Chasing the Elusive Dream
Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "A Cast of Characters"A southern couple's journey in the 60's,70's & 80'
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Comment from EMB
Haha! I'm not so sure I would've trusted an alcoholic anyway. Calling the fire department was definitely the best thing to do because they understand how fires can flair back up.
An engaging read, my friend. :)
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2013
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Haha! I'm not so sure I would've trusted an alcoholic anyway. Calling the fire department was definitely the best thing to do because they understand how fires can flair back up.
An engaging read, my friend. :)
Comment Written 19-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2013
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Thank you so much Edward. He wasn's someone we ever totally trusted, but the fire was a real wake-up call. LOL I appreciate you reading and your thoughful comments.
Beth
Comment from Jean Lagace
This is the most perfect little bit of narrative. Superb writing. More of this and you've got yourself a life story. Or you work this out into a short or a novel of some kind. There are a few interesting characters out there and they could be made to interact somehow. I would sure like to read it.
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2013
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This is the most perfect little bit of narrative. Superb writing. More of this and you've got yourself a life story. Or you work this out into a short or a novel of some kind. There are a few interesting characters out there and they could be made to interact somehow. I would sure like to read it.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2013
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Thank you so much for the review and the encourating comments. I have got a lot of chapters to this already, and at some point I'll get them better organized into book form. I may self-publish and at least get copies for my children and grandchilden.
Your review is greatly appreciated.
Beth
Comment from jadapenn
Hi Beth, I haven't chatted to you in ages. I love this account of your younger days in this Victorian house. Very interesting characters sharing the house with you and you developed them well. I enjoyed. luv jada
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2013
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Hi Beth, I haven't chatted to you in ages. I love this account of your younger days in this Victorian house. Very interesting characters sharing the house with you and you developed them well. I enjoyed. luv jada
Comment Written 19-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2013
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Hi Jada, I've been on and off with the posting and the reviews. I'm so glad to hear from you. I really apprecate the review and I'm happy you enjoyed it. I need to check out what you've been writing lately. Thanks.
Beth
Comment from STEPHEN A CARTER
An interesting tale told with humor and some sadness. A few suggestions:
"Close to terror, I grabbed my clothes...Who was in terror...the clothes?
"... grabbed out(our) bags, and headrf (headed)...
"...already in route. (en route)
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reply by the author on 19-Jul-2013
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An interesting tale told with humor and some sadness. A few suggestions:
"Close to terror, I grabbed my clothes...Who was in terror...the clothes?
"... grabbed out(our) bags, and headrf (headed)...
"...already in route. (en route)
Regards:
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2013
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Hi Stephen, Thanks for reviewing this. I really appreciate your pointing out my spags. As to the one "Close to terror, I grabbed my clothes... "I" is the subject. Wouldn't it be evident that it was I who grabbed my clothes and I who was in terror? I fixed the other typos but I'm not understanding what is wrong with this one.
Beth
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Dear Beth: My mistake..forget it and carry on. I just posted 'Goddess of the Muse'. Am working on a children's poem called 'The Considerable Mr. Brown'
Hugs: Steve C
