantastic flow that should surely warrant a top three place, good luck my friend.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2015
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Thank you Eric, for this most encouraging, delightful review and comments, I appreciate them, blessings, Roy.
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Truly a pleasure to read my friend.
Comment from TOMORAL
Beautiful daughter and grandson. Beautiful poem as a tribute to your angel's sigh. And they are. I loved my child, but my grandchildren really brought out the best in me. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2015
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Beautiful daughter and grandson. Beautiful poem as a tribute to your angel's sigh. And they are. I loved my child, but my grandchildren really brought out the best in me. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2015
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You're so right, they do don't they, I appreciate their innocent childlikeness and the sheer wonder of their world, It helps my perception of life, bless God, and bless you, my friend, Roy.
Comment from Louise Michelle
Hi Royowen,
Well, I've never heard a child being compared to a butterfly, but perhaps he or she has light, delicate movements. Nicely written.
Hugs,
Lou
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2015
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Hi Royowen,
Well, I've never heard a child being compared to a butterfly, but perhaps he or she has light, delicate movements. Nicely written.
Hugs,
Lou
Comment Written 21-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2015
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Thank you Lou, he is like perpetual motion but graceful, and thank you for this most encouraging, delightful review and comments, I appreciate them, blessings, Roy.
Comment from skye
This is a beautiful sonnet style poem describing your grandson. Love the picture, and the author notes. together with the poem, I feel I know you and yours a little better.
He is a jewel.
Excellent.
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2015
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This is a beautiful sonnet style poem describing your grandson. Love the picture, and the author notes. together with the poem, I feel I know you and yours a little better.
He is a jewel.
Excellent.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2015
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Thank you Skye, a lovely, complimentary and warm review and words, blessings, Roy.
Comment from fimarie78
Wonderful. Firstly, what a beautiful moment captured in your photo. I loved the reference to a meerkat. Little boys have so much energy. Lovely imagery in the second stanza and a nice ending also. good luck in the contest. Fiona
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2015
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Wonderful. Firstly, what a beautiful moment captured in your photo. I loved the reference to a meerkat. Little boys have so much energy. Lovely imagery in the second stanza and a nice ending also. good luck in the contest. Fiona
Comment Written 21-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2015
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Thank you Fiona, for this most encouraging, delightful review and comments, I appreciate them, blessings, Roy.
Comment from risktaker
A vivid description of a beautiful child. An innocent untarnished soul full of love and wonderment. I love the word choice and the scenes depicted. I like the comparisons and the photo. The rhyme adds to the effectiveness of the poem.Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2015
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A vivid description of a beautiful child. An innocent untarnished soul full of love and wonderment. I love the word choice and the scenes depicted. I like the comparisons and the photo. The rhyme adds to the effectiveness of the poem.Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2015
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Thank you, for this most encouraging, delightful review and comments, I appreciate them, blessings, Roy.
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Comment from adewpearl
a sweet family photo :-)
solid use of rhyming couplets
nice alliteration in the delightful pairing of zip and zap
good use of enjambment
lovely descriptive detail with a cheery tone
excellent imagery
I really like the spiritual component in the closing similes :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2015
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a sweet family photo :-)
solid use of rhyming couplets
nice alliteration in the delightful pairing of zip and zap
good use of enjambment
lovely descriptive detail with a cheery tone
excellent imagery
I really like the spiritual component in the closing similes :-) Brooke
Comment Written 21-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2015
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Thank you Brooke, for this most encouraging, delightful review and comments, I appreciate them, blessings, Roy.