CSP: A Collection of Poems
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Comment from Minglement
This is extremely well done, but too tragic to contemplate. Beautifully expressed and you chose the perfect graphic. Great job.
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2009
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This is extremely well done, but too tragic to contemplate. Beautifully expressed and you chose the perfect graphic. Great job.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2009
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Marcia, thanks for reading. Am glad you liked it. And thank you for your most generous review and compliments! Your friend, Sue
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You're welcome, friend. Great job. Take care, Marcia
Comment from Jazh
This is a well-written poem, a clear and accurate description of addiction. I, too, have watched friends die of this addiction: nothing else matters - the ultimate escape. Very sad, and ultimately tragic. Well done. :)
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This is a well-written poem, a clear and accurate description of addiction. I, too, have watched friends die of this addiction: nothing else matters - the ultimate escape. Very sad, and ultimately tragic. Well done. :)
Comment Written 19-Jan-2009
Comment from grassroots08
Your poem actually has great rhythm and meter. This was well penned, no question about it. Though the picture is hard to look at for long, the truth is out there and for some this is a great depiction of how it really is! Thanks for sharing this piece. Don
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2009
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Your poem actually has great rhythm and meter. This was well penned, no question about it. Though the picture is hard to look at for long, the truth is out there and for some this is a great depiction of how it really is! Thanks for sharing this piece. Don
Comment Written 19-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2009
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Yeah, I didn't want a "drug word" in the poem...so used a staged photo to give it a "look". Thank you for your great compliments and review. Always appreciated! Sue
Comment from joan marie
I just did an acrostic about addiction. But there are more than just drugs. This picture is horrific. Especially for those that have seen this in real life. I know it is staged. But anyway, the poem was excellent and the repitition lent itself to the idea of day in day out search for the high. Great read. joan marie
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2009
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I just did an acrostic about addiction. But there are more than just drugs. This picture is horrific. Especially for those that have seen this in real life. I know it is staged. But anyway, the poem was excellent and the repitition lent itself to the idea of day in day out search for the high. Great read. joan marie
Comment Written 19-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2009
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I was looking for images to post and I sure wasn't going to depress the hell out of everyone with what I saw! Whoa! Nasty life, nasty images. So, yeah, I thought that staged one was perfect. A pretty girl in a pretty dress sitting in an alley next to a garbage bin. I've been wanting to write a pantoum for a long while. Been reading Jude's, so finally tried it. Thank you for seeing how the repetition does lend itself to the on-going cycle of addiction. And for your great review! Always appreciated. Sue
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Nightwalker, poem and story, heroin additction. Death of self prostitution for drugs. I have quite a few that lend themselves to mental illness and drugs. So it wasn't a far leap from the passing out to before eyes are open beginning the scheming to buy more. jm
Comment from Curt Mongold
It's funny earlier last year I posted a poem on the very same subject. Of course, mine was much better (lol!) but I digress!
Informative without being graphic, the form you used adds a feeling of detatchment from the subject while exploring it.
Cool stuff cuz!
Curt
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2009
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It's funny earlier last year I posted a poem on the very same subject. Of course, mine was much better (lol!) but I digress!
Informative without being graphic, the form you used adds a feeling of detatchment from the subject while exploring it.
Cool stuff cuz!
Curt
Comment Written 19-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2009
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Yep...we're cousins. It happens all the time (or is she really stealing ideas from him?) hmmmm... Tell me the name of it. I'd like to read it. Yes, I didn't want to be graphic. And you picked up precisely how I intended it....detached. Thanks, Cuz! :-))
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The name of it was "I pay to Know This Plight."
Comment from Domino
Hi, Sue
I've never tried drugs either (though many say alcohol and tobacco are). Not interested! Trouble with the youngsters (mainly) is peer pressure or depression, I guess.
Interesting use of repeated lines, I must say works here for drama.
'Heaven-bound, my destiny' - is the onlt seven syllable line, and thus the only one outa meter. Maybe add 'Tis' or 'It's' or similay as unstressed syllable ta start line?
Very sad and powerful read. Ray xx
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reply by the author on 19-Jan-2009
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Hi, Sue
I've never tried drugs either (though many say alcohol and tobacco are). Not interested! Trouble with the youngsters (mainly) is peer pressure or depression, I guess.
Interesting use of repeated lines, I must say works here for drama.
'Heaven-bound, my destiny' - is the onlt seven syllable line, and thus the only one outa meter. Maybe add 'Tis' or 'It's' or similay as unstressed syllable ta start line?
Very sad and powerful read. Ray xx
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Comment Written 19-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2009
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A lot of "heroin-chic" ideas in the fashion world for girls. So many different reasons. I posted "no set meter" so you wouldn't give me shite! HA!! I just HAD to have Heaven as my first word. Forgive me, my mentor. Thanks so much for your great review! Off to read yours now (I wonder....naughty? romantic? cheeky?) Ha! Sue
Comment from Judian James
Hey there. It was going along perfectly until the last verse which changes things up. first line is the second from the verse before as you've done. the second line is the THIRD LINE from verse one!! The third line and fourth line are correct. Good for you. Make that tweak and you've done an excellent job with your first pantoum
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reply by the author on 19-Jan-2009
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Hey there. It was going along perfectly until the last verse which changes things up. first line is the second from the verse before as you've done. the second line is the THIRD LINE from verse one!! The third line and fourth line are correct. Good for you. Make that tweak and you've done an excellent job with your first pantoum
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Comment Written 19-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2009
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I said that I kept triple-checking, (and this was because something didn't sound right -duh!) I checked everything except the rhyme abab. That would have given me a slight clue. HA! Thank you SO much for giving me the desire to tackle one of these. Not as easy as I thought! All fixed! Again, so much appreciated, Jude! :-)) Sue