CSP: A Collection of Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 55 "Making Love"A collection of poetry
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Comment from sherrygreywolf
This is an incredible entry to the tetractys contest. So few words to describe a place and time where we've all been at some point in our lives. I didn't see anything that needed attention.
hugs - sherry
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2009
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This is an incredible entry to the tetractys contest. So few words to describe a place and time where we've all been at some point in our lives. I didn't see anything that needed attention.
hugs - sherry
Comment Written 10-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2009
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Sherry, thank you for your very kind compliments and review. Coming over to read yours soon. With regards, Sue
Comment from MJMuraco
Your poem is short and sweet and follows the rhyme that you need for the contest. I loved the artwork that you chose and the words were strong. Nice work and good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2009
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Your poem is short and sweet and follows the rhyme that you need for the contest. I loved the artwork that you chose and the words were strong. Nice work and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2009
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Thank you for your very kind compliments and review. And appreciate your well-wishes. With regards, Sue
Comment from Minglement
Very nice entry for the tetractys contest! You've used the form well for your message, which is universal. Great job. Good luck.
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2009
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Very nice entry for the tetractys contest! You've used the form well for your message, which is universal. Great job. Good luck.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2009
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Marcia, thank you very much for your very kind review. Excellent point that it is "universal". With regards, Sue
Comment from Joan E.
Another tetractys--you keep temping me and I keep putting off trying this form. Your premise is quite true, but I enjoyed it all the more in poetry with bits of alliteration. As usual, you chose the perfect picture to accompany your poem.
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2009
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Another tetractys--you keep temping me and I keep putting off trying this form. Your premise is quite true, but I enjoyed it all the more in poetry with bits of alliteration. As usual, you chose the perfect picture to accompany your poem.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2009
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Joan, it really is a great form to write in. Try doing the mirrored one and keep the shape very uniform. The reason is that that makes you all the more careful on word choices. Such an excellent exercise in writing. Would love to see you try. Or just start out with one stanza. Thanks so much for your very kind review. Sincerely, Sue
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Thanks for the tips and encouragement--now, it's just a matter of finding the time. Did I mention I take six classes at Emeritus College--I have trouble saying no,
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Oh, how I admire you! What are the six classes??
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I'm just in love with life long learning: Shakespeare, creative writing (where I started writing poetry in June), acrylic painting, plays and playwrights, walking (my newest one, starts next week with the new semester) and tai chi. We are so fortunate to have the resource of Emeritus College, and yet I find that folks are unaware of it. Do you have anything like it in your area?
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We have our University which is not too far away. And our Museum also collaborates with the university on art classes. Something I really want to do soon.
Your plate is definitely full of uplifting and soul-feeding variety! Good for you!
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Thanks for the validation. You should get involved in the art classes, especially since I know you also paint with acrylics.
Comment from Hitcher
I just opened this beautifully crafted Tetractys, panicked and raced to see if there was a spot left for little old Hitch and...NO!!!!!! I would of had a go at this one friend, I'm glad you have chosen to do a romantic one, makes me feel almost part of the contest, well done SUE, I couldn't have said it better myself! Good luck.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2009
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I just opened this beautifully crafted Tetractys, panicked and raced to see if there was a spot left for little old Hitch and...NO!!!!!! I would of had a go at this one friend, I'm glad you have chosen to do a romantic one, makes me feel almost part of the contest, well done SUE, I couldn't have said it better myself! Good luck.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2009
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I knew you'd like this one, my friend. Suc came out of her shell just a wee bit. Sorry you missed the contest. What a coincidence. The other day you suggested I start a contest for the tetractys and I dismissed it and along came this one. Thanks much for your great review! :-)) Suc
Comment from jeslaf
Hoo-eey, this is good, and reeks with the truth of the heated moment: for that time alone, the reason matters not, only the passion. Great take on the contest! :)
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2009
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Hoo-eey, this is good, and reeks with the truth of the heated moment: for that time alone, the reason matters not, only the passion. Great take on the contest! :)
Comment Written 10-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2009
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I like "hoo-eey" ! HA!! I agonized over the title, not wanting it to sound corny. But, what else could I name it?? Thanks so much for this great review and your well-wishes in the contest. With regards, Sue
Comment from jaeladarling
What a beautiful thing to be swept into the moment. You have a wonderful poem, short but full of emotion and excitement. Thank you for sharing this with us.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2009
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What a beautiful thing to be swept into the moment. You have a wonderful poem, short but full of emotion and excitement. Thank you for sharing this with us.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2009
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Jaela, isn't passion wonderful! Thank you very much for your lovely review and comments. Always appreciated, Sue
Comment from TinyTeena
Very descriptive poem and well suited to this form. The short lines and syllable restrictions help to bring out the urgency of their feelings. They don't care whether it is lust or love, they are just filled, at that moment, with the desire to make love. Well done
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2009
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Very descriptive poem and well suited to this form. The short lines and syllable restrictions help to bring out the urgency of their feelings. They don't care whether it is lust or love, they are just filled, at that moment, with the desire to make love. Well done
Comment Written 10-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2009
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You've nailed it. That's one reason I do like to work with restrictive forms sometimes. You really have to choose those words carefully and put a lot of life into each one. And by saying it helps bring out the urgency of the feelings, that is an awesome compliment, because it was part of my intent. So thank you for that. And for your great review. Very much appreciated, Sue
Comment from LauraKatherine
Sixteezkids,
I like your poem. It fulfills the contest requirements regarding syllable count and number of lines.
I like the contrast of lust and love, and how they overlap within desire. Nice play of opposites being blended.
Good poem. Good luck in the contest. Laura
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2009
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Sixteezkids,
I like your poem. It fulfills the contest requirements regarding syllable count and number of lines.
I like the contrast of lust and love, and how they overlap within desire. Nice play of opposites being blended.
Good poem. Good luck in the contest. Laura
Comment Written 10-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2009
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Laura, thank you for your lovely compliments on this poem. And for your very kind review. With regards, Sue
Comment from fastdigits
Great art work that marries
up with your words of passion
and desire perfectly to mesh
the reader into the warm embrace
of that magical moment in the
boundries between love and lust.
An artful well crafted tetractys
entry in the contest.
Good luck and well done
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2009
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Great art work that marries
up with your words of passion
and desire perfectly to mesh
the reader into the warm embrace
of that magical moment in the
boundries between love and lust.
An artful well crafted tetractys
entry in the contest.
Good luck and well done
Comment Written 10-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2009
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fastdigits, your reviews are always so refreshing to read. You most certainly take the time to read and a lot of careful attention to express yourself. Thank you for that. And thank you for your lovely review on this poem. With regards, Sue