CSP: A Collection of Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 15 "Betrayal"A collection of poetry
41 total reviews
Comment from adewpearl
Yours is only the third or so poem in this form that I've read - I like it. You certainly have painted quite an indicting picture of betrayal with your well chosen words and the form seems to be fine. Brooke
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Yours is only the third or so poem in this form that I've read - I like it. You certainly have painted quite an indicting picture of betrayal with your well chosen words and the form seems to be fine. Brooke
Comment Written 26-Mar-2009
Comment from Roisin
Hi Sue
I love this little poem, packed with emotions. I especially like the line:
'Begging for relief to
begin healing from grief'
You've so well described the feelings we have when we're betrayed. Good luck in the contest. A great contender.
Hugs
Roisin
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Hi Sue
I love this little poem, packed with emotions. I especially like the line:
'Begging for relief to
begin healing from grief'
You've so well described the feelings we have when we're betrayed. Good luck in the contest. A great contender.
Hugs
Roisin
Comment Written 26-Mar-2009
Comment from prodigal
This is the first poem of this type that I have ever read. Yours seems to flow well. Betrayal is a powerful word and conjures up a lot of emotion. Well done- Sam
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This is the first poem of this type that I have ever read. Yours seems to flow well. Betrayal is a powerful word and conjures up a lot of emotion. Well done- Sam
Comment Written 26-Mar-2009
Comment from Domino
This is terrific, Sue.
I saw the contest but couldn't think of anything. I'm glad I saved $5, having read your powerful and emotional words.
Two skilful internal rhymes add depth to a restrictive format, in which you've excelled here.
Good luck n love, Ray xx
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2009
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This is terrific, Sue.
I saw the contest but couldn't think of anything. I'm glad I saved $5, having read your powerful and emotional words.
Two skilful internal rhymes add depth to a restrictive format, in which you've excelled here.
Good luck n love, Ray xx
Comment Written 26-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2009
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Ray, thanks for mentioning the internal rhymes. I felt this piece would die an instant death OR bore everyone else to death! LOL!! Thanks so much for your great comments and review. Sue xx
Comment from tammipratt
Very powerful and intense message here. Well done. I think the artwork is fabulous for this piece and complements it very well.
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Very powerful and intense message here. Well done. I think the artwork is fabulous for this piece and complements it very well.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2009
Comment from jmkenpo
Well, it sure seems like all of the parameters were met for this contest entry. Really cool artwork chosen also.
Good luck!
Jmkenpo
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Well, it sure seems like all of the parameters were met for this contest entry. Really cool artwork chosen also.
Good luck!
Jmkenpo
Comment Written 26-Mar-2009
Comment from MsRefusenik
So that's a Pleiades, huh? I wonder if I'll ever learn them all if I'm on this site long enough. You did a nice job--very clever poem. I bet it was challenging. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2009
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So that's a Pleiades, huh? I wonder if I'll ever learn them all if I'm on this site long enough. You did a nice job--very clever poem. I bet it was challenging. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2009
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I've never done one of these. I'm a sucker to try them all out. HA! Thanks so much for your very generous review. Sue
Comment from raimie
this piece reverberates the disappointment of betrayal and the pain it causes. excellent photo choice it borders on scary.
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2009
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this piece reverberates the disappointment of betrayal and the pain it causes. excellent photo choice it borders on scary.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2009
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HA! Yes, that photo does look a bit scary! But, so is betrayal. Takes a long time to get over it. Thanks so much for your great review! Sue
Comment from glacierbabe
Wow, you have done a wonderful job writing a poem in this form.
It paints a clear picture of betrayal and the effects of it.
The artwork is a perfect accompanyment to the work.
Very well done. Best of luck in the contest. :)
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Wow, you have done a wonderful job writing a poem in this form.
It paints a clear picture of betrayal and the effects of it.
The artwork is a perfect accompanyment to the work.
Very well done. Best of luck in the contest. :)
Comment Written 26-Mar-2009
Comment from words
Good use of the form...it worked for me.
As a reader, having the first letters capped took away from the enjoyment. As the caps signal the beginning of a sentence and in some cases this is not the case. So I tripped over the caps each time a read it.
Wow...what a long explantion...much longer than your poem.
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2009
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Good use of the form...it worked for me.
As a reader, having the first letters capped took away from the enjoyment. As the caps signal the beginning of a sentence and in some cases this is not the case. So I tripped over the caps each time a read it.
Wow...what a long explantion...much longer than your poem.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2009
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You might have a point there on the caps. I was just going by the contest examples. Perhaps I can put lower cases there. Will check it out. Thanks much for that. And for your great review! Sue :-))