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Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "Not"poems inspired by Psalm 23
51 total reviews
Comment from James Dooney
I like what it is that you have done here with this. Using the structure given I feel that you have conveyed things succinctly and very well.
reply by the author on 26-May-2014
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I like what it is that you have done here with this. Using the structure given I feel that you have conveyed things succinctly and very well.
Comment Written 25-May-2014
reply by the author on 26-May-2014
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Thank you for such a great review, James. I appreciate the encouragement.
Comment from krys123
W.j. Debi, A wonderfully written spiritual poem that is very inspirational, enlightening and quite stimulating. A very unique and pleasurable style of poetry that was quite enjoyable to read. Your rhyme and rhythm was very well done in need of your rhymes were forced, labor strained and the rhythm flow smoothly throughout your poem. This made it very easy for me to read it clearly. Thanks for sharing and posting and may you have a good one always.
Alex
reply by the author on 26-May-2014
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W.j. Debi, A wonderfully written spiritual poem that is very inspirational, enlightening and quite stimulating. A very unique and pleasurable style of poetry that was quite enjoyable to read. Your rhyme and rhythm was very well done in need of your rhymes were forced, labor strained and the rhythm flow smoothly throughout your poem. This made it very easy for me to read it clearly. Thanks for sharing and posting and may you have a good one always.
Alex
Comment Written 25-May-2014
reply by the author on 26-May-2014
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Thank you for a great review, Alex. I am glad you liked it. I appreciate the encouragement.
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You are so sincerely welcome
Comment from ArtGal
I have a six left, and I'm giving it to you for this awesome poem! I loved it all, the title, the picture, the wonderful wording, the poetry form, just wish you hadn't missed the contest! You truly couldn't have done any better than this, and love this the most:
Father, let my prayer also be
Thy will
Not mine
Be Done
I say Amen to this!!! I have to Bookcase for I'll read over and over again. God bless. . .Sharon
reply by the author on 26-May-2014
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I have a six left, and I'm giving it to you for this awesome poem! I loved it all, the title, the picture, the wonderful wording, the poetry form, just wish you hadn't missed the contest! You truly couldn't have done any better than this, and love this the most:
Father, let my prayer also be
Thy will
Not mine
Be Done
I say Amen to this!!! I have to Bookcase for I'll read over and over again. God bless. . .Sharon
Comment Written 25-May-2014
reply by the author on 26-May-2014
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Thank you for the wonderful review and shiny six stars. I am happy you enjoyed it so much.
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I definitely did, very much!
Comment from adewpearl
Your poem is in excellent word count and structure for the trinet
strong use of optional rhyme
good alliteration in flowed forth
excellent use of enjambment
a heartfelt, genuine poem of faith
Brooke
reply by the author on 24-May-2014
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Your poem is in excellent word count and structure for the trinet
strong use of optional rhyme
good alliteration in flowed forth
excellent use of enjambment
a heartfelt, genuine poem of faith
Brooke
Comment Written 24-May-2014
reply by the author on 24-May-2014
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Thank you, Brooke. I saw this form for the first time when they had the contest. Interesting format. I found it hard to count words instead of syllables though.
I appreciate your analysis and generous review. Debi
Comment from c_lucas
The last night that Jesus spent on earth, his thoughts were on others and not himself. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a good read.
reply by the author on 24-May-2014
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The last night that Jesus spent on earth, his thoughts were on others and not himself. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a good read.
Comment Written 24-May-2014
reply by the author on 24-May-2014
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Thank you for the generous review and kind comments about the writing, Charlie. I appreciate your insights on the topic of Jesus' last night as well. Thank you, Debi
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You're welcome, Debi. Charlie
Comment from Dean Kuch
Wow, Debi, what emotion this has! I think you've outdone yourself with this wonderfully written, very spiritually moving poem. And your very first Trinet too?
Double Wow!
reply by the author on 25-May-2014
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Wow, Debi, what emotion this has! I think you've outdone yourself with this wonderfully written, very spiritually moving poem. And your very first Trinet too?
Double Wow!
Comment Written 24-May-2014
reply by the author on 25-May-2014
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Thank you for such an encouraging review, Dean. Yes, my first Trinet. I never even heard of the form until a week ago when I stumbled across the results of the contest. I just have to keep trying something new.
Thanks for the double wow. You have me smiling. Debi
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You're quite welcome, Debi. Had I had a six star review left to award, it most definitely would have gone to you.
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Virtual six is always appreciated, Dean. Thank you again for a great review.
Comment from honeytree
I love the art work very much for these words.
Christ suffered for us all.
He knew the pain
He would have.
He was scared
He asked if this ordeal may not happened.
He went ahead with the suffering for us all.
honey tree
reply by the author on 25-May-2014
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I love the art work very much for these words.
Christ suffered for us all.
He knew the pain
He would have.
He was scared
He asked if this ordeal may not happened.
He went ahead with the suffering for us all.
honey tree
Comment Written 24-May-2014
reply by the author on 25-May-2014
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Yes, I agree the artwork is wonderful. Thank you for the insights on Christ and what he suffered for us. I appreciate the kind remarks. Debi
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I liked what you wrote very much.
Annie
Comment from nancyjam
Well done with this unique form.
so few words but such a powerful
statement and reflection on Christ's
agony and what it means to us.
reply by the author on 25-May-2014
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Well done with this unique form.
so few words but such a powerful
statement and reflection on Christ's
agony and what it means to us.
Comment Written 24-May-2014
reply by the author on 25-May-2014
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Thank you, Nancyjam. I appreciate the analysis and encouraging comments. Debi
Comment from mbagby23
The last words Christ spoke with his father. Humbling himself to die for others and their sins. Excellent in deed. Even the lay out on how it lined up like a cross.
reply by the author on 24-May-2014
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The last words Christ spoke with his father. Humbling himself to die for others and their sins. Excellent in deed. Even the lay out on how it lined up like a cross.
Comment Written 24-May-2014
reply by the author on 24-May-2014
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Thank you for the insightful remarks and the encouraging review, mbagby. I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment. Debi
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
What a shame you missed the contest for you surely hit the mark with this sad, yet breathtakingly beautiful spiritual poem.
The trinet format is accomplished perfectly and with great ease whilst the spiritual message is so powerful and deeply moving.
I truly wish I had a six star to give for you relly deserve it.
reply by the author on 24-May-2014
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What a shame you missed the contest for you surely hit the mark with this sad, yet breathtakingly beautiful spiritual poem.
The trinet format is accomplished perfectly and with great ease whilst the spiritual message is so powerful and deeply moving.
I truly wish I had a six star to give for you relly deserve it.
Comment Written 24-May-2014
reply by the author on 24-May-2014
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I appreciate the virtual six, Seken, but even more the wonderful comments. I'd never even heard of a trinet until I saw the results of the contest, but I wanted to give it a try. Thank you for the encouragement. Debi
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You're very welcome.