CSP: A Collection of Poems
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Comment from chaswriter
Sue - Wow. This is a very powerful tetractys poem about Autism. I know what a tetractys poem is now.
I recommend two fictional books about autistic people: 'The Speed of Dark' by Elizbeth Moon and 'The Curious Incident of the Dog in Night Time' by My Mark Haddon. Great reads that will give you insight to how autistics think.
Charlie.
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Sue - Wow. This is a very powerful tetractys poem about Autism. I know what a tetractys poem is now.
I recommend two fictional books about autistic people: 'The Speed of Dark' by Elizbeth Moon and 'The Curious Incident of the Dog in Night Time' by My Mark Haddon. Great reads that will give you insight to how autistics think.
Charlie.
Comment Written 26-Nov-2008
Comment from Jarlsbane
I think the picture you chose for this piece couldn't have been better!!! The poem and picture combined make a wonderful statement that helps the reader grasp the struggles of autism.
I have seen tetractys poems before and I guess I assumed they were suppose to be "mirror images" ie... five lines 1,2,3,4,10 then a second set 10,4,3,2,1... alternating pattern...
I see your author notes about the syllable count in different but I think that is a bit of a cop-out (no offense intended)- you are too talented not be able to find a suitable adjustment in that line to make it 10 syllables... good poem!! Jarls
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I think the picture you chose for this piece couldn't have been better!!! The poem and picture combined make a wonderful statement that helps the reader grasp the struggles of autism.
I have seen tetractys poems before and I guess I assumed they were suppose to be "mirror images" ie... five lines 1,2,3,4,10 then a second set 10,4,3,2,1... alternating pattern...
I see your author notes about the syllable count in different but I think that is a bit of a cop-out (no offense intended)- you are too talented not be able to find a suitable adjustment in that line to make it 10 syllables... good poem!! Jarls
Comment Written 26-Nov-2008
Comment from mushroom
quite an interesting style of poem this, i think it gives real emotion to the topic of autism, it gives me a lonely sort of feeling, but very well put across
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quite an interesting style of poem this, i think it gives real emotion to the topic of autism, it gives me a lonely sort of feeling, but very well put across
Comment Written 26-Nov-2008
Comment from Stephen C Winter (Vs
Dear Sixteezkid,
I thought an Emigma a wonderful powerful piece that expresses so much about an often not talk about and misunderstood disabillty, I thought it is most thought provoaking and descriptive...If I had a six you would have it, sadly I am all out.
Kind regards
Steve
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Dear Sixteezkid,
I thought an Emigma a wonderful powerful piece that expresses so much about an often not talk about and misunderstood disabillty, I thought it is most thought provoaking and descriptive...If I had a six you would have it, sadly I am all out.
Kind regards
Steve
Comment Written 26-Nov-2008
Comment from phild
This is a very interesting form and I do like it. You've chosen simple words but the affect when they are put together is very strong. I believe the last line says it all.
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This is a very interesting form and I do like it. You've chosen simple words but the affect when they are put together is very strong. I believe the last line says it all.
Comment Written 26-Nov-2008
Comment from starman
yes, I've had autistic relatives so I can empathise. Like you say, they can be misunderstood. Their world is different, but they very special. Thanks for sharing.
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yes, I've had autistic relatives so I can empathise. Like you say, they can be misunderstood. Their world is different, but they very special. Thanks for sharing.
;)s
Comment Written 26-Nov-2008
Comment from Nanette Mary
Hullo Sixteezkid ...
This is not only a well-written response to the challenge of this interesting format but it is also an outpouring of words from a Mother's heart reflecting so much love and understanding of her child's affliction.
Added to that is the fact that you were able to produce your own illustration.
Thank you for sharing this with us.
With love from ..... Nanette Mary.
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Hullo Sixteezkid ...
This is not only a well-written response to the challenge of this interesting format but it is also an outpouring of words from a Mother's heart reflecting so much love and understanding of her child's affliction.
Added to that is the fact that you were able to produce your own illustration.
Thank you for sharing this with us.
With love from ..... Nanette Mary.
Comment Written 26-Nov-2008
Comment from davidray
We had our youngest looked at when he was young for Autism. It is so very complex, but you don't need to be told that. Everything turned out okay for us. As a nurse, I understand what your days have been like with your child growing up. There's is a different world. YOu've captured that very well.
Do take care.
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We had our youngest looked at when he was young for Autism. It is so very complex, but you don't need to be told that. Everything turned out okay for us. As a nurse, I understand what your days have been like with your child growing up. There's is a different world. YOu've captured that very well.
Do take care.
Comment Written 26-Nov-2008
Comment from Ian Ayris
Excellent piece, Sixteezkid. Having worked with autistic adults, I found the picture quite stunning, both the one painted by your words and the one by the artist. The last line toppled a bit for me, perhaps because it required your author notes to fully understand the meaning of it to you. If you wanted to keep it strictly within the format and also keep the poem at arms length, mimicking the world of autism itself - something which the first four lines achieve brilliantly, then you could have something like:
'How can we comprehend another world.' or something like that.
Thank you very much for an intriguing read.
Warmest regards,
Ian
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Excellent piece, Sixteezkid. Having worked with autistic adults, I found the picture quite stunning, both the one painted by your words and the one by the artist. The last line toppled a bit for me, perhaps because it required your author notes to fully understand the meaning of it to you. If you wanted to keep it strictly within the format and also keep the poem at arms length, mimicking the world of autism itself - something which the first four lines achieve brilliantly, then you could have something like:
'How can we comprehend another world.' or something like that.
Thank you very much for an intriguing read.
Warmest regards,
Ian
Comment Written 26-Nov-2008
Comment from Fleedleflump
I
Do not
Hesitate
To say this form
Fits well to what you would within portray.
I
Bow to
Gifted words
Enhancing me
With their compassionate and deepest love.
Fleedleflump
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I
Do not
Hesitate
To say this form
Fits well to what you would within portray.
I
Bow to
Gifted words
Enhancing me
With their compassionate and deepest love.
Fleedleflump
Comment Written 26-Nov-2008