Remembering
Thoughts of days gone by34 total reviews
Comment from Treischel
Very well done entry into the Six Line poem contest. The sexy picture certainly lays the foundation like a silken snare. The four words definitely describe. The last two lines where the leering old men could only wish are exquisite.
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2012
Very well done entry into the Six Line poem contest. The sexy picture certainly lays the foundation like a silken snare. The four words definitely describe. The last two lines where the leering old men could only wish are exquisite.
Comment Written 28-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2012
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I'm flattered what a great review. Thanks so much
Comment from Titanx9
I don't think you are too far off with your analysis of the situation - lol. You definitely have the form and structure of the writing instructions correct. Good luck in the contest, this is a well-written piece.
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2012
I don't think you are too far off with your analysis of the situation - lol. You definitely have the form and structure of the writing instructions correct. Good luck in the contest, this is a well-written piece.
Comment Written 28-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2012
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thanks for the read and comment
Comment from rjuselius
this is absolutely fine i think. not that i'm an expert on anything. but now it makes you laugh! i think you hit the parameter now.
rebekka x
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reply by the author on 28-Nov-2012
this is absolutely fine i think. not that i'm an expert on anything. but now it makes you laugh! i think you hit the parameter now.
rebekka x
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Comment Written 28-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2012
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I did Fixed it Thanks for the read
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thanks so much I'LL work on ot
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take a look thanks
Comment from ocruickshank
I love the imagery, great choice. The poem peaked my interest but seems incomplete because you're missing another 9 syllable line according to the rules contained in the authors notes - add a line to increase rating. Good luck in contest.
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reply by the author on 28-Nov-2012
I love the imagery, great choice. The poem peaked my interest but seems incomplete because you're missing another 9 syllable line according to the rules contained in the authors notes - add a line to increase rating. Good luck in contest.
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Comment Written 28-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2012
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Fixed it thanks for the read