You Don't Know Me
Trying to make them understand37 total reviews
Comment from TAB_that's me
I hate when kids make fun of others for any reason but especially for being poor - the kids can't help that. One of the parents of my friend in junior high didn't like me because I was from the wrong side of tracks.
This is a wonderful poem and message.
teresa
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I hate when kids make fun of others for any reason but especially for being poor - the kids can't help that. One of the parents of my friend in junior high didn't like me because I was from the wrong side of tracks.
This is a wonderful poem and message.
teresa
Comment Written 28-Mar-2017
Comment from RGstar
I had a little lump in the throat here. I expected a typical kids rhythmic poem for remembrance, but what I got was something written through the eyes of one who brought proud to the counter, who brought dignity to the answer, and never once bowed his head. So was it, is it, and always be, for many.
Bravo.
Six stars.
Best wishes.
RGstar
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I had a little lump in the throat here. I expected a typical kids rhythmic poem for remembrance, but what I got was something written through the eyes of one who brought proud to the counter, who brought dignity to the answer, and never once bowed his head. So was it, is it, and always be, for many.
Bravo.
Six stars.
Best wishes.
RGstar
Comment Written 28-Mar-2017
Comment from Selina Stambi
I love the poem. I'm a sucker the innocence of children's poetry.
Good rhyme and metre. I think I recognize the style, mystery writer!
Best wishes for the contest. Hope you win!
Sonali
I live on (T)hirteenth (A)venue,
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I love the poem. I'm a sucker the innocence of children's poetry.
Good rhyme and metre. I think I recognize the style, mystery writer!
Best wishes for the contest. Hope you win!
Sonali
I live on (T)hirteenth (A)venue,
Comment Written 28-Mar-2017
Comment from nuthead
Kids can be so cruel. Judgmental. But they can also be kind. For some, an invitation home might enlighten them. For others, it would only add to their fodder of false "ammunition" to continue.
Nice rhyme scheme. Simple language - as intended; it's for children.
The home sounds lovely and inviting. A place I would love to visit.
A couple very minor editing suggestions:
"I live on thirteenth avenue,"
(Capitalize street name, "Thirteenth Avenue")
"My cat,'Newman', loves new friends"
(Space needed between "cat" and "Newman". And quotations marks around the cat's name are not needed.)
"My cat, Newman, loves new friends"
Nice! Best wishes in the contest.
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Kids can be so cruel. Judgmental. But they can also be kind. For some, an invitation home might enlighten them. For others, it would only add to their fodder of false "ammunition" to continue.
Nice rhyme scheme. Simple language - as intended; it's for children.
The home sounds lovely and inviting. A place I would love to visit.
A couple very minor editing suggestions:
"I live on thirteenth avenue,"
(Capitalize street name, "Thirteenth Avenue")
"My cat,'Newman', loves new friends"
(Space needed between "cat" and "Newman". And quotations marks around the cat's name are not needed.)
"My cat, Newman, loves new friends"
Nice! Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2017
Comment from MaggieF
Every child needs to read this! Wealth should not be measured by designer labels or material things. Such an upbeat poem, I love that the child decides to speak out in a positive way. The last line is so strong and I agree the child is a winner. Enjoyed. MaggieF
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Every child needs to read this! Wealth should not be measured by designer labels or material things. Such an upbeat poem, I love that the child decides to speak out in a positive way. The last line is so strong and I agree the child is a winner. Enjoyed. MaggieF
Comment Written 28-Mar-2017
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
The kids at school are mean to me,
Just because I'm poor.
Whatever makes the difference?
I try hard and I do more!
So, I've decided just to stop
Pretending I don't care,
And next time someone's mean to me
I'll have some words to share.
"Just walk a mile in my shoes...
I'm not different from you!
You just got lucky; caught some breaks,
And now here's what I'll do.
I'll make some pie from apples
Mom picks up from clean waste.
I'll share some of the best food
You'd ever want to taste.
This was so sweet and touching
it made me want to cry, amazing, so sweet and touching, very well done, this is wonderful xlove meia
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The kids at school are mean to me,
Just because I'm poor.
Whatever makes the difference?
I try hard and I do more!
So, I've decided just to stop
Pretending I don't care,
And next time someone's mean to me
I'll have some words to share.
"Just walk a mile in my shoes...
I'm not different from you!
You just got lucky; caught some breaks,
And now here's what I'll do.
I'll make some pie from apples
Mom picks up from clean waste.
I'll share some of the best food
You'd ever want to taste.
This was so sweet and touching
it made me want to cry, amazing, so sweet and touching, very well done, this is wonderful xlove meia
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Comment Written 28-Mar-2017
Comment from Dean Kuch
More often than not, those who have grown up poor their entire lives fare much better in the dog-eat-dog, cut-throat world we live in today.
Why? Because they have learned the means by which to survive despite seemingly overwhelming odds.
That's why.
They grow up to become entrepreneurs, owning and operating their own businesses with a sense of frugality they would not have gleaned otherwise.
Some go on to colleges and universities to become doctors, veterinarians, scientists, astronauts, and yes, even writers.
Stephen King was raised by a single mom whose father left the family while he was very young.
Did they struggle?
Oh, absolutely.
In the long run, was he better off having endured those struggles?
You bet your butt he was.
Great poem.
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More often than not, those who have grown up poor their entire lives fare much better in the dog-eat-dog, cut-throat world we live in today.
Why? Because they have learned the means by which to survive despite seemingly overwhelming odds.
That's why.
They grow up to become entrepreneurs, owning and operating their own businesses with a sense of frugality they would not have gleaned otherwise.
Some go on to colleges and universities to become doctors, veterinarians, scientists, astronauts, and yes, even writers.
Stephen King was raised by a single mom whose father left the family while he was very young.
Did they struggle?
Oh, absolutely.
In the long run, was he better off having endured those struggles?
You bet your butt he was.
Great poem.
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Comment Written 28-Mar-2017