CSP: A Collection of Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 150 "Peace, Sweet Peace"A collection of poetry
109 total reviews
Comment from Nicnac
What a lovely "peaceful" read!
I enjoyed this very much.
The elimination of most punctuation gave your poem an easy flowing feeling.
The artwork you have chosen gives the poem an added sense of calm and a yearning for 'home'.
No revisions, 6teezkid. I really enjoyed this piece.
Blessings,
~Nic
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2008
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What a lovely "peaceful" read!
I enjoyed this very much.
The elimination of most punctuation gave your poem an easy flowing feeling.
The artwork you have chosen gives the poem an added sense of calm and a yearning for 'home'.
No revisions, 6teezkid. I really enjoyed this piece.
Blessings,
~Nic
Comment Written 19-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2008
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Nic, awesome for you to take note of my elimination of that punctuation! *hone, hone, hone* Ha! I'm more pleased with it. Thank you so much for your most very generous review and specific comments. Very helpful and I appreciate your taking the time. Most sincerely, Sue
Comment from MercyWrites
Lovely and the picture fits the poem. Your poem reminds me of a dream I had where I was laying in a meadow field. It was very peaceful. I also thought it rhyme well.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2008
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Lovely and the picture fits the poem. Your poem reminds me of a dream I had where I was laying in a meadow field. It was very peaceful. I also thought it rhyme well.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2008
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Whoa!! I want that dream! Instead, last night, I dreamed that there was a mile long wait at the gas pumps! HA!!!!!! LOL! Thanks so much for your generous review and your comments. So glad you liked my poem! Much appreciated..Sue
Comment from Brian S. Pratt
You have semi colons at the end of the first three stanzas, but nothing at the end of the fourth.
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You also have commas a the end of two sentences in the middle of the second stanza, yet no commas elsewhere.
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Good poetry. On a lighter note, maybe it's because Thanksgiving in the air, but when I read your line "Peace, Sweet Peace" I keep thinking of sweet potatoes. Odd.
Brian S. Pratt
--Fantasy Author
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2008
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You have semi colons at the end of the first three stanzas, but nothing at the end of the fourth.
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You also have commas a the end of two sentences in the middle of the second stanza, yet no commas elsewhere.
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Good poetry. On a lighter note, maybe it's because Thanksgiving in the air, but when I read your line "Peace, Sweet Peace" I keep thinking of sweet potatoes. Odd.
Brian S. Pratt
--Fantasy Author
Comment Written 18-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2008
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Brian, I REALLY thank you for this awesome critique. You are so right. I went back to read and edited. Any further comments from you are most welcome! SWEET POTATOES??? I change my mind! Ha!!!! Anyway, thanks much for your generous review and excellent critique. Have a Happy Turkey Day with sweet potatoes!! Warmest....Sue
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about your name 6teezkid. Is that saying you were born in the 60's like myself (67) or that you are a sextagenarian and still retain a youthful spirit?
Hope I did not offend.
Talk to you later.
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How DARE YOU!!!! Ha!!
No, I was born in 1955 and loved the 60's. Early 60's, old rock - mid 60's soul and British Invasion - later 60's.....well, we all know about that!!!!! Go Led Zeppelin!!!!
Comment from kassey
Those moments of pure peace are so few and far between that we must cherish them while we have them.They are "stumbled upon", "glorious taste waiting to be sipped",
"rest in the arms of a breeze". Such beautiful images and we can't let them go too easily from our minds. Excellent work Kay
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2008
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Those moments of pure peace are so few and far between that we must cherish them while we have them.They are "stumbled upon", "glorious taste waiting to be sipped",
"rest in the arms of a breeze". Such beautiful images and we can't let them go too easily from our minds. Excellent work Kay
Comment Written 18-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2008
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Kay, I am so happy that you identified with my words. Thank you for your generous review and lovely comments.......Much appreciated....Sue
Comment from jmyron
The peace of the heart and mind, if not the world. A very good freeverse, (unless you want to count the repition of Peace). It flows nicely, and the imagry is very good indeed.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2008
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The peace of the heart and mind, if not the world. A very good freeverse, (unless you want to count the repition of Peace). It flows nicely, and the imagry is very good indeed.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2008
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Thank you very much for your generous review and specific comments. Have been on the fence about the repetition. Like it both ways. What do you think about Peace, Sweet Peace being on first line of first and last stanzas only?? Much appreciated...Sue
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Depending on the situation, repitition can be bad for a poem or good. Yours is good. I would leave it.
Comment from Shane Marquardt
You create beautiful images in this work. I can certainly see why this was given a blue ribbon and the "All Time Best" nomination.
Enjoyed the read. Thanks for sharing. I will be looking for more.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2008
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You create beautiful images in this work. I can certainly see why this was given a blue ribbon and the "All Time Best" nomination.
Enjoyed the read. Thanks for sharing. I will be looking for more.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2008
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Shane, Thank you SO much for your generous review and lovely comments. I am very glad you enjoyed it! Very much appreciated.....Sue
Comment from Hitcher
I like the visuals that your words conjure up friend, your words definitely had a calming affect with the third stanza standing out the most for me. I wasn't sure about the repetitive use of Peace, Sweet peace but I still enjoyed it.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2008
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I like the visuals that your words conjure up friend, your words definitely had a calming affect with the third stanza standing out the most for me. I wasn't sure about the repetitive use of Peace, Sweet peace but I still enjoyed it.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2008
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Hi Hitcher...yeah...I've had a 50/50 review on the repetitive use. I'm still on the fence with it. I really appreciate your critique. Thank you for your very kind review and your specific comments. Glad you enjoyed it!........respectfully...Sue
Comment from Curt Mongold
I do enjoy the sentiment behind this work, but am not a big fan of the repetitive 1st lines in every stanza. The flow is somewhat staggered, which I suppose is ok for prose, but I cannot honestly give a 5 for sentiment alone.
Sincerely,
Curt
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2008
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I do enjoy the sentiment behind this work, but am not a big fan of the repetitive 1st lines in every stanza. The flow is somewhat staggered, which I suppose is ok for prose, but I cannot honestly give a 5 for sentiment alone.
Sincerely,
Curt
Comment Written 18-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2008
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Curt, your review and critique is very much appreciated. I've had a 50/50 response on the repetitive use; some comment that they like it a lot and some say they wouldn't use it, AND I'm on the fence with it also! HA! Thank you again for your kind review and specific comments. Respectfully....Sue
Comment from smokyeye
All in all very good. You are very descriptive with your word choice and i realize the repetition is for effect but with your talent i tink it is not needed
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2008
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All in all very good. You are very descriptive with your word choice and i realize the repetition is for effect but with your talent i tink it is not needed
Comment Written 18-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2008
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Smokey, Thank you very much for your very kind review and specific comments. Like I've been saying to so many other reviewers, I am SO on the fence about the repeition. Thinking maybe keeping it in only in first and last stanzas. What do you think? Would appreciate any further critique. Regards....Sue
Comment from chaswriter
6teezkid - Your last stanza says it all. Relaxing on the weekend with the family is what I like the best. It is too fleeting. Enjoyed the poem. Charlie.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2008
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6teezkid - Your last stanza says it all. Relaxing on the weekend with the family is what I like the best. It is too fleeting. Enjoyed the poem. Charlie.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2008
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Chas, I so appreciate your very kind review and comments. Glad it resonated with you.....yes, family-time....the best!! Glad you enjoyed...My regards, Sue