Comment from m_plum

Excellent

I really liked this. Clever format, really well written and also a great topic. I cant imagine this format would be easy to write, but you've surely succeeeded here. My favourite line is 'lapses of loss which we cannot reclaim' - so true. Great work!!!

 Comment Written 26-Mar-2009

Comment from Jazh

Excellent

This is a very interesting poem, Sue. I haven't read a lot of Dylan Thomas, but enjoyed this. The form takes some getting used to, but is intriguing. I like the impact of those two repeated lines. Cheers. :)

 Comment Written 25-Mar-2009

Comment from Dave-Aranda-Richards

Excellent

Very well stated. He goes around seeking who he can devour. But the great thing is the liar has lost. Still he finds ways to sneak in a jab or two. I loved it 60's.

Dave

 Comment Written 25-Mar-2009

Comment from jaeladarling

Excellent

Oh, I love it! I can totally identify, and have gained some determination from this piece. I'd so give you a six if I had one. This is the stuff that changes lives. :) Thanks so much for sharing!

 Comment Written 25-Mar-2009

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reply by the author on 26-Mar-2009

Jaela, no number of stars can compete with you saying that you have gained some determination from this piece! Me? I don't live with regret. Now guilt? That's another topic! HA! But, I do have some people who are close to me who do speak of regrets and I suppose that is what prompted me to write this. I suppose my rationale is that I made decisions based on what I knew at the time and that's that. And, I continue to make decisions daily, as we all do. We do the best we can. The good news is we always have today and tomorrow!! Yay!!! I'll take your sixer to heart. Thanks so much for sharing your feelings and for your great review. Fondly, Sue

Comment from jack silver

Excellent

this was a well thought out poem. it was catchy and i enjoyed reading every word over and over again. if i had a six star left i would give it to this one. look forward to reading more!

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 Comment Written 25-Mar-2009

Comment from debskatz

Excellent

Hey Sue,

Good Job!! I really like this one. I love the theme of not listening to that taunting voice of regret that steals our present moments. Terrific! Thank you so much for sharing it!

smiles,

deb

 Comment Written 25-Mar-2009

Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

I would rather you steal from me. I can forgive that. To lie to me is to end any form of a relationship. Theives are preferred over liars. Very well written with good imagery and descriptive scheme.

 Comment Written 25-Mar-2009

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reply by the author on 25-Mar-2009

Remember the saying, "Scratch a liar, find a thief". They are both from the same cloth: deceptive. Same with "regrets". It's all a lie one can get plagued with. Listening to the lies of shouldas, couldas. wouldas. And then it robs you of so much. Just a bit of observance. Thanks much for your great review. Sue

reply by c_lucas on 25-Mar-2009

You're welcome, Sue. Charlie

Comment from NightWriter

Excellent

"The Liar" is an incredibly well written and creative poem. I like its message, to beware of the ravages of regret. Perfectly stated with great rhythm and rhyming too. Well done.

 Comment Written 25-Mar-2009

Comment from findingmyroom

Excellent

Sue, this is a really cool form, and your theme suits it extremely well. "Thieving our time" is an apt description of how a wasted emotion like regret behaves. Your poem conveys conclusively the air of warning and wariness. I wish I had a six star left. :/ Nice job.

 Comment Written 25-Mar-2009

Comment from Carol D Parker

Excellent

I read your notes but am still befuddled. I just know that the poem is wonderful. The subject matter is excellent. Regret ia also a robber. Your metaphors are wonderful. You use such strong powerful language. Your words follow suit. It's a great reminder not to let anything take away our joy. Beautiful work.
Delora

 Comment Written 25-Mar-2009

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reply by the author on 25-Mar-2009

Yes, it is a robber; of present, future and our self-confidence (as my last stanza says: it's a thief).

Can you clarify what you mean about your being 'befuddled'? Was I not clear on something??

Thanks so much for your great review!

Sue

reply by Carol D Parker on 25-Mar-2009

I just couldn't grasp all that language about what the rules of the form of poetry are. Befuddled is an old word that should only be used in poetry. I'm sorry if I befuddled you. (That's the last time I use it, I swear.)
Best,
Delora

reply by the author on 25-Mar-2009

HA! No, I know what befuddled is, but I thought you meant something within the poem still had you stumped.

Read Dylan Thomas's poem as referred to below. It's wonderful!
You'll get a feel for the structure.

:-))
Sue

reply by Carol D Parker on 25-Mar-2009

No your poem is perfect. I had no trouble with it.
Delora