Slow Down
Senryu Yourself44 total reviews
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written senryu about yourself. Money never last longer than the month. A sure sign of being underpaid. Congratulations for winning the contest. I hope the prize money lasts till after dinner.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2018
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A very well-written senryu about yourself. Money never last longer than the month. A sure sign of being underpaid. Congratulations for winning the contest. I hope the prize money lasts till after dinner.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2018
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Thank you, Sandra, for your great review, I appreciate it. If my wife see's the money and there's a sale going on at Walmart, it won't last until lunch...Have a wonderful day. Bill
Comment from TPAC
Cold. The message had me rolling in laughter, although its statement wasn't proper for my response. Still, its tingle pick up my spirits: I thank you. In my opinion of this write, a great read.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2018
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Cold. The message had me rolling in laughter, although its statement wasn't proper for my response. Still, its tingle pick up my spirits: I thank you. In my opinion of this write, a great read.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2018
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Thank you for your great response and for your laughter. I've always heard that laughing each day will increase your lifespan.
Another thing that I have learned the hard way is to "NEVER" take viagra on top of laxatives. Hell, you don't know whether you're coming or going...Bill
Comment from Lloyd T. Okoko
This is an exceptional Senryu yourself writing prompt that courageously reminisces the fleeting nature of money and making love.
The work highlights how the protagonist's wife compares his making love to her as synonymous with money and how both phenomena are often short lived.
Outstanding work! Keep the flag flying!
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2018
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This is an exceptional Senryu yourself writing prompt that courageously reminisces the fleeting nature of money and making love.
The work highlights how the protagonist's wife compares his making love to her as synonymous with money and how both phenomena are often short lived.
Outstanding work! Keep the flag flying!
Comment Written 19-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2018
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Thank you, Lloyd, for your wonderful review and rating. I really appreciate your kind words. Have a great day my friend. Bill
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Remain Blessed!
Comment from Poetic Friend
Well, at least you can laugh at yourself, which is something some people have challenges doing so.
I can see why this poem won the contest. It is is hilarious. I love the similes/comparisons.
Great usage of syllables and word choice.
Have a wonderful week.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2018
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Well, at least you can laugh at yourself, which is something some people have challenges doing so.
I can see why this poem won the contest. It is is hilarious. I love the similes/comparisons.
Great usage of syllables and word choice.
Have a wonderful week.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2018
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Thank you, my Poetic Friend, for your excellent review. I appreciate it. Laughter increases your life-span..Bill
Comment from Ricky1024
we all need to slow down a bit I think other world is too fast paced Internet only made it worse now we communicate fornicate with the accounts of the elderly in those who are not aware of until I can some of these people on the internet and then we have the children with access to Mom's dad sister brother cell phone to go on the internet on sites like Facebook and others where they see all these horrible things well written thanks for this doctor Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2018
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we all need to slow down a bit I think other world is too fast paced Internet only made it worse now we communicate fornicate with the accounts of the elderly in those who are not aware of until I can some of these people on the internet and then we have the children with access to Mom's dad sister brother cell phone to go on the internet on sites like Facebook and others where they see all these horrible things well written thanks for this doctor Ricky 1024
Comment Written 19-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2018
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Thank you, Ricky, for your well thought out review, I really appreciate it. Most reviews are of the hit and miss variety. So, thanks again for your time and effort...Bill
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Congratulations Bill on your win! This is a gem of a write and worth the top stop! I must have missed this write first time around, but I'm glad I have read it now, a very amusing Senryu, and a great win for you, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2018
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Congratulations Bill on your win! This is a gem of a write and worth the top stop! I must have missed this write first time around, but I'm glad I have read it now, a very amusing Senryu, and a great win for you, love Dolly x
Comment Written 19-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2018
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Thanks Dolly for your great review, I really appreciate it. Have a wonderful day my friend...Bill
Comment from Jean Lutz
Some folk do spend it as fast as they get it. This is hilarious and deep in layers. Love the selected art -- I think he may still be clueless. I wish you well with the writing prompt. I am feeling my way back after being away from FanStory for awhile.
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2018
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Some folk do spend it as fast as they get it. This is hilarious and deep in layers. Love the selected art -- I think he may still be clueless. I wish you well with the writing prompt. I am feeling my way back after being away from FanStory for awhile.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2018
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Thank you, Jean, for your excellent review. I really appreciate it. And it's great to have you back with us. Have a blessed Sunday. Bill
Comment from bichonfrisegirl
Haha ... gotta love this one, with a zinger of a concluding line! I especially love your title "Slow Down". :) Excellent pairing of picture and poem. Congrats on your well deserved win, Bill! ~~ Connie
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2018
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Haha ... gotta love this one, with a zinger of a concluding line! I especially love your title "Slow Down". :) Excellent pairing of picture and poem. Congrats on your well deserved win, Bill! ~~ Connie
Comment Written 14-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2018
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Hey girl, how are you? Thanks for the great review, I'm glad you liked it. And, thanks for dropping by.
How's the winter going for you? This has been the coldest one we've had in several years. I sure will be glad to see spring roll around.
It was great talking to you, Connie. Take care of yourself and stay warm...Bill
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I'm great, thanks! I hope that you are too, Bill.
Ditto on looking forward to Spring. Our Winter in Calgary has been the worst it's been in several years. Lots of snow and poor road conditions! Walking outside is virtually non-existent due to the extreme cold and icy patches. Let's hope it warms up sooner rather than later. :)
Have a great day, Bill! ~~ Connie
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Bruce
So this is a Senryu of Yourself
It's really good and I can see why you were the winner of this contest
Smiles
Gert
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2018
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Hello Bruce
So this is a Senryu of Yourself
It's really good and I can see why you were the winner of this contest
Smiles
Gert
Comment Written 10-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2018
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Thank you, Gert, for your excellent review, I really appreciate it. Have a blessed Sunday...Bill
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You are welcome Bill
Gert
Comment from angel123
Your Senryu Yourself poem is written with humor and good use of alliteration of l, letters, and sounds. Your artwork choice also goes well with your message. Best wishes!
Angel123
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2018
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Your Senryu Yourself poem is written with humor and good use of alliteration of l, letters, and sounds. Your artwork choice also goes well with your message. Best wishes!
Angel123
Comment Written 09-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2018
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Thank you, Angel, for your great review, I appreciate your comments. It won the contest. Have a wonderful weekend...Bill