Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell

Excellent

I love the title, a shiver of sharks, they send more than a shiver down my spine. Anyway, I won't go in the sea after researching jellyfish, so there's no chance a shark will have me for lunch! I don't think I've ever seen as large a group of hammerhead sharks before, as there are in your shivery picture. Not on any of the nature programms I've seen on the tele. You've done really well with this one, Tony, it's an excellent contest entry, well done and good luck! :)) Sandra xx

 Comment Written 15-Jun-2020

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reply by the author on 17-Jun-2020

Thanks for your kind words, Sandra. I'm with you when it comes to letting sharks enjoy their own habitat without me!
I think I've revised this three times since you reviewed it a couple of days ago. LOL

reply by Sandra Stoner-Mitchell on 17-Jun-2020

I had to go back and have a read of your new version, it's brilliant! And I love the picture you've put with it. Definitely a winner! LOL. xxx

Comment from dragonpoet

Excellent

Tony,
I like the alliterative name of a group of sharks. It is apt because the though of one shark near makes anyone shiver. This seems like a metaphor for people in general and maybe the protestors too.
Good luck in contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan

 Comment Written 15-Jun-2020

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reply by the author on 17-Jun-2020

Thanks for your kind words, Joan, and for your good luck wishes.
I think I've revised this three times since you reviewed it a couple of days ago. LOL

reply by dragonpoet on 17-Jun-2020

Don't mention it, Tony.
Joan

Comment from sherrygreywolf

Excellent

Nicely done! Loved the alliteration in the first line (shiver of sharks) and the limited use of font color adds emphasis to the last word (flesh) without being distracting from the piece as a whole. All in all, a well-worded entry for the 5-7-5 contest. Good luck!

 Comment Written 15-Jun-2020

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reply by the author on 17-Jun-2020

Thanks for your kind words, Sherry, and for your good luck wishes.
I think I've revised this three times since you reviewed it a couple of days ago. LOL

reply by sherrygreywolf on 17-Jun-2020

Oh wow! I'll have to go back and check it out again.

Comment from Bill Schott

Excellent

This 5-7-5, A Shiver of Sharks, has the right set up and pictures the worst case scenario if one were to fall off the boat with a bucket of chum.

 Comment Written 14-Jun-2020

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reply by the author on 17-Jun-2020

Thanks for your words of advice, Bill. I shall take care not to fall off a boat in shark-infested waters - chum or no chum!

Comment from Rachel Carrington

Excellent

Wow. This says so much with so few words. I've reread it several times, thinking of the many ways it could be applicable to today's world. Really strong writing, and I wish you the best of luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 14-Jun-2020

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reply by the author on 17-Jun-2020

Thanks for your kind words, Rachel, and for the good luck wishes.
All the best, Tony

Comment from Irish Rain

Excellent

Love the coloring on your text!
Cute 5-7-5...are they called a shiver?
Very appropriate!
This is an awesome entry Mr. Tony,
good luck!
Blessings...

 Comment Written 14-Jun-2020

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reply by the author on 17-Jun-2020

Thanks for your kind words, Judy, and for the good luck wishes.
All the best, Tony

reply by Irish Rain on 17-Jun-2020

Have a great week!

Comment from June Sargent

Excellent

So nice to see you writing for the contests - and in short forms! You do very well. I like the wittiness of this piece. Misfortune for the fish - and a full tummy for the sharks!

 Comment Written 14-Jun-2020

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reply by the author on 17-Jun-2020

Thanks for your kind words, June. You're right - I seldom succumb to the lure of the 5-7-5!
All the best, Tony

Comment from royowen

Excellent

There seems to be lots of collective nouns for a shiver of shark, another suitable noun for the is, most aptly also called a frenzy. Beautifully written Tony, I love this, keep out of the water Now, well done, blessings, Roy

 Comment Written 14-Jun-2020

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reply by the author on 17-Jun-2020

Thanks for your review, Roy. Whether a frenzy or a shiver, I shall do my best to avoid them! All good wishes, Tony

reply by royowen on 17-Jun-2020

Don?t blame you Tony

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

Your contest poem is in good form--correct syllable count per line. The picture is a great accompaniment to you well-chosen words. The alliteration of s works well, too. This could be about sharks in the polluted ocean and its affect on them OR the problems of the world that surround all people in their daily lives from the beginning of time til now. Thanks for sharing and best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan

 Comment Written 14-Jun-2020

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reply by the author on 17-Jun-2020

Thanks for your review, Jan, and for noticing the double meaning. All good wishes, Tony

Comment from joycetreasures

Excellent

Hello Tony,
I pray you are well during this global pandemic. I love the artwork/photo of the hammerhead sharks. But, I love all of God's creatures. This is s great 5-7-5 poem for this contest. Great message, the sharks are diving in for their meal, a pound of flesh. Well done. I hope you WIN!! Take care and Happy writing:-)

 Comment Written 14-Jun-2020

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reply by the author on 17-Jun-2020

Thanks for your review, Joyce, and for the supportive comments. All good wishes, Tony

reply by joycetreasures on 17-Jun-2020

You are welcome, Tony. Have a beautiful blessed day. Keep smiling.