All Those Puzzling Pieces
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Comment from Dawn Munro
This poem is pure emotion - anyone who has ever been on a stage can appreciate where you have gone with this amazing free verse. The build-up, the nerves, and finally, the 'love'! (wish I had a six for this exceptional poem)
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2012
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This poem is pure emotion - anyone who has ever been on a stage can appreciate where you have gone with this amazing free verse. The build-up, the nerves, and finally, the 'love'! (wish I had a six for this exceptional poem)
Comment Written 07-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2012
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thx so much, Dawn! :)
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My pleasure. :)
Comment from Eric Corsten
That's it right there!! That's my kind of stuff..I love the way you write in different patterns and your rhymes are random..and through it all it was down to earth enough to empathize
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That's it right there!! That's my kind of stuff..I love the way you write in different patterns and your rhymes are random..and through it all it was down to earth enough to empathize
Comment Written 07-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2012
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Yay Eric! I'm sending you a thousand free tickets! Thank you so much for your special six!!!
Comment from Gianinas
The poem does indeed convey very well the feelings of anxiousness, maybe insecurity, stage fright. I liked the colors chosen and the art work.
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2012
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The poem does indeed convey very well the feelings of anxiousness, maybe insecurity, stage fright. I liked the colors chosen and the art work.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2012
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Thx so much Gianinas!
Comment from missy98writer
Poet,
Your slant poem is very well written with terrific imagery,
I'd love to hear you resd this loud,
In your slam poem you used excellent metaphors.
You used very fine alliteration.
You also used great rhymes.
The art work you used is wicked cool.
I enjoyed your lines:
Then the magic fiddle plays
cries soft, and chases away
all my day's
doubt and fear, no, the TERROR oh
God, what was that about?
I could hear your musical beats as I resd in my head
You used intense emotion in your narrative
I wish you good luck in the contest.
I'd recommend your bitchin' pooetic art to other reviewers.
Please have a fantastic weekend,
Missy.
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2012
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Poet,
Your slant poem is very well written with terrific imagery,
I'd love to hear you resd this loud,
In your slam poem you used excellent metaphors.
You used very fine alliteration.
You also used great rhymes.
The art work you used is wicked cool.
I enjoyed your lines:
Then the magic fiddle plays
cries soft, and chases away
all my day's
doubt and fear, no, the TERROR oh
God, what was that about?
I could hear your musical beats as I resd in my head
You used intense emotion in your narrative
I wish you good luck in the contest.
I'd recommend your bitchin' pooetic art to other reviewers.
Please have a fantastic weekend,
Missy.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2012
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You are funny Melissa - blessings!
Comment from Crystal Carey
I really enjoyed your poem, although I will say I found my own rhythm without looking at the authors notes lol. I really think you did a wonderful job.
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2012
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I really enjoyed your poem, although I will say I found my own rhythm without looking at the authors notes lol. I really think you did a wonderful job.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2012
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I just put the author's notes in there for people who are a little more staid, and are expecting something like iambic pentameter, Crystal - I'm so glad you got your foot tapping without any help from me! And a huge huge double triple thank you for your wonderful SIX! :)
Comment from Gungalo
It read quickly and held a lot of terror within its words. I'm getting a reading on it that says it's a singer and the crowd is her audience.
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It read quickly and held a lot of terror within its words. I'm getting a reading on it that says it's a singer and the crowd is her audience.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2012
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And you would, indeed, be reading that correctly Gungalo!
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Smile.
Comment from nomi338
Wow! This poem reminds me vividly of how I felt before each performance back when I sang in a group. We were very good, but not very smart. We made some dumb moves that short circuited our chance at success. I can remember so well the tension just before we would start to sing and the exhilaration once the people showed their love for our sound. This is a great poem and I wish that I could hear it performed.
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2012
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Wow! This poem reminds me vividly of how I felt before each performance back when I sang in a group. We were very good, but not very smart. We made some dumb moves that short circuited our chance at success. I can remember so well the tension just before we would start to sing and the exhilaration once the people showed their love for our sound. This is a great poem and I wish that I could hear it performed.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2012
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Thank yo so much, nomi! I want to perform ALL my pieces! Glad you could relate, and blessings for reading & reviewing! :)
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
I did get a very lyrical feel as I read through your poem. It tells a very clear story as well as expressing feelings of ecstasy and anticipation, and especially excitement. (a moment to remember)
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I did get a very lyrical feel as I read through your poem. It tells a very clear story as well as expressing feelings of ecstasy and anticipation, and especially excitement. (a moment to remember)
Comment Written 07-Dec-2012
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thx so much, Giddy!
Comment from Robin Gilmor
This was like a concert of images starting slowly and building up until the end. A smooth transition from the first stanza to the last. A very interesting piece.
Lots of undertones. I liked it. good Luck to you. Robin Gilmor
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2012
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This was like a concert of images starting slowly and building up until the end. A smooth transition from the first stanza to the last. A very interesting piece.
Lots of undertones. I liked it. good Luck to you. Robin Gilmor
Comment Written 07-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2012
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Thx so much, Robin!
Comment from fictionwriter
I love how this depicts having two emotions that are competeing for the same moment. Been there and done that. Nice job.
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I love how this depicts having two emotions that are competeing for the same moment. Been there and done that. Nice job.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2012
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thx so much fw - yep - they co-exist, no problem at all, don't they?