Quietude
Heroic Crown Of Sonnets - 15 interlinked sonnets.84 total reviews
Comment from jshep
If I am not mistaken, Gungalo, in a crown of royal sonnets the final line has to be the same as the first line of the first sonnet. I could be wrong but I have written a few of these myself and I thought that was a requirement. This is an amazing accomplishment. I do believe there is not one single flaw in the meter and rhyme. Fabulous.
And I love the message of these sonnets for I have found that special place myself, and you have done a wonderful job of showing the reader through your words how that special place feels and affects ones life.
Can you now picture why my special place(omit the comma) is where I come to sit and contemplate- ABSOLUTELY!
Then you go on to encourage others to find that special place in themselves - the way to contentment in life and a way to manage to stress of life.
Bravo, a brilliant accomplishment and you should feel very proud. This is truly worthy of exceptional, IMHO. JOycexx
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2010
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If I am not mistaken, Gungalo, in a crown of royal sonnets the final line has to be the same as the first line of the first sonnet. I could be wrong but I have written a few of these myself and I thought that was a requirement. This is an amazing accomplishment. I do believe there is not one single flaw in the meter and rhyme. Fabulous.
And I love the message of these sonnets for I have found that special place myself, and you have done a wonderful job of showing the reader through your words how that special place feels and affects ones life.
Can you now picture why my special place(omit the comma) is where I come to sit and contemplate- ABSOLUTELY!
Then you go on to encourage others to find that special place in themselves - the way to contentment in life and a way to manage to stress of life.
Bravo, a brilliant accomplishment and you should feel very proud. This is truly worthy of exceptional, IMHO. JOycexx
Comment Written 26-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2010
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Hi! Thanks so very much for this wonderful review. To clarify, this is not a Crown of Royal Sonnets but a Heroic Crown of Sonnets. There's a difference:
Heroic Crown Of Sonnets
This is a sequence of 15 Sonnets linked, as in the Crown of Sonnets, by repeating the last line of each Sonnet as the first line of the succeeding Sonnet and so on. The final line of the 14th Sonnet will be the first line of the 1st Sonnet. Now to the 15th and final Sonnet... this is made up of the first lines of the previous 14 Sonnets, still keeping within the same rhyme scheme.
Do you see what it is now? That last sonnet is made up of each of the FIRST lines of the previous 14 sonnets. Believe me, following this sequence took total concentration. LOL. That's why I just sat for 5 hours straight and stuck to it.
Again, how wonderful this review is. I shall go and remove that comma for you are right ... it does not belong there!!!
MUAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH. Would love to read yours if they are here.
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Funny, I just looked up and realized the 15th sonnet is comprised of the first lines of the previous 14 sonnets. I have written the crown of heroic sonnets with the 7 sonnets. I also have written a comlation of 15 or so sonnets, but did not follow the rule with the final sonnet. I would happy to send them to you in a pm as I delete my work often on this site as I am constantly seeking to get published and do not want my work accumulating on line. I will go back in my files and see what I can find just so you can read what someone else has done with a similar style.
Again a wonderful achievement and there are few on this site that can accomplish that and the one that originally offered the contest for the series of 7 is no longer on this site, but he pops in and reads and I keep in touch with him on facebook. He is a true sonneteer. Joycexx
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You humble me Joyce, you really do. I am proud to have accomplished this. A year ago I couldn't for the life of me get the iambic thing right. One day it just popped into my head and there it was. I still sometimes flip the de dums about but see them after it is finished ... usually. Heheh.
Thanks again poet. Oh may I ask who he is, the sonneteer? I may know him. That would be fun.
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He was known here as Kaff, Kaff, but his name is Robert Anderson and he can be found on Facebook and he has a website that escapes me at the moment, but I can get it for you if you like. He certainly knows who I am and I would love for him to read your accomplishment which I will tell him about. :)xxx
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Also, I forgot, my best friend and writing partner, who I met on Fanstory a couple of years ago (he is no longer on the site) is also an amazing sonneteer who worked with me with the meter, and just like you, one day I awoke and it clicked and I was thinking in iambic pentameter. Since then I have been converted to free verse, and I am almost finished with a book I will get published on my journey with two cancers. So my first love was sonnets, but I must say, I love free verse. I am sure I have bored you enough, but I just am so delighted to see another person on site that loves the sonnet.
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You'll never bore me, girl. I too have a book out ... my first and it's all Free Verse. I love all the styles and have even written almost 200 now of my own. One learning book coming up.
Sorry to hear of your bouts with the big C. It seems so many are plagued with it these days. I work in a hospital so I see.
I love that you love sonnets too. Isn't it amazing how we just poofed and learned iambs? LOL.
