Tantalizing Eyes
Viewing comments for Chapter 39 "Chapter 11; part 1"Dishonesty VS Love. Which will win?
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Comment from closetpoetjester
Ooooohhh! Very hot and heavy chapter my friend. Pretty racy huh? Yep! But I loved it! Am following your great and well written story with great interest.
Cheers ... now where's that husband of mine...ooops - to much information. LOL
Cheers for another great read with an extra bit of sizzle this time. Are you sure she is a virgin????
Closetpoetjester
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2010
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Ooooohhh! Very hot and heavy chapter my friend. Pretty racy huh? Yep! But I loved it! Am following your great and well written story with great interest.
Cheers ... now where's that husband of mine...ooops - to much information. LOL
Cheers for another great read with an extra bit of sizzle this time. Are you sure she is a virgin????
Closetpoetjester
Comment Written 20-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2010
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Not any more, for sure. Thank you for your kind review. I hope you found your husband.
Comment from RebelRose
FINALLY!!!!! This is what we have been waiting for. I am so glad they have admitted their love and consumated their marriage. I know their troubles are far from over but at least this tension is over with and they can draw strength from each other. I loved this chapter. I wish I had a 6 to give you.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2010
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FINALLY!!!!! This is what we have been waiting for. I am so glad they have admitted their love and consumated their marriage. I know their troubles are far from over but at least this tension is over with and they can draw strength from each other. I loved this chapter. I wish I had a 6 to give you.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2010
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Thank you for the virtual 6, it means so much to me. I appreciate your support.
Comment from lola29
Wow! fireworks at last! You are one talented writer. The love scene was of the highest caliber--very sophisticated and very memorable. Bravo!
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2010
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Wow! fireworks at last! You are one talented writer. The love scene was of the highest caliber--very sophisticated and very memorable. Bravo!
Comment Written 20-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2010
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Thank you for your kind review. I was very nervous about writing it. I am glad it worked.
Comment from DecrepitOldBag
Hmmm. How is it that I haven't read any of the foregoing chapters I wonder? I won't pretend I actually enjoyed the sex stuff (I'm such a stuffy old bird) but I can say it was very, very well written. I think you have no need at all to be nervous in any way, you've done a great job. the dialogue was realistic and the whole thing worked extremely well. No spag at all, so also very well edited. I might have to read back and then read on ... I see you're at number five in the ranks. I cannot believe I missed this!
Hugs
Kat
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2010
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Hmmm. How is it that I haven't read any of the foregoing chapters I wonder? I won't pretend I actually enjoyed the sex stuff (I'm such a stuffy old bird) but I can say it was very, very well written. I think you have no need at all to be nervous in any way, you've done a great job. the dialogue was realistic and the whole thing worked extremely well. No spag at all, so also very well edited. I might have to read back and then read on ... I see you're at number five in the ranks. I cannot believe I missed this!
Hugs
Kat
Comment Written 20-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2010
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This will be only sex scene in the book. I rarely write them, but in this case I had no alternative, if I wanted to make it realistic.
Comment from FredCollingwood
No fair posting it with thet picture. I had to read it after seeing that. Another sex-filled post. I have to find out what you've been eating, lately.
It quit hurting. You can proceed. > Very format dialog under the circumstances.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2010
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No fair posting it with thet picture. I had to read it after seeing that. Another sex-filled post. I have to find out what you've been eating, lately.
It quit hurting. You can proceed. > Very format dialog under the circumstances.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2010
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Thank you for the review. I will recheck the dialogue in that situation.
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I meant to say "formal" dialog. Sorry--just a comment--no error.
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I understood what you were saying. I am just not how to change it. I will think about it. I want it to be realistic, but not raunchy.
Comment from anabelle
Good chapter. Leya and Steven are finally together, after so much waiting. It's amazing they had such restraint.
I'm not sure why you were nervous? You did pretty good. :-0
Thanks for the lovely read.
Regards, anabelle
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2010
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Good chapter. Leya and Steven are finally together, after so much waiting. It's amazing they had such restraint.
I'm not sure why you were nervous? You did pretty good. :-0
Thanks for the lovely read.
Regards, anabelle
Comment Written 20-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from adewpearl
fondled with her breasts - I would say fondled her breasts
behind her shoulders, exposing - add comma
between her legs, preparing her - add comma
No need to be nervous - it's a good erotic scene - nice detail without becoming raunchy - believe me, it's tame compared to lots I've read, but not so tame that it isn't passionate :-) I love that you include love and tenderness,too. Brooke
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2010
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fondled with her breasts - I would say fondled her breasts
behind her shoulders, exposing - add comma
between her legs, preparing her - add comma
No need to be nervous - it's a good erotic scene - nice detail without becoming raunchy - believe me, it's tame compared to lots I've read, but not so tame that it isn't passionate :-) I love that you include love and tenderness,too. Brooke
Comment Written 20-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2010
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I am not into writing sex for sex. It was time these two get together, probably over due. I am also not into raunchy. I want tender passionate love making, not sex. I hope I achieved it.
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You achieved it extremely well :-)
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Thank you
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi Barbara,
You found your descriptive voice, very well done. There is no reason to be nervous about this, you've done it sensitively and very well indeed. Obviously well edited too as there is no spag.
Excellent work.
Patrick
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2010
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Hi Barbara,
You found your descriptive voice, very well done. There is no reason to be nervous about this, you've done it sensitively and very well indeed. Obviously well edited too as there is no spag.
Excellent work.
Patrick
Comment Written 20-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2010
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Thank you for your kind words. Coming from you,knowing your expertise in writing, this is very much appreciative.
Comment from CKLA
Great chapter. You wrote the long overdue sex scene perfectly. Well done, my friend, you have no need to be nervous.
Collette
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2010
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Great chapter. You wrote the long overdue sex scene perfectly. Well done, my friend, you have no need to be nervous.
Collette
Comment Written 20-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2010
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Thank you for your kind words.
Comment from hyway94
Wow! I felt as if I was standing there watching it happen. Very descriptive. I can see where there will be more of this. What a great chapter and the flow was just great. I found no mistakes and I'm sure glad I became a fan. Thank you.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2010
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Wow! I felt as if I was standing there watching it happen. Very descriptive. I can see where there will be more of this. What a great chapter and the flow was just great. I found no mistakes and I'm sure glad I became a fan. Thank you.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2010
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Thank you for your kind review. I appreciate your support.