My Sister and I
story/poem45 total reviews
Comment from Teri7
Linda, This is a very sweet, but very sad poem you have posted for your sister. That had to be so hard for you both. I am so sorry you had to go through that. The picture is beautiful. Thank you for sharing my friend. love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2021
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Linda, This is a very sweet, but very sad poem you have posted for your sister. That had to be so hard for you both. I am so sorry you had to go through that. The picture is beautiful. Thank you for sharing my friend. love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 08-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2021
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HI Teri, I was trying to find a way to post her story...but I wanted her poem to be read...without our story my wonderful sweet friend...no one would've understood the poem...
Thank You for a wonderful review you...and you are so welcome...
love much...Linda xxoo
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I enjoyed it very much! Thank you for sharing my sweet friend! love and blessings, Teri
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smiling so big...love xxoo
Comment from E. Denison
Very well done with this work, l.raven. You've told a wonderfully complete work of nonfiction that is simultaneously beautiful and heart breaking and brings with it all the pangs of life and the incredible bond between sisters. I think this is a strong work. My only suggestion would be regarding some of the punctuation choices (which you've noted in your author notes) and also, in your anecdote about the mop and the spider, mop and one point is spelled mob. I believe in this section you were also looking for the word jumped rather than jump. Otherwise, really well done. I wish you all the best! Thank you for sharing.
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reply by the author on 08-Aug-2021
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Very well done with this work, l.raven. You've told a wonderfully complete work of nonfiction that is simultaneously beautiful and heart breaking and brings with it all the pangs of life and the incredible bond between sisters. I think this is a strong work. My only suggestion would be regarding some of the punctuation choices (which you've noted in your author notes) and also, in your anecdote about the mop and the spider, mop and one point is spelled mob. I believe in this section you were also looking for the word jumped rather than jump. Otherwise, really well done. I wish you all the best! Thank you for sharing.
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Comment Written 08-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2021
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HI E Denison, Thank You so very much for your help...all fixed...
we did have an incredible bond between us...I miss not talking to her...but this isn't the end for her...this is her beginning...
Thank you for a wonderful review...and your best wishes...and you are so very welcome...love to you...Linda xxoo
Comment from nomi338
My heart aches, partially breaks at the pain you and you poor sister had to suffer. After my parents ended their marriage I spent some time at my grand mother's house. My mother remarried and no sooner than I settled in, getting used to my new cousins, my mom and stepdad moved away to find jobs. This move left me isolated at my Grandma's place all alone as my two older sisters refused to go back to grandmas' house. I spent many lonely days and nights at my grandma's house until the day my mom returned to take my middle sister nd me back to the city with her.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2021
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My heart aches, partially breaks at the pain you and you poor sister had to suffer. After my parents ended their marriage I spent some time at my grand mother's house. My mother remarried and no sooner than I settled in, getting used to my new cousins, my mom and stepdad moved away to find jobs. This move left me isolated at my Grandma's place all alone as my two older sisters refused to go back to grandmas' house. I spent many lonely days and nights at my grandma's house until the day my mom returned to take my middle sister nd me back to the city with her.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2021
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HI Nolan, I am so sorry you had to go through that sweet guy...
I don't know if some parents know that leaves scars on a child...my sister never got over it...she was so insecure her whole life...always feeling abandoned...
I'm so glad your mom came and got you and your sister...regardless...you turn out to be a pretty great guy...
and a wonderful friend...
Thank You my sweet friend for a soooo wonderful review...love Linda xxoo
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Thank you. As it turned out I learned that I enjoyed my own company ad as a further result, I am never lonely.
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I am so glad to hear that...sounds wonderful...love xxoo
Comment from lyenochka
Oh, Linda. I'm sorry I used up my last six. This was so moving and touching. Thank you for sharing. I can't believe your mother did that but I guess she was desperate and couldn't care for you and your sister for a few years. Still, how painful and traumatic that was for you and your sister. But you are made of stronger spirit than your sister so you could adapt. It was a nightmare for your sister. Even from childhood, you were the pillar that everyone depended on. Thank you for being there and continuing to love and forgive and keep loving!!
There were some punctuation issues like apostrophes missing. But I know you're writing from your heart so I won't list those. Just where there were questions:
times I grabbed the mob. (mop?)
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reply by the author on 08-Aug-2021
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Oh, Linda. I'm sorry I used up my last six. This was so moving and touching. Thank you for sharing. I can't believe your mother did that but I guess she was desperate and couldn't care for you and your sister for a few years. Still, how painful and traumatic that was for you and your sister. But you are made of stronger spirit than your sister so you could adapt. It was a nightmare for your sister. Even from childhood, you were the pillar that everyone depended on. Thank you for being there and continuing to love and forgive and keep loving!!
There were some punctuation issues like apostrophes missing. But I know you're writing from your heart so I won't list those. Just where there were questions:
times I grabbed the mob. (mop?)
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Comment Written 08-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2021
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Hi Helen, LOL...I got the mop covered...Thank You so very much for the help...
I think that place broke my sisters spirit...but I truly believe that it is where I learned to help people...I spent my whole life helping and defending my sister...
we worked at the same restaurant in our teens and twenties...we had our own apartments...mine was across the street from hers...I didn't want to go to far...when we got off work...every night...I had to go to her apartment first...
as I walked in I would look behind me at her...she would be rubbing her hands together so scared...to break the tension
I would swing the door open...and yell...is anyone here...I need a date tonight...and I would look at her...and she would have this half smile on her face...and rolling her eyes...I would continue looking in all the closets and under the bed...behind every door...and then she would feel safe...and tell me to go home...laughing...
and your so right, she never did adapt to that place...sigh...
Thank You so much for a wonderful caring review my sweet friend...but that is you...and you can correct me when you want...I know yours is through your heart...God Bless...love you...Linda xxoo
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And I forgot to mention that I loved your sister's poem. What a stark contrast from the compassion of Jesus and His mother compared to those mean nuns. Her poor young girl's spirit was tortured! She expressed it well in the poem.
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it's sad Helen...but I have heard other people
say they had the same trouble with the nuns...that's just wrong...
and just the fact that my mother did that...she felt the abandonment...
thank you...I'm going to post some of her other poems as well...love xxoo
Comment from Noel T Cumberland
This is amazing. Your story, and the raw emotion in your sister's poem are both important and I am glad to have read them.
Thanks for sharing such a personal and powerful experience.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2021
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This is amazing. Your story, and the raw emotion in your sister's poem are both important and I am glad to have read them.
Thanks for sharing such a personal and powerful experience.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2021
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Hi Noel, Thank You so very much for a wonderful review...
and all your so wonderful stars...I am honored...
and you are so very welcome...love Linda xxoo
