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Cellophane Child

a fairy story ... without fairies ... (2321 words)

66 total reviews 
Comment from cheyennewy
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Hi Sharyn,

I love this story and the use of the color purple. Your vivid imagination serves you well and this superb story is an example of your skill as a writer. This is a little long for my tastes but it is well written and flows down the page easily. Love your characters and the theme is wonderful. Well done....blessings, chey

 Comment Written 20-Jun-2013

reply by the author on 20-Jun-2013
    oh chey, I'm so delighted that you enjoyed this. It started out as an entry for the 500 word write but the words just kept piling up out of the treasure bucket I'm afraid dear! Glad you hung in there and thank you for your delightful six!
    :)Sharyn
reply by cheyennewy on 20-Jun-2013
    You are so welcome! Hugs chey
Comment from flippant
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This story's really clever. I like the use of foreshadowing, when you mention that Miranda could never possibly had anything to do with the deaths / she doesn't look like a murderer. The mysticism was an intriguing element - very well done.

 Comment Written 20-Jun-2013

reply by the author on 20-Jun-2013
    Thx so much flip! :)S
Comment from Gungalo
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Wow a well told story utilizing the colors and their amazing uses. Miranda was an exceptional child and mother. If only all would protect their children so. Awesome girl.

 Comment Written 20-Jun-2013

reply by the author on 20-Jun-2013
    thx Gungalo - I had some fun with this one :)S
reply by Gungalo on 20-Jun-2013
    I saw. LOL.
Comment from JM daSilva
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This is a different kind of story for you. Very entertaining. This story proves that crime does pay. That some people deserve to die to stop torturing others. I never thought of the color purple that way. The only part that I would remove would be the comment "if this were a normal story". Kudos to you.

 Comment Written 20-Jun-2013

reply by the author on 20-Jun-2013
    thx so much Joe - always like to try something different - got rid of "if this were a normal story". I have a natural "Storyteller" style and it can get in the way when I put myself in there too much, I realize. Much easier for me to write in first than third person ... dammit ...
reply by JM daSilva on 20-Jun-2013
    Story is great. I loved your dark side, I just gave back the advice you yourself gave me a long time ago in my first version of vincent. lol.
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2013
    got it - thx dear! biter bit, writer writ! :))))
Comment from Opal H.
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Okay... I have no idea what to think of this one... It is so creepy. I'm scared of that woman now! Wow, this is really a murderous horror story in the suit of a fairytale...

 Comment Written 20-Jun-2013

reply by the author on 20-Jun-2013
    aaah, no! Read Roald Dahl Opal ... you'll get it dear ... you're meant to go towards the light side ... :)
Comment from barbara.wilkey
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Sweet little Miranda isn't so sweet is she. I'm worried purple and yellow are two of my favorite colors. Oh no!! I enjoyed reading your post. Very good.

 Comment Written 20-Jun-2013

reply by the author on 20-Jun-2013
    Purple and yellow are MY two favorite colors, too, Barb - no worries. I haven't done in my poor hubby yet! :)Sharyn
reply by barbara.wilkey on 20-Jun-2013
    either have I
Comment from Dustybones
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crinkled slip of cellophane, spiraling upward in an errant wind, then slowly settling, and absorbing the colors of whatever reality surrounded her, including people
I think this comparison is good

 Comment Written 20-Jun-2013

reply by the author on 20-Jun-2013
    Thx DB! :)Sharyn
reply by Dustybones on 20-Jun-2013
    It is also a well thought out run of words, lol or did the flow of words just er - flow out? I like when it just comes from out of the blue sky.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2013
    out of the night sky, actually dear - it's the only time I get peace & quiet! :)))
Comment from Max Edon
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Another great posting! This story was very interesting. I thought it was bizarre, yet very beautiful. I liked the idea of a magic scarf.

 Comment Written 20-Jun-2013

reply by the author on 20-Jun-2013
    Bizarre is fun sometimes, Max, yes? Tx so much!
    :)Sharyn
reply by Max Edon on 20-Jun-2013
    You are welcome
Comment from Evelyn Fort Stewart
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Well, now girl this one might get you queened queen of fiction for sure, I almost never read fiction BUT then you're one of my special kiddo's so I went for it. I should of had one of those purple scarves to get when I needed to be freed of my abusive husband. Great imagination. God loves you and so do I.

 Comment Written 20-Jun-2013

reply by the author on 20-Jun-2013
    oh yes you certainly should Evelyn! But we'd have put him in MUCH worse crashes than this one! Thank you so much my dear!
    :)Sharyn
Comment from chasennov
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'Cellophane Child.' What colors can do for people to turn around their lives sometimes, but always plays a very important part in life's choices.

 Comment Written 20-Jun-2013

reply by the author on 20-Jun-2013
    thx chas! :)S
reply by chasennov on 20-Jun-2013
    You're very welcome, S.