Highway of Loathing
A Life of Drugs!90 total reviews
Comment from cheery blossom
MY friend, I feel for you. Although I am a very old lady, never been drunk or "drugged up" in my life and probably wont be, Yet I am there door you and all others who have fallen prey to what you are experiencing. I am a retires RN and spent some years working with and for victims just like you. I wish I could help, but I can't--only you can. You and God. Your poem is heart-wrenching, You tell it like it is. My prayers go up for you. Cheery
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2011
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MY friend, I feel for you. Although I am a very old lady, never been drunk or "drugged up" in my life and probably wont be, Yet I am there door you and all others who have fallen prey to what you are experiencing. I am a retires RN and spent some years working with and for victims just like you. I wish I could help, but I can't--only you can. You and God. Your poem is heart-wrenching, You tell it like it is. My prayers go up for you. Cheery
Comment Written 24-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2011
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thank you very much for the kind words and open heart...dklrd
Comment from sweetsilversong
This is such a well written poem.
Penned with such thought and feeling.
One I enjoyed so much....An excellent read
Best wishes.
SSS
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2011
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This is such a well written poem.
Penned with such thought and feeling.
One I enjoyed so much....An excellent read
Best wishes.
SSS
Comment Written 24-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2011
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Thank you very much for the kind words...dklrd
Comment from Slush Pile
Very emotional, dramatic poetry. A place I never wish to be. Very nicely written. I have a small suggestion listed below for your consideration. Blessings, Slush Pile (deni)
As you can see, life is grand on the Highway of Loathing [on] in which I play. I WOULD CHANGE OUT THE WORD 'in' FOR 'on'.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2011
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Very emotional, dramatic poetry. A place I never wish to be. Very nicely written. I have a small suggestion listed below for your consideration. Blessings, Slush Pile (deni)
As you can see, life is grand on the Highway of Loathing [on] in which I play. I WOULD CHANGE OUT THE WORD 'in' FOR 'on'.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2011
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Thank you very much for the kind words...dklrd
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
oh, this is way too
dark for me, albeit
a well-thoughout, well-
written piece of verse,
with vivid imagery.
Margaret
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2011
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oh, this is way too
dark for me, albeit
a well-thoughout, well-
written piece of verse,
with vivid imagery.
Margaret
Comment Written 24-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2011
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Thank you very much for the kind words...dklrd
Comment from TheLovingMechanic
Excellent job capturing the essence of being addicted. From the writing I can see that you have experienced it. It is a terrible thing, but there is hope. I have been sober for just over a year, and life is so much better I can't put it into words. I hope that you are as well. One mistake I must point out is the use of the word "eject". I think you meant inject. I hate to be critical of good work, but I would want that mistake pointed out to me. Great job!
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2011
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Excellent job capturing the essence of being addicted. From the writing I can see that you have experienced it. It is a terrible thing, but there is hope. I have been sober for just over a year, and life is so much better I can't put it into words. I hope that you are as well. One mistake I must point out is the use of the word "eject". I think you meant inject. I hate to be critical of good work, but I would want that mistake pointed out to me. Great job!
Comment Written 24-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2011
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Thank you for your kind words...dklrd
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Your very welcome, I hope life treats you well.
Comment from Linda England Bonam
Wow! That was good! I loved your choice of words, again, in this piece! I read something of yours earlier, and you certainly have a way with words. Really enjoyed this one.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2011
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Wow! That was good! I loved your choice of words, again, in this piece! I read something of yours earlier, and you certainly have a way with words. Really enjoyed this one.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2011
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Thank you for such kind words, I do appreciate it...dklrd
Comment from missy98writer
dklrd
I enjoyed taking a trip to the dark side of poetry. Your poem is superbly written with vivid imagery. You write colorful words about the disease of addiction. You take the reader through the lows of drug addiction. The lines that stood out for me: "Striving to be all that I can be, I find the needle in which to eject the Potion of life into my weary veins that probably can't hold any more fluid. Heating the juice that will set me free, I think of all that has passed during My self-imposed imprisonment began a year ago when I found the joy of high." The art work you used was perfect for the theme. I hope you're not fighting such an addiction. Thanks for sharing your excellent dark poem with a message.
Melissa.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2011
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dklrd
I enjoyed taking a trip to the dark side of poetry. Your poem is superbly written with vivid imagery. You write colorful words about the disease of addiction. You take the reader through the lows of drug addiction. The lines that stood out for me: "Striving to be all that I can be, I find the needle in which to eject the Potion of life into my weary veins that probably can't hold any more fluid. Heating the juice that will set me free, I think of all that has passed during My self-imposed imprisonment began a year ago when I found the joy of high." The art work you used was perfect for the theme. I hope you're not fighting such an addiction. Thanks for sharing your excellent dark poem with a message.
Melissa.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2011
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WOW! Thank you for such a great review, I do appreciate it...dklrd
Comment from Judian James
This write is tragically compelling. How horrific to be in such a situation, knowing you're doomed unless something changes soon. You have some very good lines in this piece:
"The noise of my inner soul dying is barely heard over the sound of the city." to "Closing my eyes, a thought escapes from my lips - "Let this be the time". You have captured and conveyed well the pain suffered through addiction.
A few little nits: I'd change out one of the "play"s in stanza two and "serum" is spelled with an "e" not a "y".
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2011
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This write is tragically compelling. How horrific to be in such a situation, knowing you're doomed unless something changes soon. You have some very good lines in this piece:
"The noise of my inner soul dying is barely heard over the sound of the city." to "Closing my eyes, a thought escapes from my lips - "Let this be the time". You have captured and conveyed well the pain suffered through addiction.
A few little nits: I'd change out one of the "play"s in stanza two and "serum" is spelled with an "e" not a "y".
Comment Written 24-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2011
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Thank you very much for the kind review and comments, it is greatly appreciated...dklrd
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my pleasure. I hope you're okay
Comment from Just2Write
You do an excellent job of letting us see the inner thoughts and the working mind of an addict. The irony of wanting to be free, then seeking freedom in the very thing that traps him and keeps him imprisoned.
I have no idea what it is like to be addicted to something - but after reading this poem - I know I won't be trying any mind altering drugs any time soon.
Excellent writing here.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2011
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You do an excellent job of letting us see the inner thoughts and the working mind of an addict. The irony of wanting to be free, then seeking freedom in the very thing that traps him and keeps him imprisoned.
I have no idea what it is like to be addicted to something - but after reading this poem - I know I won't be trying any mind altering drugs any time soon.
Excellent writing here.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2011
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Thank you very much for the kind words...dklrd
Comment from Laurie Clayton
To say that I enjoyed this poem, seems wrong, but I did.
I enjoyed it for all the right reasons, composition, descriptive words, true life imagery, flow and message are all worthy of my enjoyment.
The topic is a harsh reality for those with a hardcore addiction.
A well written and engaging write.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2011
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To say that I enjoyed this poem, seems wrong, but I did.
I enjoyed it for all the right reasons, composition, descriptive words, true life imagery, flow and message are all worthy of my enjoyment.
The topic is a harsh reality for those with a hardcore addiction.
A well written and engaging write.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2011
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2011
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thank you for the very kind words...dklrd
