Along a Broken Road
A 5 Line Poem38 total reviews
Comment from Colin John
Hi Melissa, this is indeed somber and grey as we say here and obviously there in the US, gray-grey, I am now confused lol. Will look it up stateside and see what I find lol. This looks like our Watling street, built by the Romans from London to the North.
Kind regards Colin XX
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2019
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Hi Melissa, this is indeed somber and grey as we say here and obviously there in the US, gray-grey, I am now confused lol. Will look it up stateside and see what I find lol. This looks like our Watling street, built by the Romans from London to the North.
Kind regards Colin XX
Comment Written 02-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2019
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Thank you so very much Colin. I believe the photo is of an ancient Roman road, although I do not know which one. I appreciate the review.
Melissa
Comment from BeasPeas
This is quite a profound theme, Melissa. I'm reading it on a deeper level than that of a drought. Great word choices and you've even managed to include a bit of rhyming. Best of luck in the contest. Marilyn
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2019
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This is quite a profound theme, Melissa. I'm reading it on a deeper level than that of a drought. Great word choices and you've even managed to include a bit of rhyming. Best of luck in the contest. Marilyn
Comment Written 02-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2019
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Hello Marilyn. Thanks for the great review.
Melissa
Comment from Joy Graham
Oooooh, I LOVE this poem, Melissa :) I am sorry to be out of sixes. Your title set my imagination off and I was more than pleased that you delivered a great message. I am broken, and this whole thing speaks to me. I still haven't been notified about an office appointment wih the surgeon. Meanwhile I am losing my ability to walk. I need this hip replacement. I know there is a wait, but I feel so broken.
Best wishes in the contest. This one is a winner to ME!
Joy xx
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2019
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Oooooh, I LOVE this poem, Melissa :) I am sorry to be out of sixes. Your title set my imagination off and I was more than pleased that you delivered a great message. I am broken, and this whole thing speaks to me. I still haven't been notified about an office appointment wih the surgeon. Meanwhile I am losing my ability to walk. I need this hip replacement. I know there is a wait, but I feel so broken.
Best wishes in the contest. This one is a winner to ME!
Joy xx
Comment Written 02-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2019
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Hi Joy. Thank you for the wonderful review. I hope you get help with your hip as soon as possible!!
Melissa
Comment from Amale Rhodes
I cannot say that I have read a lot of the material on here or recently read a lot in general. But, this piece is beautiful! Look forward to seeing more from you.
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2019
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I cannot say that I have read a lot of the material on here or recently read a lot in general. But, this piece is beautiful! Look forward to seeing more from you.
Comment Written 02-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2019
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Thank you Leanne!
Melissa
Comment from Loren .
Since there is no syllable count, then this must meet the requirements necessary for a five-line poem. Really, poetry is beyond me at times. When I read, I read for content and what it is saying (at least to me). Wounded spirits soaked in somber gray means, I think, they are remorseful to the point of tears. Good luck in the contest! Loren
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2019
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Since there is no syllable count, then this must meet the requirements necessary for a five-line poem. Really, poetry is beyond me at times. When I read, I read for content and what it is saying (at least to me). Wounded spirits soaked in somber gray means, I think, they are remorseful to the point of tears. Good luck in the contest! Loren
Comment Written 02-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2019
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Hello Loren. I am glad you reviewed and gave me such insightful comments. You DO understand what I was trying to say!
Melissa
Comment from DonandVicki
I feel and have always heard that narrow way is filled with hardship and ruts. The photograph is a perfect complement to your poem. I like the feeling of your poem. Don and Vicki.
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2019
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I feel and have always heard that narrow way is filled with hardship and ruts. The photograph is a perfect complement to your poem. I like the feeling of your poem. Don and Vicki.
Comment Written 02-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2019
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Hello Don or Vicki... Thanks so much for your insightful words and I am glad you like it.
Melissa
Comment from Agate Lucas
The idea of gloom and pain is very strong throughout the poem, and well expressed. My only comment is that the poem sounds maybe slightly unfinished (but I understand that it's difficult to say a lot in five lines). The rhythm and the images are very evocative and the rhyme between grey and way adds something to the atmosphere. Great picture and beautiful poem!
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reply by the author on 02-Aug-2019
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The idea of gloom and pain is very strong throughout the poem, and well expressed. My only comment is that the poem sounds maybe slightly unfinished (but I understand that it's difficult to say a lot in five lines). The rhythm and the images are very evocative and the rhyme between grey and way adds something to the atmosphere. Great picture and beautiful poem!
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Comment Written 02-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2019
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Thank you.
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Thank you.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Your last line seems to have a gremlin in it Melissa, I am assuming you are saying 'through a narrow way?" We are times broken in life and the path is uneven and somber as you describe, love Dolly x
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reply by the author on 02-Aug-2019
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Your last line seems to have a gremlin in it Melissa, I am assuming you are saying 'through a narrow way?" We are times broken in life and the path is uneven and somber as you describe, love Dolly x
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Comment Written 02-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2019
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Thanks, Dolly. I will check it.
Melissa
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Thanks, Dolly. I will check it.
Melissa
