This Time - That Time 2
Viewing comments for Chapter 29 "Joe is Cornered"Veronica is sent back again
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Comment from Sharon Haiste
Well done. This chapter is exciting and interesting. One possible glitch:
suddenly filling me with dread. - 'filled'
The story remains good and clear and I'm looking forward to the next part.
Sharon
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2018
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Well done. This chapter is exciting and interesting. One possible glitch:
suddenly filling me with dread. - 'filled'
The story remains good and clear and I'm looking forward to the next part.
Sharon
Comment Written 20-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2018
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Thank you so much for your lovely review, Sharon. I'm made that correction!! I'm so pleased you are enjoying my story! xxx Sandra
Comment from giraffmang
Nice bit of action and good tension in this instalment. It's all kicking off...lol
I told him as the malevolent look on their faces suddenly filling me with dread. - I think it should be filled here rather than filling.
Yeh best be getting' outta - delete the 'g' from getting'.
bang on Mrs Humphries door - Humphries'.
rained down on his attackers' heads 'Atta girl!' - should have punctuation after heads.
his assailant's vice like grip- vicelike can be a single word here.
made my way down the lane the in direction - in the.
she lived just passed the bend in the lane - past.
the flickering of candle light - candlelight could be one word here.
small, run-down cottage - so can rundown.
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reply by the author on 20-Jan-2018
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Nice bit of action and good tension in this instalment. It's all kicking off...lol
I told him as the malevolent look on their faces suddenly filling me with dread. - I think it should be filled here rather than filling.
Yeh best be getting' outta - delete the 'g' from getting'.
bang on Mrs Humphries door - Humphries'.
rained down on his attackers' heads 'Atta girl!' - should have punctuation after heads.
his assailant's vice like grip- vicelike can be a single word here.
made my way down the lane the in direction - in the.
she lived just passed the bend in the lane - past.
the flickering of candle light - candlelight could be one word here.
small, run-down cottage - so can rundown.
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Comment Written 20-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2018
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'cringe' I can't believe it, how do I keep missing those little nits? Thank goodness I have you on my side!! I have to admit I didn't know 'rundown' and 'vicelike' could be one word. Thank you for that. I'm learning something every day. Thank you so very much, Gareth, for this lovely, very helpful review. I've made all the corrections and will again try to remember to go through it until I am absolutely sure I've caught them all. Big hugs, my friend. Sandra xxx
Comment from Ricky1024
this was well written written seem as well as energy flows what red wine with no grammar issues as well I checked him not to come since we're both firmly in place an excellent as usual I'm perfectly thanks for just talked to Ricky
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this was well written written seem as well as energy flows what red wine with no grammar issues as well I checked him not to come since we're both firmly in place an excellent as usual I'm perfectly thanks for just talked to Ricky
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Comment Written 20-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2018
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Thank you, Ricky. I'm glad you enjoyed it. :) Sandra x
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Always a pleasure.
Dr Ricky 1024.
