CSP: A Collection of Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 45 "The Golden Rule"A collection of poetry
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Comment from jaeladarling
A very important rule to live by, shown in a very well-written poem! You do so many forms so well, and this is no exception. Thanks for sharing this with us!
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2009
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A very important rule to live by, shown in a very well-written poem! You do so many forms so well, and this is no exception. Thanks for sharing this with us!
Comment Written 17-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2009
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Jaela, when I was young, the Golden Rule was taught to us CONSTANTLY and in every year throughout grade school. Don't think that happens now. Thanks so much for your great review and kind compliments. With regards, Sue
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Not so much now, probably because it's biblically-based (Luke 6:31 - And as you would that men should do to you, do you also to them likewise).
It was ground into our brains when I was a kid too, but I'd be lucky to find a handful of kids now that know what it is.
Comment from Carol D Parker
A rictameter huh? Just when I thought it was safe to go back in the poetry pool. What a delightful form of poetry. I'd like to try that. You certainly did a great job on it. You used all the right words to get the message across. Great job!
Delora
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2009
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A rictameter huh? Just when I thought it was safe to go back in the poetry pool. What a delightful form of poetry. I'd like to try that. You certainly did a great job on it. You used all the right words to get the message across. Great job!
Delora
Comment Written 17-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2009
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Yeah, sounds like a dinosaur name! Ha! DEFINITELY give the rictameter a try! You won't regret it. Just make sure the last word ties in and doesn't "stand alone". It's such a delight to write these. Thank you very much for your kind review and compliments. With regards, Sue
Comment from sherrygreywolf
Hi Sue - Very nicely done little rictameter that carries an important message. I did not see anything that could have improved it.
have a great evening - sherry
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Hi Sue - Very nicely done little rictameter that carries an important message. I did not see anything that could have improved it.
have a great evening - sherry
Comment Written 17-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2009
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Hi Sherry, thanks so much for your very kind review and compliments. So glad you enjoyed it. With regards, Sue
Comment from Roisin
This is a beautiful rictameter Sue, with wonderfully chosen words. They all blend together well, which can be difficult in these types of poems. I love your overall presentation too - great picture and colour choice.
Warm regards.
Roisin
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2009
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This is a beautiful rictameter Sue, with wonderfully chosen words. They all blend together well, which can be difficult in these types of poems. I love your overall presentation too - great picture and colour choice.
Warm regards.
Roisin
Comment Written 17-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2009
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Hi Roisin, thank you so much for your very kind review. Always appreciated, Sue
Comment from findingmyroom
This is a six for sure. You deliver a message we need to heed more often, in a gentle and deliberate form. Of course I have to tell my favorite line; in this case it is "A tool that never fails" because it not only could stand alone but is expanded on the next line.
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This is a six for sure. You deliver a message we need to heed more often, in a gentle and deliberate form. Of course I have to tell my favorite line; in this case it is "A tool that never fails" because it not only could stand alone but is expanded on the next line.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2009
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Of COURSE you would like that line!! HA! I'm getting to know you through words! HA! Thank you SO much for your wonderful review with your six. Because today, "kindness' was on my mind. I witnessed an uncalled for unkindness today and just shook my head. Had to write about it. Again thank you for your most generous review. Warmest regards, Sue
Comment from FredCollingwood
This is a great poem with an even better message. In addition it has a pretty shape. Your poems have such positive messages.
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This is a great poem with an even better message. In addition it has a pretty shape. Your poems have such positive messages.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2009
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Fred, thanks very much for your lovely review. And your compliments. (Heard some very unnecessary unkindness today and it made me want to write about it). With regards, Sue
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Not on this site, I hope.
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No, not here. Out there in this sometimes grumpy world! :-))
Comment from Gip7
I like the way this poem has a beginning word the same as the end. The meaning totally comes across in your poem of how one kindness gives life to many. There lots of assonance; terminal alliteration with 'humanity' and 'humility' and I like the color scheme. Thanks
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I like the way this poem has a beginning word the same as the end. The meaning totally comes across in your poem of how one kindness gives life to many. There lots of assonance; terminal alliteration with 'humanity' and 'humility' and I like the color scheme. Thanks
Comment Written 17-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2009
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Gip, thank you for this very close read and your most kind review. With regards, Sue
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You are very welcome, Sue -- my pleasure. Gip
Comment from pabelk
Good example of a A rictameter. I think it is so much more meaningful for the last word to actually be part of the previous line as opposed to just repeating the first word. And you did that well.
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Good example of a A rictameter. I think it is so much more meaningful for the last word to actually be part of the previous line as opposed to just repeating the first word. And you did that well.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2009
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Yes, it is very important to make the last line to be a part of the poem and not a 'stand-alone'. Makes you really have to think. Thank you very much for your very kind review and compliments. With regards, Sue
Comment from Popcorn69
Very nice poem, also serves as a reminder abou the golden rule. Short and to the point, and has a smooth flow. I could not find any errors. Thank you for sharing, and keep writing.
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Very nice poem, also serves as a reminder abou the golden rule. Short and to the point, and has a smooth flow. I could not find any errors. Thank you for sharing, and keep writing.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2009
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popcorn, thank you very much for your very kind review and compliments. With regards, Sue
Comment from Deejharrington
Beautifully expressed poem, especially given the boundaries of the form. I agree with the feelings. All the world needs is kindness. Great job!
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Beautifully expressed poem, especially given the boundaries of the form. I agree with the feelings. All the world needs is kindness. Great job!
Comment Written 17-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2009
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kidwrite, thank you very much for your very kind review. And your nice compliments. With regards, Sue
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You are most certainly welcomed
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You're welcome!