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Little Billy

Viewing comments for Chapter 15 "The Endless Night."
memiors from my life experiences.

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Comment from bluedragon776
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I am glad I ran across this poem. It has been a long time since I participated on this site. As of now all but one miner has been rescued. Great poem, reminds us all to be grateful for what we have knowing that at anytime it could be gone.

 Comment Written 13-Oct-2010


reply by the author on 13-Oct-2010
    that is true. thanks for the review
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2010
    that is true. thanks for the review
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2010
    that is true. thanks for the review
Comment from BethShelby
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This is a very moving poem and even now we watch with tears of joy as these men are rescued. I think this well-rhymed and timely poem will do well in the contest.

 Comment Written 13-Oct-2010


reply by the author on 13-Oct-2010
    thank you for the kind review
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    thank you for the kind review
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    thank you for the kind review
Comment from Pili Pubul
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You did a terrific poem about this amazing situation, by this hour they are almost all safe and the whole world is celebrating.

sixty nine days underground
without sight without sound
they work franticaly up above
way down here we feel the love

 Comment Written 13-Oct-2010


reply by the author on 13-Oct-2010
    thanks
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    thanks
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    thanks
reply by Pili Pubul on 13-Oct-2010
    welcome
Comment from miss joyce
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What a devastating event. I'm so proud of these courageous miner's who thrust aside their fears every day and leave a family to seek the money to sustain them. Very much a hero. Thanks for sharing the story!

 Comment Written 13-Oct-2010


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    thank you
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    thank you
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    thank you
Comment from InHisownwrite
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A great quantrain....
With a great message and thankfully now a great ending...
When so much bad happens in the world, how great is it when something so good happens.... That's what your poem says to me.... LOve it! Bryan

 Comment Written 13-Oct-2010


reply by the author on 13-Oct-2010
    thank you
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    thank you
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    thank you
Comment from c_lucas
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It looks like Evil Eddie (Fanstory's browsher) did a number on your Author's Notes. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read. Good luck in your contest.

 Comment Written 13-Oct-2010


reply by the author on 13-Oct-2010
    thank you
reply by c_lucas on 13-Oct-2010
    You're welcome, K. Charlie
Comment from Bellringer
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This is the first poem I've read about the trapped miners. As I write this review on 10/13/10 (almost 2PM EST), the eighteenth miner has been brought up alive (15 to go). The whole world is watching. You did a good job in sharing this dramatic moment in history. Just one small spag: "in this hole were[where] I am resident." Best wishes, Hector

 Comment Written 13-Oct-2010


reply by the author on 13-Oct-2010
    thank you hector correction made.
Comment from Paulpl52
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This is such a lovely fitting tribute to those rescuers who have succeeded in their mission. The poem reflects the voices from below where despair turns to hope, turns to joy. Excellent throughout. Paul.

 Comment Written 13-Oct-2010


reply by the author on 13-Oct-2010
    thank you
Comment from Carrie Smith
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Hello my friend. First of all let me thank you for sharing this poem. It is so well written, speaking through the mind of the trapped miner. Your well placed verses show the strength in this man's being. Haven't they started bring these men out??? Seems I heard that they have. Great job...Carrie

 Comment Written 13-Oct-2010


reply by the author on 13-Oct-2010
    yes there are many out now. thank you
Comment from samsaysagain
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A wonderful poem, beautifully written. As I watched the news in the last hour I prayed and tried to put myself not only in the miner's shoes, but in the shoes of wives, mother's, children, grandparents and just old neighbors who are standing this midnight vigil. I find it impossible to do. Absolute hell on earth and hell in that dark hole for sixty-nine days. I pray that we who watch from a distance, who are not involved personally, will learn from this what real true faith and trust means. How blatantly we take life for granted! Thank you for writing this poem. It is well done and sincerely offered.

 Comment Written 12-Oct-2010


reply by the author on 13-Oct-2010
    thank you again
reply by samsaysagain on 13-Oct-2010
    You are very welcome. Good luck as you continue to write.