The Window
Can Darkness Expunge the Light?90 total reviews
Comment from smreel
I loved how you stagger the lines in this poem. Did the person jump out the window themselves, or did they prove to fall from grace because they shoved someone else out the window? Loved it! Good job.
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2017
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I loved how you stagger the lines in this poem. Did the person jump out the window themselves, or did they prove to fall from grace because they shoved someone else out the window? Loved it! Good job.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2017
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You are the second person to respond to the "architecture" of the poem, smreel. I'm happy you enjoyed that part of it. You are the second (or third) reader who responded to the connection between "window" and "fell" concluding someone fell from the window. Your interpretation is as good as any. I left the poem purposely wide open to interpretation, and if you took the time to read the other reviewers you would find--I'm guessing--at least 12 entirely different interpretations. And they all grow out of the poem's words, so who am I to say any one is wrong? Again, thank you so much for your time and wisdom.
Comment from Curly Girly
Hi, Jay! I enjoyed reading your poem and I like your image choice too.
To me, this poem tells of a person who saw their failure coming and watched it unfold. The drawing of the blinds and latching of the door appear to symbolise an end and a private moment. The person is left to reflect on a past failure.
I saw
enough to grieve
his fall; then drew the blinds,
latched the door--and proved it is I
who fell.
Nicole
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2017
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Hi, Jay! I enjoyed reading your poem and I like your image choice too.
To me, this poem tells of a person who saw their failure coming and watched it unfold. The drawing of the blinds and latching of the door appear to symbolise an end and a private moment. The person is left to reflect on a past failure.
I saw
enough to grieve
his fall; then drew the blinds,
latched the door--and proved it is I
who fell.
Nicole
Comment Written 11-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2017
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I left it purposely open-ended, as I did with the previous poem. My image was of the narrator standing at his open window where he witnessed someone on the street being victimized, falling. Not knowing whether he was dead or alive, he chose to close the blinds and latch the door. His choice to act in that manner caused his fall. The interpretations, though, were across the board. Thank you so much for the six stars, Nicole. I really appreciate you.
Comment from emptypage
So.... the narrator witnesses a fall, a death, and chooses to do nothing? Or is this metaphorical?
Either way, I understand the second half of the poem well. I like it. It is gritty and real, but makes the narrator hateable.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2017
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So.... the narrator witnesses a fall, a death, and chooses to do nothing? Or is this metaphorical?
Either way, I understand the second half of the poem well. I like it. It is gritty and real, but makes the narrator hateable.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2017
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Thanks, emptypage. I'm happy you enjoyed reading it. Thank you for your kindness and generous rating.
Comment from Spitfire
Another thought-provoking poem. The line breaks and formatting add to the impact. How guilty most of are of giving grief short shrift and turning our backs on tragedy. Therein do we fail or fall. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2017
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Another thought-provoking poem. The line breaks and formatting add to the impact. How guilty most of are of giving grief short shrift and turning our backs on tragedy. Therein do we fail or fall. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2017
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I'm glad you enjoyed this, Shari. It is amazing the variance of interpretation of this poem. I did leave it open. Really, not much choice, given the constraints. But you were spot on with your conclusion. Thanks for your generosity, my friend.
Comment from Badger_29
Well done with this; great font and spacing. Seems to be a case of almost split personality, thoughtful. Nice to read twice, a dramatic and thought provoking conclusion.
Blessings,
Brother Badger
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2017
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Well done with this; great font and spacing. Seems to be a case of almost split personality, thoughtful. Nice to read twice, a dramatic and thought provoking conclusion.
Blessings,
Brother Badger
Comment Written 10-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2017
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How kind of you BroBadger, for your thoughtful review for my poem.
Comment from Spiritual Echo
I don't need to pull the blinds to know, but your post and the format seemed to expose a reluctance to surrender, Coyldn't read red on black on your other post.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2017
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I don't need to pull the blinds to know, but your post and the format seemed to expose a reluctance to surrender, Coyldn't read red on black on your other post.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2017
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Thanks for the sixer, Ingrid. Yes I'd say "reluctance" is a fair assessment. Sorry you couldn't read the previous poem's font and color. What I always do is paste it onto word, increase the font to 14 for everything and color it to my pleasure. I do that for all posts, then just paste it to the review box when I'm finished.
Comment from poetsteve15
It is simple and easy to read. The art work goes will with it. I like what you did very much. Hope see more of your poems soon.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2017
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It is simple and easy to read. The art work goes will with it. I like what you did very much. Hope see more of your poems soon.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2017
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Glad you enjoyed this, Steve. Thanks for your kindness.
Comment from Irish Rain
Love your notes. I love Cleo85's work. This is a wonderfully DEEP Cinquain. I love it, and the way you've presented it, with Cleo's artwork, is just awesome!! Blessings....
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2017
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Love your notes. I love Cleo85's work. This is a wonderfully DEEP Cinquain. I love it, and the way you've presented it, with Cleo's artwork, is just awesome!! Blessings....
Comment Written 10-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2017
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I'm so happy you enjoyed this, Judy. Yes, I felt blessed to find so easily a picture to go with the poem.
Comment from nancyrabbrose
This is a very deep and thoughtful poem. It seems to tell us that one man's "fall" is ours as well. This kind of empathy and compassion would well benefit our world right now. Well done.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2017
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This is a very deep and thoughtful poem. It seems to tell us that one man's "fall" is ours as well. This kind of empathy and compassion would well benefit our world right now. Well done.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2017
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Thank you, Nancy. You hit the nail on the head with your review. We all live in a "No Man Is an Island" world, don't we? Thanks for seeing that, for your kind words and generous rating.
Comment from mvbrooks
This poem is deep and seemed a life-lesson from "To Whom the Bell Tolls" as an action meant to shut someone out resulted by shutting the narrator from others. There's a sense of regret and sadness in the storyline. Compelling life lesson.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2017
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This poem is deep and seemed a life-lesson from "To Whom the Bell Tolls" as an action meant to shut someone out resulted by shutting the narrator from others. There's a sense of regret and sadness in the storyline. Compelling life lesson.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2017
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Yes, MV, the famous line from "No Man Is an Island." I'm thrilled you picked up on the sadness and regret. One often wonders (as I do) how one would respond if he came upon a car accident and was the only one nearby. The passenger is trapped inside. The car is smoking, fire could erupt any moment. Distant siren whining. Does one stop, risk one's life to try to remove the passenger (both could go up in flame)? Or think ... "Help is on the way. They can better help this person," and drive on? A human dilemma. "So never go to see for whom the bell tolls. It tolls for thee."
Thank you so very much for your astute insight.
