All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "Soul's Voice"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Mystery Author,
And the answer is "yes". In my teenage years, back in the 60's, I had numerous occasions to leave my body. It was invigorating, to say the least. I used to float to the ceiling like I was in a bubble. I would even bounce off the ceiling sometimes. I'd wait for it... I could feel it. It was crazy. As I grew older, it happened less and less frequently. And now, at 62, it's only happened once in the last ten years.
There was one time in my early 20's when I actually floated right out my bedroom window! Now, does that sound weird or what? Voices warned me how dangerous this was, and in a flash I was back in bed... wide awake and a bit scared!
So I know exactly where you're coming from as I read your poem. Very familiar!
I like the ending,
"Shhhh ... not a sound
we leave you now, but
you'll know
when it's time
to come
Home"
Nicely penned!
Good Luck in the contest.
Kimbob
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2012
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Hi Mystery Author,
And the answer is "yes". In my teenage years, back in the 60's, I had numerous occasions to leave my body. It was invigorating, to say the least. I used to float to the ceiling like I was in a bubble. I would even bounce off the ceiling sometimes. I'd wait for it... I could feel it. It was crazy. As I grew older, it happened less and less frequently. And now, at 62, it's only happened once in the last ten years.
There was one time in my early 20's when I actually floated right out my bedroom window! Now, does that sound weird or what? Voices warned me how dangerous this was, and in a flash I was back in bed... wide awake and a bit scared!
So I know exactly where you're coming from as I read your poem. Very familiar!
I like the ending,
"Shhhh ... not a sound
we leave you now, but
you'll know
when it's time
to come
Home"
Nicely penned!
Good Luck in the contest.
Kimbob
Comment Written 02-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2012
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It's happened to me just once, when I was 17 Kimbob, and I've always remembered it - but hasn't happened again, much as I would like it to. So you're LUCKY! I'm so glad you resonated with my piece - thank you so much!
Comment from thecoe
i really enjoyed the presentation and the line spacing. i thought it made the poem. it was inviting and playful and innocent. good job
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2012
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i really enjoyed the presentation and the line spacing. i thought it made the poem. it was inviting and playful and innocent. good job
Comment Written 02-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2012
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thex so much!
Comment from fairy77
This is excellent Sharyn and I wish you the best in the contest.Adorable little one...awww.Beautifully portrayed.Have an excellent weekend.Liked sshh little one!Well done!beth fairy77.
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2012
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This is excellent Sharyn and I wish you the best in the contest.Adorable little one...awww.Beautifully portrayed.Have an excellent weekend.Liked sshh little one!Well done!beth fairy77.
Comment Written 02-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2012
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thx so much Beth - glad you enjoyed!!!
Comment from dannielleduran
Interesting work you have here. Excellent free verse. You know your child my well be right. This is an excellent way of remembering.
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2012
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Interesting work you have here. Excellent free verse. You know your child my well be right. This is an excellent way of remembering.
Comment Written 02-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2012
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thank you so much dannielle - yep - pretty sure he is ... guess we'll all have to wait a while to find out, hmm?
Comment from artemis53
Beautiful piece. I think of it more as in utero than dreams but that's just my take on your very beautiful words of childlike wonder. "Soon, you won't remember us but we will wait for you ...What a beautiful promise.
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2012
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Beautiful piece. I think of it more as in utero than dreams but that's just my take on your very beautiful words of childlike wonder. "Soon, you won't remember us but we will wait for you ...What a beautiful promise.
Comment Written 02-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2012
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thx Diane ... it's more the concept - the age can vary ... my son was about 4 when he said to my husband that he "remembered" where he came from before he was "here, in this world" ... but now he was "beginning to forget". So many mysteries!
Comment from Gungalo
to infinite midnight blue
our soul-stars streaking
to the dark side of the moon
and beyond the edgeless universe
to end of time itself
Fine fine writing in free verse format. You take us as far s we are willing to go.
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2012
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to infinite midnight blue
our soul-stars streaking
to the dark side of the moon
and beyond the edgeless universe
to end of time itself
Fine fine writing in free verse format. You take us as far s we are willing to go.
Comment Written 02-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2012
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glad you liked it G!
Comment from MidnightWriter4U
A delightful poetic work on the nonphysical self experienced in childhood--the age of innocence. The artwork goes very well with the theme of this work. I especially liked these lines: "while you can still remember us, leave your body ... drift and dream". Enjoyed!
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2012
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A delightful poetic work on the nonphysical self experienced in childhood--the age of innocence. The artwork goes very well with the theme of this work. I especially liked these lines: "while you can still remember us, leave your body ... drift and dream". Enjoyed!
Comment Written 02-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2012
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so glad you enjoyed this one MW!
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Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
I've never seen God but I did feel his arms around me once. It was weird and kind of creepy. LOL. Loved your little poem. Great job
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2012
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I've never seen God but I did feel his arms around me once. It was weird and kind of creepy. LOL. Loved your little poem. Great job
Comment Written 02-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2012
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Thank you so much my dear - have you ever written about that experience? I'm intrigued by different peoples' personal experiences with "God" - so many mysteries, yes?
Comment from ameen786
Shhhh....I know who you are and I am not telling/ my friend, your unique genre of writing captivates the readers' fascination right away; another beautiful write with soothing, pleasing words/phrases and there's no coming Home for you....you are already in paradise! I'd be surprised if this brilliant, creativity is not a winner; thanks for the treat.
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2012
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Shhhh....I know who you are and I am not telling/ my friend, your unique genre of writing captivates the readers' fascination right away; another beautiful write with soothing, pleasing words/phrases and there's no coming Home for you....you are already in paradise! I'd be surprised if this brilliant, creativity is not a winner; thanks for the treat.
Comment Written 02-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2012
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Well bless you, clever Ameen ... I'm so glad you enjoyed this one ...
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, mystery writer, you did a great job writing this free verse poem about the soul that speaks to us, great imagery, i wish you the best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2012
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this is very well written, mystery writer, you did a great job writing this free verse poem about the soul that speaks to us, great imagery, i wish you the best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 02-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2012
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thx sweets!