Comment from rspoet

Excellent

This is a fine entry for the contest
Exact 5-7-5 syllables
Good use of alliteration that works well
Nice concrete imagery in the rays/shadows
with good grammatical connection
Solid third line reflection
Excellent picture to match
Well done
Good luck in the contest

 Comment Written 18-Mar-2016

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reply by the author on 28-Mar-2016

Thanks for reading and for this great review Zanya

Comment from Pam (respa)

Excellent

-Lovely image.
-Good format and presentation.
-Excellent imagery and use of alliteration.
-Line one effectively describes the sunset.
-Good connection between lines one and two.
-I like the use of "emblazon" to describe the twilight.
-Very nice satori.

 Comment Written 18-Mar-2016

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reply by the author on 28-Mar-2016

Thanks for reading and the review 'emblazon' is such a great word is it not ? Zanya

reply by Pam (respa) on 28-Mar-2016

You are welcome. Yes, it is a good word!

Comment from Pantygynt

Excellent

An unusual use of words. No, they are not wrong but just far enough out of their usual context to make you think, which is a good idea. Saffron not a colour usually associated with the sunset but it is most apt and the idea of the sun's rays emblazoning the shadow when the reverse is actually the truth. Who cares about the truth you are describing what you see and that is something way removed from truth. Clever 5--7--5

 Comment Written 18-Mar-2016

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reply by the author on 28-Mar-2016

Great review thanks for reading Zanya

Comment from fastdigits

Excellent

Seventeen syllables of the
heralding of spring painted
with your poetic words of
a sunset in spring.
Well done and good luck

 Comment Written 18-Mar-2016

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reply by the author on 28-Mar-2016

Great review thanks for reading Zanya

Comment from Amy Greta

Excellent

Such a warm and comforting feel from your beautiful sunset 5-7-5! The words, especially with the alliteration, flow so smoothly together, just like the sun so smoothly sinks into the horizon. And the word "emblazon"... I love it; it's perfect for your poem and gives a little fire to it.
Fantastic entry for the contest!
Amy

 Comment Written 18-Mar-2016

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reply by the author on 28-Mar-2016

Thanks for reading and a super b review Zanya

Comment from Alan K Pease

Excellent

Your poem (saffron sunset rays) fits the constraints of this form of poetry with satori very well. We do need Spring soon. Good luck in the poetry contest,

 Comment Written 18-Mar-2016

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reply by the author on 28-Mar-2016

Thanks for reading and the review Zanya

Comment from LisaD123

Excellent

Such and elegant and evocative poem conjured from none words. The alliterative phrases are particularly effective. Great job! Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 18-Mar-2016

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reply by the author on 28-Mar-2016

And thanks for reading and the critique Zanya

Comment from MacMhuirich

Excellent

This is a wonderful 5-7-5 poem for the contest. You have given excellent imagery in your wording and the artwork compliments the words very well. Thank you for sharing and best wishes for the contest.
Bless you
John

 Comment Written 18-Mar-2016

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reply by the author on 28-Mar-2016

Thanks for reading and the critique Zanya

Comment from Bill O'Bier

Excellent

A well written poem for the contest entry. Excellent use of words. The arrangement here is very creative and the words are expressive. The picture is appropriate for the theme of the poem. Good luck in the contest.

All the best--
Bill~

 Comment Written 18-Mar-2016

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reply by the author on 28-Mar-2016

Thanks for reading and the critique Zanya

Comment from scd41

Excellent

Your 5-7-5 poem gives an excellent imagery of sunset in spring. It is amply complimented by the colorful picture. The short poem has also a few alliterations. It is a good entry for the contest and best of luck to you.

 Comment Written 18-Mar-2016

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reply by the author on 28-Mar-2016

Thanks for reading and the critique Zanya