Comment from Teri7

Excellent

Patty, This is a very well written chapter. You used very good descriptive wording and very good imagery. I enjoyed reading and reviewing it. sounds like Jerry wasn't too happy that Doug wasn't too happy about Kathy being in charge of so much!
I found this one thing that might need to be corrected:
I owe it myself to work on this last project she
I owe it (to) myself to work

Blessings, Teri

 Comment Written 06-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 06-Jun-2017

Hi Teri; thank you so much for the wonderful review. I so appreciate you catching the nit - I went and did the edit before replying.

I hope you will get caught up on the next parts when you return from your vacation,

~patty~

reply by Teri7 on 06-Jun-2017

I hope to get caught up with it as I really enjoyed reading this!

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

Do you write the whole story before posting? Or write as you go along? I am intrigued because most people write a whole book and then release the chapters. Or are you influenced by the feedback? You have a great knack with the story writing Patty, I enjoyed it, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 06-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 06-Jun-2017

Hi Dolly; I am writing as I go along. It seems this story came to me fully formed, bu I want to approach each part 'fresh.'

Thank you for the lovely compliments - I appreciate your words of encouragement,

~patty~

reply by Dolly'sPoems on 06-Jun-2017

I look forward to the next instalment! Love Dolly x

Comment from Curly Girly

Excellent

I enjoyed reading this strange story. It tells a fascinating tale of a woman passing away. In her will, she asks an estranged daughter-in-law to arrange her memorial service. The reactions of family members when her husband phoned on her behalf was awful but awfully true to a real life situation.
This chapter is engaging and I'm looking forward to reading the next.

 Comment Written 06-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 06-Jun-2017

Hi CG: thank you so much for reading. I'm glad you are enjoying the story line. I think you will enjoy the rest - probably two more parts. I look forward to your responses,
~patty~

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Ah, so that's the reason for the check amount change. Thanks for another riveting read. One question: when Doug calls Sylvia, he asks if her wife is there. Is that intentional meaning it's a same sex couple? I also wondered why all of Doug's sisters were so against Kathy.

 Comment Written 06-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 06-Jun-2017

Hi there; Yes, Sylvia is a lesbian, and the nastiness between the sisters comes from a dysfunctional mother. No one ever felt loved and good old Jane dared to talk up Kathy. (More of this will be revealed in the next part.)

Thank you so much for continuing to read, and I hope you will come along for the rest of the ride,

~patty~

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

Hello, Patty, interesting plot and characters. I've known toxic people like that and I feel bad for Kathy. I look forward reading the next chapter.

Well done, honey.

Gypsy

 Comment Written 06-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 06-Jun-2017

Hi Gypsy; thank you so much for continuing to follow this story. I am loving working with these characters - though they wake me up in the middle of the night with plot twists and bits of dialogue!

I appreciate your kind words,
~patty~

Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell

Excellent

LOL, I loved the last sentence, needing security at a wake! They don't sound like nice people, do they, and I'm sure they are not going to be nice to Kathy at the funeral either. What will they be like when the will is read? Can't wait to find out, but it looks like I'm going to have to. Have a lovely time with daughter and your grandchildren. :) Sandra xx

 Comment Written 06-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 06-Jun-2017

Hi Sandra; thank you so much for reading this latest chapter.
I've decided to take my laptop with me. I usually wake up before my daughter and the kids, and I will use the time to write and get the next part up on the site.

I'm glad you are looking forward to the wake - it should be a 'good' time,
~patty~

reply by Sandra Stoner-Mitchell on 06-Jun-2017

Brilliant, it sounds like it's going to be fun. I bet the mother has a surprise waiting for them all. :) You have a lovely time, though! xx

Comment from dweigt

Excellent

Good stuff! Sounds like a dysfunctional family. No fun in real life, but great for fiction.

I like how you handled the phone calls. You hit the right balance, showing us one call to a sister and summarizing the others.

One minor nit:
Waiting to give him time to catch up with her words, she monitored for his reaction. Should she go on or let him talk about his feelings about his mother's death.?

Oh...one more thing, can I have a few security people? It might get rough if everyone is drinking..." -- dun-dun-DUNNNNN! Nice little foreshadowing. Now we expect trouble and are looking forward to it.

I enjoyed this. Keep writing!

 Comment Written 06-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 06-Jun-2017

Hi there; thank you so much for this thorough and concise review. Thank you for pointing out the nit - I went and made the edit. I'm glad you are enjoying the story and I hope you will continue to follow the rest of the 'wild' ride.

~patty~

Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

A dysfunctional family is asked to let by-gones be over and attend their mother's memorial. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words making for a very good read.

 Comment Written 06-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 06-Jun-2017

Hi; thank you so much for reading and reviewing this second part of the story. I hope you will enjoy the next parts and continue along on this 'wild' ride,

~patty~

Comment from giraffmang

Excellent

Hi Patty,

A good continuation of the piece and a bit more backstory woven in about the family dynamics.

I owe it myself to work on this last project she left for me - owe it to myself?

The tones of the number could be heard as he punched the keys - I don't think this line really serves any purpose.

 Comment Written 06-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 06-Jun-2017

Hi G; thank you so much for stopping by to read and review. I'm glad you liked this continuation of the story, and the way I worked in more of the back story. I hope you will continue to read along with this 'wild' ride,

~patty~

Comment from JDRBAR

Excellent

This was not long. I thought it just right, LOL. I wondered about the money and had the same thoughts about it not being enough. This should be one memorable wake.

 Comment Written 06-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 06-Jun-2017

Hi there; thank you so much for the thoughtful review. I'm working on the next part 'in my head' right now, and there are so many possibilities! Thank you for reading along, and I hope you will enjoy the rest of this 'wild' ride,
~patty~