CSP: A Collection of Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 20 "Trust"A collection of poetry
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Comment from amada
Clever alliterations very well spiced this poem. The picture is perfect for the theme. I wish you the best in the contest. Great effort.
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Clever alliterations very well spiced this poem. The picture is perfect for the theme. I wish you the best in the contest. Great effort.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2009
Comment from Joan E.
A metaphoric tetracyts with double alliteration--what an accomplishment. This one has to be a contest winner! The colors and the picture were imbued with the sense of trust.
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A metaphoric tetracyts with double alliteration--what an accomplishment. This one has to be a contest winner! The colors and the picture were imbued with the sense of trust.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2009
Comment from Hitcher
This one makes one stop and ponder, I loved he last line Sue, for us less articulate members[yes me] your talking about cutting through the crap, bullshit and lies[the chaff is sifted]when it comes to putting our faith in others? Trust is indeed hard to establish these days that's for sure.
Your just too good at these small structured poems friend, his is great.
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This one makes one stop and ponder, I loved he last line Sue, for us less articulate members[yes me] your talking about cutting through the crap, bullshit and lies[the chaff is sifted]when it comes to putting our faith in others? Trust is indeed hard to establish these days that's for sure.
Your just too good at these small structured poems friend, his is great.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2009
Comment from moosegal
Excellent job. I like how this flows as one smooth piece rather than what could have been disjointed lines. And such truth contained within. You've produced another winner!
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Excellent job. I like how this flows as one smooth piece rather than what could have been disjointed lines. And such truth contained within. You've produced another winner!
Comment Written 20-Mar-2009
Comment from Juliette Chamberlain
Apparently there is a society (don't remember which one) where presenting a contract, suggests that one does not trust the other.
On the other hand I have personally seen the chaff sifted, to disclose greed and deceit.
I think that there is a slight disparity between the definition of trust and faith.
I have judged on content, but realise that you have fulfilled all the requirements of the poem structure called for.
Juliette
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reply by the author on 20-Mar-2009
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Apparently there is a society (don't remember which one) where presenting a contract, suggests that one does not trust the other.
On the other hand I have personally seen the chaff sifted, to disclose greed and deceit.
I think that there is a slight disparity between the definition of trust and faith.
I have judged on content, but realise that you have fulfilled all the requirements of the poem structure called for.
Juliette
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2009
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I have made no inference of faith in this poem. Not sure how you derived that. This is fully about when one has trust in someone or an institution, we don't have to question their word. Because we trust that the other party has separated the chaff (B.S.) from truth. You have assumed wrongly here. But, I thank you for your review. Regards, Sue
Comment from Roisin
This is really great Sue. Great words and structure and I love all the alliteration throughout. You've done a great job. Good luck in the contest.
Hugs
Roisin
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This is really great Sue. Great words and structure and I love all the alliteration throughout. You've done a great job. Good luck in the contest.
Hugs
Roisin
Comment Written 20-Mar-2009
Comment from prodigal
I liked this poem. You really do a good job with the structured poetry. I liked the definition of trust. Actions do indeed speak louder than words. Good job- Sam
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I liked this poem. You really do a good job with the structured poetry. I liked the definition of trust. Actions do indeed speak louder than words. Good job- Sam
Comment Written 20-Mar-2009
Comment from words
Absolutely lovely.
Sorry that there were no more sixes left in my reviewing quiver...know that I am sending you sixes by telepathy(will Tom count those?).
Loved the simple visual that you chose and the colors!!
Perfect.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2009
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Absolutely lovely.
Sorry that there were no more sixes left in my reviewing quiver...know that I am sending you sixes by telepathy(will Tom count those?).
Loved the simple visual that you chose and the colors!!
Perfect.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2009
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I've already taken the six and put it in the bank! Thanks!! So glad you liked this one. And the image. I wanted to put up a serene piece and I loved the strong line across the middle. Thanks for the virtual sixer! Sue :-))
Comment from Jazh
Great poem, Sue, and so very true. I loved this one..especially the reference in the last line to that poem about friendship (I forget the author). It flows well and you've used some lovely alliteration. Good luck with the contest. :)
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Great poem, Sue, and so very true. I loved this one..especially the reference in the last line to that poem about friendship (I forget the author). It flows well and you've used some lovely alliteration. Good luck with the contest. :)
Comment Written 20-Mar-2009
Comment from Axiz_Zane
I love your poem. Isn't a tetractys poem a poem with a certain syllable count
First line:1 syllable?
Second line:2 syllables?
Third line:3 syllables?
Fourth line:4 syllables?
Fifth line:10 syllables?
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2009
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I love your poem. Isn't a tetractys poem a poem with a certain syllable count
First line:1 syllable?
Second line:2 syllables?
Third line:3 syllables?
Fourth line:4 syllables?
Fifth line:10 syllables?
Comment Written 20-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2009
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Whoops! Thanks for reminding me. I forgot to put the contest rules and poem format in author's notes. Yes, that's the format. So glad you enjoyed this poem! Thanks for your review. Sue :-))