CSP: A Collection of Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 42 "Tangible Hope"A collection of poetry
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Comment from amada
I like your song of love and optimism. I hope you are feeling much better this day. I like this sentence the most. "The sun no longer in eclipse His presence rids my pain "
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2009
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I like your song of love and optimism. I hope you are feeling much better this day. I like this sentence the most. "The sun no longer in eclipse His presence rids my pain "
Comment Written 23-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2009
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amada, thank you for highlighting the lines you liked best. Always good to hear. Thank you for your very kind review and compliments. With regards, Sue
Comment from jdrhye
Very nicely written and I love the imagery you have incorporated here. The picture is well suited as well. Your message is clear and speaks volumes to faith, hope and the lift of negative feelings through a helping hand. This helping hand could be a true friend intuned to plight as well as God! Gives the reader a chance to have a personal perspective.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2009
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Very nicely written and I love the imagery you have incorporated here. The picture is well suited as well. Your message is clear and speaks volumes to faith, hope and the lift of negative feelings through a helping hand. This helping hand could be a true friend intuned to plight as well as God! Gives the reader a chance to have a personal perspective.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2009
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Thanks for your close read and very kind comments. And thank you for your generous review. With regards, Sue :-)
Comment from Annelisa
This is a lovely poem. The rhymes are perfect. It was a sweet and heart-warming. I'm glad that your feeling better. Annelisa
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2009
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This is a lovely poem. The rhymes are perfect. It was a sweet and heart-warming. I'm glad that your feeling better. Annelisa
Comment Written 23-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2009
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Hi Annelisa, thank you for your very kind compliments and review. And your lovely words. With regards, Sue
Comment from jeslaf
Sounds like a love story between you and Jesus, but it's got broader appeal, for sure. This is very uplifting and is a good follow-up to the piece on depression. :)
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2009
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Sounds like a love story between you and Jesus, but it's got broader appeal, for sure. This is very uplifting and is a good follow-up to the piece on depression. :)
Comment Written 23-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2009
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The "Lazarus" line wouldn't have anything to do with that, would it? Ha! No, just the knowledge of how much just a touch can help. Thanks so much for your great review. With regards, Sue
Comment from Joan E.
Hope it was the so-called three day flu like my bout--homebound three days and then gradually feeling better.
My attention was caught first by your powerful title and picture. Then, your words took hold. I had to read your poem twice, because I could not believe at first that you communicated those remarkable feelings in rhyme.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2009
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Hope it was the so-called three day flu like my bout--homebound three days and then gradually feeling better.
My attention was caught first by your powerful title and picture. Then, your words took hold. I had to read your poem twice, because I could not believe at first that you communicated those remarkable feelings in rhyme.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2009
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Joan, it always makes me very happy when you really like my work. Thank you for remarking on the title and artwork, also. Many thanks, Sue
Comment from joan marie
Don't worry about me. Read when you can. No need to reply. When I had my operation I had 100 pm's and answered them all never considering how many replies I'd get. Unless someone specifically asks me something or makes a comment requiring one back I don't worry about me. This is a great write, joan marie Glad you're better.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2009
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Don't worry about me. Read when you can. No need to reply. When I had my operation I had 100 pm's and answered them all never considering how many replies I'd get. Unless someone specifically asks me something or makes a comment requiring one back I don't worry about me. This is a great write, joan marie Glad you're better.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2009
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Hi Joan, yes, I am doing a bit better today. I do want to thank you for your review. Always appreciated from you. Hope you're doing well. Sue
Comment from fictionwriter
What a great thing to have in your life. Someone who can raise you up when your down and save your life when you're drowning in sorrow. Great little poem
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What a great thing to have in your life. Someone who can raise you up when your down and save your life when you're drowning in sorrow. Great little poem
Comment Written 23-Feb-2009
Comment from jaeladarling
I like that second-to-last line, "Like Lazarus called to come forth". What imagery! The picture you chose emphasizes the freedom so wonderfully expressed in your poem. Great style and form. Thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2009
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I like that second-to-last line, "Like Lazarus called to come forth". What imagery! The picture you chose emphasizes the freedom so wonderfully expressed in your poem. Great style and form. Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 23-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2009
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Jaela, thanks for saying you liked that line. I was hoping it wasn't too mellow dramatic, as that is not what I intended. Thank you for your very kind review and compliments, Sue
Comment from Domino
Hi, Sue.
Stunning picture and presenation.
Only nit, and maybe I'm missing something, is 'his shadow'. This infers maybe a sinister cloud or an imagination? Perhaps, if you're inferring fresh hope and reality maybe his 'presence, support, shoulder' or something similar? Apart from that it's beautifully rhymed and flows like silk. A lovely positive message too. Ray xx
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2009
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Hi, Sue.
Stunning picture and presenation.
Only nit, and maybe I'm missing something, is 'his shadow'. This infers maybe a sinister cloud or an imagination? Perhaps, if you're inferring fresh hope and reality maybe his 'presence, support, shoulder' or something similar? Apart from that it's beautifully rhymed and flows like silk. A lovely positive message too. Ray xx
Comment Written 23-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2009
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Yes, you are right. I was trying to come off the metaphor of the sun no longer eclipsed. But, yes....a shadow does infer a "darker' side. Thanks so much for the suggested works. Will work on that straight away. And thanks for your very kind review. Ray....Always, Sue
Comment from MJMuraco
Your poem is beautiful. The rhyming and rhythm is wonderful as is the presentation. I hope that you are feeling better and will be back soon.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2009
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Your poem is beautiful. The rhyming and rhythm is wonderful as is the presentation. I hope that you are feeling better and will be back soon.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2009
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Yeah, I feel guilty not reviewing and responding. It took me 2 days to even concentrate on writing this. But needed to in order to keep my mind busy. I'll be fine in a few. Thanks so much for your lovely review and kind words. With regards, Sue