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Gungalo,
A heroic crown of sonnets is an ambitious write and one you managed very well. It think it is difficult to remain focused in such a long write...but the reward of praise is worth the toil. I love sonnets and studied hard to learn the iambic pentameter. One who has never written in that form may not realize how very hard it is. Well done. Blessings, chey
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2010
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Hi Gungalo,
A heroic crown of sonnets is an ambitious write and one you managed very well. It think it is difficult to remain focused in such a long write...but the reward of praise is worth the toil. I love sonnets and studied hard to learn the iambic pentameter. One who has never written in that form may not realize how very hard it is. Well done. Blessings, chey
Comment Written 26-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2010
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Though it took some time, I actually loved doing it. It is totally me so all you see and read in there is my heart and soul. My inspiration is a wonderful man. Thanks so much chey for a great review of this endeavor. MUAHHHHHHHHH>
Comment from marcellawachtel
This group of sonnets made such very pleasant reading. I love your images and I love your optimism and your recognition of true beauty. Actually, it only came to me after re-reading, because it requires understanding each one before getting into the next. I am not sharp enough to scanh and understand. I must read-re-read before I go on. I was interested in your use of 'tehelet'. n That particular blue comes from a sea creature, and is used to dye a certain knotted cord for ritual garment worn by observent Jewish men. For manyyears nobody knew exactly to what color this biblical direction pertained butr about 30 years ago a certain man did lots of research and deep-sea diving and cane up with the formula for making 'tehelet'. But I digress. You have written a most beautiful, most impressive poem. My favorite line is the last: contentment comes to those who knew it would ./
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2010
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This group of sonnets made such very pleasant reading. I love your images and I love your optimism and your recognition of true beauty. Actually, it only came to me after re-reading, because it requires understanding each one before getting into the next. I am not sharp enough to scanh and understand. I must read-re-read before I go on. I was interested in your use of 'tehelet'. n That particular blue comes from a sea creature, and is used to dye a certain knotted cord for ritual garment worn by observent Jewish men. For manyyears nobody knew exactly to what color this biblical direction pertained butr about 30 years ago a certain man did lots of research and deep-sea diving and cane up with the formula for making 'tehelet'. But I digress. You have written a most beautiful, most impressive poem. My favorite line is the last: contentment comes to those who knew it would ./
Comment Written 26-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2010
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Sigh, what a gorgeous review of this and I love that you know what tehelet is. You humble me, really, with such praise. This poem is me. My heart and soul are in here. Now you know me. Thanks so very much. So very much.
Comment from missy98writer
Gungalo,
Lord have mercy, now it took me time to read your exquisitely written series of interlocking sonnets. I'm impressed by the writing and the amount of time it took you to write. So I'm going to give you a well deserved review. Cleaver use of alliteration and metaphors such as quiet thought elude, world of dreams, silence paints in colored hues, heart defines, hushed between, inner flight, place of peace to ponder, heart like a drum, shallow shadows softly set, bejweled amulet, hearts in purple pearls, folded in blue, streak in silky streams of cobalt swirls, love's hand, silver showers waterfalls, mimic dawn, misty silhouettes, rainbow danced, magic has enhanced, soliloquy serene, loving words is born, love I glean, arms it's shorn, waves of crime, bury it beneath the sea, world of powder pink, kissed os sweetly my own soul, poet's pen, muse of mine created the safe spot, travel through the sky, feel worthwhile, dare to me beguile, quiet breeze, rhyme for lover's sake, emotions then can scream, I float inside, epoch presentation, magic in these words, portal's open view, self-imposed exile, urgency of trial, arms of love, finer flight, raftered loft, infused bliss, stillness wafts on high, Mister Moon, soft sigh, air's refill, beauty sings its song in echoed trill, soft lips partake, passion being sown, trouble stumbling blocks, contentment comes, soul that's free, quiet thought elude and make me mimic dawn. Good grief, that was a longggggggggg poem! Awesome job writing this I'm doing an ovation and raising my cup to you in a toast. Thanks for sharing your poetic art.
