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Viewing comments for Chapter 11 "The Still Waters"poems inspired by Psalm 23
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Comment from tfawcus
This perfectly formed nonetheless acts rather like a funnel, the panoramic beauty of the lake being condensed into single drops of loveliness to refresh the soul of the poet. Like poetry itself, our response to beauty is a process of distillation.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2015
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This perfectly formed nonetheless acts rather like a funnel, the panoramic beauty of the lake being condensed into single drops of loveliness to refresh the soul of the poet. Like poetry itself, our response to beauty is a process of distillation.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2015
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I love your analysis and the insightful remarks about our response to beauty. Thank you! Debi.
Comment from Tatarka2
I think this deserves a 6 on this Easter Sunday, because it seems to me to have fulfilled the requirements exactly, and it also send such an inspiring message. I love the alliteration and description in this nonet. Good luck in the contest. I think this is a very strong entry.
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I think this deserves a 6 on this Easter Sunday, because it seems to me to have fulfilled the requirements exactly, and it also send such an inspiring message. I love the alliteration and description in this nonet. Good luck in the contest. I think this is a very strong entry.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2015
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Thank you so much for the six stars and even more for the beautiful comments. I appreciate the good luck wishes. Thank you for pointing out the alliteration.
Comment from RGstar
A lovely way of putting it. Good alliteration and adjectives complimenting the verbs.
A lovely cnnection like;
waters
reflection
shimmering
whispered
ripples
timeless
trickles
vibrations
thirsty
soul.
Perfect. Well done.
Have a good Easter.
RGstar
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2015
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A lovely way of putting it. Good alliteration and adjectives complimenting the verbs.
A lovely cnnection like;
waters
reflection
shimmering
whispered
ripples
timeless
trickles
vibrations
thirsty
soul.
Perfect. Well done.
Have a good Easter.
RGstar
Comment Written 05-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2015
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Thank you for the encouraging review. Thank you for mentioning her connection and listing the words that made it work.
Comment from krys123
Debi; Resourceful imagination
+ Near and notable alliteration's: /"sharing surface"/"whispered wisdom"/"timeless truth trickles"/"drop by drop"/ (Very enjoyable alliteration's Debi)
+ Requirements for this Nonet met appropriately and very well done
+ Imagery very distinct and clear and also very expressive and vividly descriptive: "Timeless truth trickles as sacred vibration seep drop by drop". A metaphorical imagery that expresses time ambiguously.
+ The reading flows very well because of its cadence.
+ Poetic assessment and summary: I enjoyed the use of metaphor in this poem as it is very artistically imagined where literally it's an impossibility but being enigmatic and cryptic makes for a visually picturesque and empathetic suggestion.
+ Thank you for sharing and posting Debi and may the good Lord be with you always on this happy Easter.
Alex
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2015
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Debi; Resourceful imagination
+ Near and notable alliteration's: /"sharing surface"/"whispered wisdom"/"timeless truth trickles"/"drop by drop"/ (Very enjoyable alliteration's Debi)
+ Requirements for this Nonet met appropriately and very well done
+ Imagery very distinct and clear and also very expressive and vividly descriptive: "Timeless truth trickles as sacred vibration seep drop by drop". A metaphorical imagery that expresses time ambiguously.
+ The reading flows very well because of its cadence.
+ Poetic assessment and summary: I enjoyed the use of metaphor in this poem as it is very artistically imagined where literally it's an impossibility but being enigmatic and cryptic makes for a visually picturesque and empathetic suggestion.
+ Thank you for sharing and posting Debi and may the good Lord be with you always on this happy Easter.
Alex
Comment Written 05-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2015
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Thank you for the wonderful review, Alex. I appreciate the time you take to mention what you feel works and analyze that the requirements met for the chosen form. I am pleased that you enjoyed the metaphors in this verse. Have a wonderful Easter! Debi
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You are so sincerely welcome Debi And may you have a happy Easter also.
Alex
Comment from Alan K Pease
The still waters of a mountain lake provide beauty that energizes the soul sipping up each moment of piece and tranquility. Lovely nonet with alliteration.
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The still waters of a mountain lake provide beauty that energizes the soul sipping up each moment of piece and tranquility. Lovely nonet with alliteration.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2015
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Thank you for the kind comments. I appreciate you mentioning the alliteration. Thank you for the insightful comments about nature and how it energizes the soul with its peace and tranquility.
Comment from Sis Cat
What a good and evocative poem. Your words echo the drop and the shape of water forming into a single drop into your thirsty soul. This is quite excellent use of words to form an image. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2015
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What a good and evocative poem. Your words echo the drop and the shape of water forming into a single drop into your thirsty soul. This is quite excellent use of words to form an image. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2015
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Thank you for the kind comments about the writing and the form. I appreciate the encouragement.
Comment from A TARNISHED KNIGHT
Now this one places an image in mind even without the art work Simple beautifully written ... It flowed like rapids in a stream then hit still water just when it needed too KUDOS DEB!!!!
TK
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Now this one places an image in mind even without the art work Simple beautifully written ... It flowed like rapids in a stream then hit still water just when it needed too KUDOS DEB!!!!
TK
Comment Written 05-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2015
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Thank you for the shiny six stars and the wonderful comments. To me one of the highest compliments is that the verse creates it own images with the artwork. You have made my day! Thank you! Debi
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
This is a great Nonet poem. The depth of the words is profound. Great imagery and well chosen words.
Very nicely penned.
GMG
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reply by the author on 05-Apr-2015
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Hi there,
This is a great Nonet poem. The depth of the words is profound. Great imagery and well chosen words.
Very nicely penned.
GMG
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Comment Written 05-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2015
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Thank you for the encouraging review. I appreciate the comments about the word choice and imagery.
Comment from jlsavell
w,j,debi,
This to me, imho, is an absolutely stunning nonet. Its message is potent, timeless. Perfect word choices to convey the exceptional sentiment..Jimi
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w,j,debi,
This to me, imho, is an absolutely stunning nonet. Its message is potent, timeless. Perfect word choices to convey the exceptional sentiment..Jimi
Comment Written 05-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2015
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I am overwhelmed by your generous comments, Jimi, and the six star rating as well! Thank you so much for the encouragement. You have really brightened my day. Debi
Comment from kiwijenny
Wow this is a wonderful nonet
I love the quality of sound and sight...the drops filling your thirsty soul
Just wonderful.wish I had a six for it
God bless
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reply by the author on 05-Apr-2015
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Wow this is a wonderful nonet
I love the quality of sound and sight...the drops filling your thirsty soul
Just wonderful.wish I had a six for it
God bless
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Comment Written 05-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2015
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Thank you for the wonderful review and virtual six. I appreciate the encouraging comments, especially the comment so it the quality of sound and sight.