Act of Endurance
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Comment from Amadeus66
I can see the sugar-rush in and want to steer clear in avoidance.
Quite a bit confusing, but understandably a pleasant poetic piece in the story. Keep up the good writing!
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2016
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I can see the sugar-rush in and want to steer clear in avoidance.
Quite a bit confusing, but understandably a pleasant poetic piece in the story. Keep up the good writing!
Comment Written 23-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2016
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Pits are my failure, terms of proper expression: my joy is the ideal. Thanking you for generous rate and touching statements.
Comment from Writer8264
I liked this piece of writing. It was very descriptive. I loved a lot of those things as a kid actually. Lots of detail. The only thing wa that I've never seen or read this style of writing. Almost just short sentences. Never knew you foul write like that. Very interesting. Great job
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2016
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I liked this piece of writing. It was very descriptive. I loved a lot of those things as a kid actually. Lots of detail. The only thing wa that I've never seen or read this style of writing. Almost just short sentences. Never knew you foul write like that. Very interesting. Great job
Comment Written 22-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2016
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Came to FS for answer to what I was writing: whether its poetry. Answer a definate statement. Thanking you for generous rate and revelation of a comment.
Comment from scd41
You have demonstrated your skill in stretching your imagination and that is what makes fantasy poetry so interesting. Who would not find 'almond joy soup and joy ice cream' delicious? Or 'chocolate mountains tipped with whipped cream'? One thing, according to me, which makes fantasy poetry superior to dreams, is that in the latter case, the dreamer does not know what to expect whereas in the former case, the reader can anticipate what is in store.
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2016
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You have demonstrated your skill in stretching your imagination and that is what makes fantasy poetry so interesting. Who would not find 'almond joy soup and joy ice cream' delicious? Or 'chocolate mountains tipped with whipped cream'? One thing, according to me, which makes fantasy poetry superior to dreams, is that in the latter case, the dreamer does not know what to expect whereas in the former case, the reader can anticipate what is in store.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2016
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Glad some aspects of this fantasy, you found pleasing. Thanking you for generous rate and captivating comments.
Comment from royowen
Well done, I enjoyed what is probably a nostalgic poetic journey from what is also a drifting into one's past, some literal, some pieced together, after all most memory is not perfect in perception, but nevertheless paints a desirable canvass of what was? Well written, most enjoyable journey with you, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2016
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Well done, I enjoyed what is probably a nostalgic poetic journey from what is also a drifting into one's past, some literal, some pieced together, after all most memory is not perfect in perception, but nevertheless paints a desirable canvass of what was? Well written, most enjoyable journey with you, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 21-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2016
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Glad this write found some appeal and interests. Thanking you for generous rate and touching statements.
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Most welcome
Comment from DarriaStevens82
Some lines were interesting, some lines didn't make sense to me like "a said to be fact"...I wasn't sure what you were trying to tell me. Because of that it was hard for me to find something to hold on to and keep my attention, It felt like a bunch of words strung together with no theme. I had to read the title a few times to bring myself back to the topic.
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2016
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Some lines were interesting, some lines didn't make sense to me like "a said to be fact"...I wasn't sure what you were trying to tell me. Because of that it was hard for me to find something to hold on to and keep my attention, It felt like a bunch of words strung together with no theme. I had to read the title a few times to bring myself back to the topic.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2016
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Yeah, my write has their challenges, warming in certain aspects and confusing in others. Thanking you for generous rate and welcomed thoughts.
Comment from foreverbutterfly
A Lovely piece of poetry, I have a feeling I have read some work of yours before. You write in a unique way that I really enjoy. I'm not sure whether it is supposed to be but there appears to be some large gaps between some of the paragraphs, and smaller gaps between others.
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2016
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A Lovely piece of poetry, I have a feeling I have read some work of yours before. You write in a unique way that I really enjoy. I'm not sure whether it is supposed to be but there appears to be some large gaps between some of the paragraphs, and smaller gaps between others.
Comment Written 11-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2016
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I was trying to break up the pressure of the read. Glad some of my works as this found interests. Thanking you for generous rate and touching statements.
Comment from foxangie123
This takes me back to a time I was way younger as I can relate to this in that fashion. You are a very talented author.
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2016
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This takes me back to a time I was way younger as I can relate to this in that fashion. You are a very talented author.
Comment Written 11-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2016
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No you are a generous reviewer. Thanking you for your inspiring comments and pleasing to me rate.
Comment from Neonewman
What a elegant style you have delivered with the well crafted piece my friend. I love the imagination of a child. What stories their little minds conjure.
God bless!
STeve
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2016
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What a elegant style you have delivered with the well crafted piece my friend. I love the imagination of a child. What stories their little minds conjure.
God bless!
STeve
Comment Written 31-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2016
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Glad this memory touched you as well. Thanking you for generous rate and welcomed comments.
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My pleasure!
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My pleasure!
Comment from Nika2016
Enchanting...symbolism in the way an autistic child with language might experience the world..or a baby's consciousness. It draws one in and does not let go until the end. Disturbing, at first, it, like the train, lulls one into its cadence. It's very good.
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2016
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Enchanting...symbolism in the way an autistic child with language might experience the world..or a baby's consciousness. It draws one in and does not let go until the end. Disturbing, at first, it, like the train, lulls one into its cadence. It's very good.
Comment Written 30-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2016
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It hold interests and an appeal. Thanking you for generous rate and touching statements.
Comment from William Ross
This is very nice, and well written. reads very well nice job. Thanks for sharing this wonderful piece with us. have a very happy and joyous New Year.
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2015
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This is very nice, and well written. reads very well nice job. Thanks for sharing this wonderful piece with us. have a very happy and joyous New Year.
Comment Written 28-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2015
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Glad this work was appealing to your interests. Thanking you for generous rate and captivating comments.