Melissa.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2010
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Gungalo,
Lord have mercy, now it took me time to read your exquisitely written series of interlocking sonnets. I'm impressed by the writing and the amount of time it took you to write. So I'm going to give you a well deserved review. Cleaver use of alliteration and metaphors such as quiet thought elude, world of dreams, silence paints in colored hues, heart defines, hushed between, inner flight, place of peace to ponder, heart like a drum, shallow shadows softly set, bejweled amulet, hearts in purple pearls, folded in blue, streak in silky streams of cobalt swirls, love's hand, silver showers waterfalls, mimic dawn, misty silhouettes, rainbow danced, magic has enhanced, soliloquy serene, loving words is born, love I glean, arms it's shorn, waves of crime, bury it beneath the sea, world of powder pink, kissed os sweetly my own soul, poet's pen, muse of mine created the safe spot, travel through the sky, feel worthwhile, dare to me beguile, quiet breeze, rhyme for lover's sake, emotions then can scream, I float inside, epoch presentation, magic in these words, portal's open view, self-imposed exile, urgency of trial, arms of love, finer flight, raftered loft, infused bliss, stillness wafts on high, Mister Moon, soft sigh, air's refill, beauty sings its song in echoed trill, soft lips partake, passion being sown, trouble stumbling blocks, contentment comes, soul that's free, quiet thought elude and make me mimic dawn. Good grief, that was a longggggggggg poem! Awesome job writing this I'm doing an ovation and raising my cup to you in a toast. Thanks for sharing your poetic art.
Melissa.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2010
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Whew girl! ow that is a review!!!!!! YOu blow my mind with such praise and my smile could light up the whole of the universe. That took you time, too!!!! I appreciate that you really read it and saw those things. This is me. My place to be and my heart and soul are in this write. Thank you so much, hardly seems enough to say, but I truly mean it, poet. MUAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH.
Hey, I'll KLINK to you and with you anytime!!!
KLINK KLINK!!!
MUAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH.
Comment from fictionwriter
It is a long thing to read too. These aren't really my favorites, because I seem to lose a sense of what's being put across, but I really loved the last bit. Great job.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2010
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It is a long thing to read too. These aren't really my favorites, because I seem to lose a sense of what's being put across, but I really loved the last bit. Great job.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2010
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Thanks so much poet and I really appreciate the honesty. It is a long one to read, actually 15 of them.
Comment from RaymondJohn
A very comprehensive examination of your place in the universe. I know we never really understand our own importance. The imagery shows a real place but what and where are left to the imagination. Excellent write. Ray.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2010
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A very comprehensive examination of your place in the universe. I know we never really understand our own importance. The imagery shows a real place but what and where are left to the imagination. Excellent write. Ray.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2010
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Thanks Ray. I really do know where my place is. This write IS me. Awesome review. MUAHHHHHHHHHHHHHH.
Comment from minopavlic
Although I haven't read much of your work, by this submission I see an articulate author, whose very talent radiates from your written words.
Mino
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2010
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Although I haven't read much of your work, by this submission I see an articulate author, whose very talent radiates from your written words.
Mino
Comment Written 26-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2010
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Thank you, no_obstacle. this write is definitely all me. And boy did I pour my heart and soul into it. What wonderful words you have left for me here. Sighhhhhhhhhhhh.
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You certainly earned the recognition and respect.
Mino
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Sigh, you humble me.
Comment from jlsavell
Gungalo, wow..I read this yesterday and had to wait till today to award it with a six. This is truly a tour de force! The persona's diction in this crown is eloquent, graceful and portrays such a wise and grateful stance on life and all of its facets. I as a reader was certainly fastened to the page of this brilliant work..thank you for sharing!!!!!!! jlsavell .
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2010
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Gungalo, wow..I read this yesterday and had to wait till today to award it with a six. This is truly a tour de force! The persona's diction in this crown is eloquent, graceful and portrays such a wise and grateful stance on life and all of its facets. I as a reader was certainly fastened to the page of this brilliant work..thank you for sharing!!!!!!! jlsavell .
Comment Written 26-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2010
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Wow! YOU!!! What a compliment this is and makes my smile just glow so bright. Thank you and for the six stars too. I'm blown away by your review you.
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
My - you've obviously worked
long and hard with this - the
words flowing well, and I'm
impressed how you've managed to
keep rhyme throughout such a long
piece.
Well done, my friend.
Margaret.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2010
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My - you've obviously worked
long and hard with this - the
words flowing well, and I'm
impressed how you've managed to
keep rhyme throughout such a long
piece.
Well done, my friend.
Margaret.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2010
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Thank you Margaret. I love sonnets but I don't think I'll be doing this again any time real soon. You are right about keeping up while writing it. I actually had an outline to follow that I made up. Just on what thoughts should be in each sonnet. I also wrote the last sonnet first and worked off of it. Made it easier.
Comment from acvguard11
great job...i really enjoyed reading this....maybe add a picture to add alittle more flavor but overall it is very well written..great job and keep writing
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2010
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great job...i really enjoyed reading this....maybe add a picture to add alittle more flavor but overall it is very well written..great job and keep writing
Comment Written 26-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2010
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Thought about a picture but I think it would actually ruin the write. There is no picture that could adequately express the meaning behind the words. Sooooooooooo, NOT. LOL, thank you so very much for a fantastic review.