CSP: A Collection of Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 38 "Break This Heart"A collection of poetry
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Comment from Bryana
I love everything about this poem. The structure, rhyme, rhythm and flow. One of the best poems I've read to day.
It's very sad specially this stanza ...
Growing cold from loneliness
A slow death does it bring
Stroke me with your gentleness
Then hurt me with your sting
Have a nice week. Hugs, Ana
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2009
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I love everything about this poem. The structure, rhyme, rhythm and flow. One of the best poems I've read to day.
It's very sad specially this stanza ...
Growing cold from loneliness
A slow death does it bring
Stroke me with your gentleness
Then hurt me with your sting
Have a nice week. Hugs, Ana
Comment Written 02-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2009
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Wow! Thanks for your awesome review. And for highlighting the words you liked best. With warmest regards, Sue
Comment from MsRefusenik
No wonder it's voted all time best--it's quite a poem. The last stanza is my favorite. It is a passionate poem spoken by someone who can barely feel passion or anything anymore. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2009
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No wonder it's voted all time best--it's quite a poem. The last stanza is my favorite. It is a passionate poem spoken by someone who can barely feel passion or anything anymore. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2009
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The lack of passion for even the slightest things in life can be so numbing. So glad you read this as intended. And for highlighting the stanza you liked best. Your generous review is so appreciated. With regards, Sue
Comment from words
You captured that longing ...the longing to feel. Liked the language and the images that it invoked. Especially loved these two lines:
"Stain it all in shades of gray
Contrasting highs and lows " Very imaginative use of images
"Break my heart to let me know
There's something left to feel" Great description of that state of no love and no risk. Great JoB!! Looking forward to reading more
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2009
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You captured that longing ...the longing to feel. Liked the language and the images that it invoked. Especially loved these two lines:
"Stain it all in shades of gray
Contrasting highs and lows " Very imaginative use of images
"Break my heart to let me know
There's something left to feel" Great description of that state of no love and no risk. Great JoB!! Looking forward to reading more
Comment Written 02-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2009
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words, so glad you read it as intended. Thank you for highlighting the lines which you really liked. Means a lot. And thank you for your very generous review. With regards, Sue
Comment from honeytree
The art work is really something sharing very special words.
Sometimes when we have a broken heart we move on searching for love once again feeling positive. When the time is right our lives will be just wonderful feeling the wondrous gift of love and joy.
LOVE AND HAPPINESS FOR EVER.
Honeytree.
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The art work is really something sharing very special words.
Sometimes when we have a broken heart we move on searching for love once again feeling positive. When the time is right our lives will be just wonderful feeling the wondrous gift of love and joy.
LOVE AND HAPPINESS FOR EVER.
Honeytree.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2009
Comment from sharon fallis
A very wonderfully written poem. Such a lovely format and the context is exemplary. Great word choices and usage. Good rhyme and rhythm. Nice visuals and the imagery is good. Sharon
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2009
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A very wonderfully written poem. Such a lovely format and the context is exemplary. Great word choices and usage. Good rhyme and rhythm. Nice visuals and the imagery is good. Sharon
Comment Written 02-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2009
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Sharon, thank you for your most generous review. I appreciate all of your comments and compliments on this poem. Means so much. With regards, Sue
Comment from Summer Falls
Oh, this is a sad tale. Wanting to hurt, just to feel again? Sometimes that is what it takes to be able to pick up the pieces and appreciate life again, huh?
The poem flowed well, rhymed perfectly and when read out loud, the rhythm was without a hitch.
Good Job! My fav stanza:
Soften up this calloused soul
Before it turns to steel
Break my heart to let me know
There's something left to feel
Summer
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2009
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Oh, this is a sad tale. Wanting to hurt, just to feel again? Sometimes that is what it takes to be able to pick up the pieces and appreciate life again, huh?
The poem flowed well, rhymed perfectly and when read out loud, the rhythm was without a hitch.
Good Job! My fav stanza:
Soften up this calloused soul
Before it turns to steel
Break my heart to let me know
There's something left to feel
Summer
Comment Written 01-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2009
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Summer, thanks for saying which was your favorite stanza. Always good to hear. And thank you for your lovely comments and compliments. With warmest regards, Sue
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You're welcome, Sue!
Comment from RapturedHeart
Oh, Sue, how painfully 'cold'. Well done. Such brilliant illustrations here: Stroke me with your gentleness
Then hurt me with your sting
Color me with laughter's song
Enlighten me by prose
Stain it all in shades of gray
Contrasting highs and lows - guess I could copy the whole poem, as it is profound in its quest for feeling. Sure hoping you're coming out of the cold. Love and prayers:),
Heather
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2009
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Oh, Sue, how painfully 'cold'. Well done. Such brilliant illustrations here: Stroke me with your gentleness
Then hurt me with your sting
Color me with laughter's song
Enlighten me by prose
Stain it all in shades of gray
Contrasting highs and lows - guess I could copy the whole poem, as it is profound in its quest for feeling. Sure hoping you're coming out of the cold. Love and prayers:),
Heather
Comment Written 01-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2009
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Heather, I wrote this when I thought I didn't have a word to say or write. Being what was inside of me at the time was not fun, but a release - or at least an acknowledgement to myself how I felt. Thank you for your wonderful comments and compliments. Love and prayers to you, also.....Sue
Comment from jmkenpo
Often we will accept even pain just to re-affirm that we are able to feel at all. Good job driving that point home. I really enjoyed this poem. Jmkenpo
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Often we will accept even pain just to re-affirm that we are able to feel at all. Good job driving that point home. I really enjoyed this poem. Jmkenpo
Comment Written 01-Mar-2009
Comment from Oatmeal
Sixteezkid,
The poem made for a nice read. The theme was well thought out. The rhyming was done very well. The flow was smooth.
Atmosphere is full of vivid and delightful descriptions.
I saw no SPAG and no typos. Everything looked in place.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
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Sixteezkid,
The poem made for a nice read. The theme was well thought out. The rhyming was done very well. The flow was smooth.
Atmosphere is full of vivid and delightful descriptions.
I saw no SPAG and no typos. Everything looked in place.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
Comment Written 01-Mar-2009
Comment from jojosug
Feeling numb is perhaps the worse feeling of all, its as if nothing matters anymore. You've captured it beautifully in this poem and it was a real pleasure to read.
Jo
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2009
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Feeling numb is perhaps the worse feeling of all, its as if nothing matters anymore. You've captured it beautifully in this poem and it was a real pleasure to read.
Jo
Comment Written 01-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2009
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Jo, you sure nailed it. To laugh or cry is where we need to be. Numbness goes beyond emptiness. So glad you read it as it was intended. And thank you for your great review. With regards, Sue