Comment from gjensen

Excellent

Definitely powerful and heartbreaking. This poem has a "haiku-like" feel to it. You say so much in so few words. Sorry for the painful time. Very nice poem.

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2009

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

our names separated by versus - wow, that is good, Sue - like, I'm impressed!! Our signatures perfectly penned - this one is just such a GREAT example of the economy of language - Yay for you!! Brooke

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2009

Comment from Minglement

Excellent

This is a concise and telling poem, well written to show the simplicity and complexity of ending a marriage. Wonderful entry for the contest. Great job. Good luck.

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2009

Comment from mslyla216

Excellent

You delivered explosively on this one, Sixteezkid! It is the END of a love "love story". It explains exactly the feelings one has at divorce time. It is short; it is powerful. It is a perfect entry in this contest. Good luck.

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2009

Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

Amazing what a powerful story can be communicated in only fifteen words. I enjoyed the alliteration and the picture you chose, which matched your poem so well. The last simple line was quite touching.

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2009

Comment from FredCollingwood

Excellent

The papers-
Folded neatly

Our names-
Separated by vs.

Our signatures-
Perfectly penned

We cry

So few words... such powerful emotions. Great job.

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2009

Comment from bluefly

Excellent

Hi Sixteezkid,
I must say, this is one of the most creatively intelligent and powerfully crafted poems I've read. You pack a ton of meaning and emotion into a very few words, an extraordinary example of brevity used to the fullest. Good luck in the contest.
Scott

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2009

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reply by the author on 24-Jan-2009

Scott, this is a review that is more encouraging to me for my writing. Your compliments overwhelm me. I thank you from my heart for this review and those very kind words. With warmest regards, Sue

reply by bluefly on 24-Jan-2009

Hi Sue,
You are more than welcome. You earned it!
Scott

Comment from Paradox Tremors

Excellent

Somehow, I should have known you would have gone with the "heartbreak" approach. I like the simple words you chose that painted a huge picture. Well written and sad.

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2009

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reply by the author on 24-Jan-2009

Paradox, now how did you know that?! I thank you for your very generous review and compliments. I am very glad you liked it. With regards, Sue

reply by Paradox Tremors on 24-Jan-2009

It just seemed so right. Best of luck in the contest my friend.

Comment from Poetic Friend

Exceptional

Sue, in its brevity, this poem speaks volumes-- the painful feelings of divorce.

I love the cleverness and creativity of the lines:

Our names-
Separated by vs.

Good luck in the contest. I must remember to vote in this contest.

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2009

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reply by the author on 24-Jan-2009

Poetic Friend,

The contest called for either 'love' or 'heartbreak' - the only thing I could think of was the worst heartbreak of all...both of us seeing the reality that it was over. Will never forget it. Even after all these years, it is still a difficult thing to ponder on.

To get your "exceptional" on this piece goes straight to my heart. To me, it means my work did convey those feelings that day. And I can't begin to tell you how much I am honored for your giving it your most esteemed review.

Thank you so very much,
Sue

Comment from sara-beth

Excellent

Oh no, divorce sucks! But it's a great poem, you did a great job, and the image you included is perfect. I like the bit about "our names seperated by vs."....that's really good!

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2009