CSP: A Collection of Poems
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Comment from Domino
Hi, Sue.
This took me a coupla lines til i got into the meter.
Fabulous job on that, beyond my capabilities! Sings along wonderfully. Some dream, this one. Blimey, I think I've had an adventure when I put the trash out. ;-)
Seems you imagined a terrific time, and it all seems real nough to think you're actually participated.
Stunning job, with perfect and un-forced rhyme.
Sorry, no sixer available. Love, Ray xx
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2009
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Hi, Sue.
This took me a coupla lines til i got into the meter.
Fabulous job on that, beyond my capabilities! Sings along wonderfully. Some dream, this one. Blimey, I think I've had an adventure when I put the trash out. ;-)
Seems you imagined a terrific time, and it all seems real nough to think you're actually participated.
Stunning job, with perfect and un-forced rhyme.
Sorry, no sixer available. Love, Ray xx
Comment Written 13-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2009
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Thanks for your awesome review, Ray!! I had fun writing it. Next trip? Europe! HA! Big hugs, Sue
Comment from joan marie
Great idea for laying in the sun. Let my mind soar over new and exotic places. Very descriptive, I felt right there with you. joan marie
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Great idea for laying in the sun. Let my mind soar over new and exotic places. Very descriptive, I felt right there with you. joan marie
Comment Written 13-Mar-2009
Comment from Hitcher
You been smoking some of that funny stuff friend? Ha ha, You certainly know how to kick back and let your mind entertain don't you. There were lots of great locations mentioned in your little offering[shopping in Hawaii, Women!]ha ha. Down under in 10 foot waves, I'd like ta see that!! It was a great bit of fun Sue.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2009
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You been smoking some of that funny stuff friend? Ha ha, You certainly know how to kick back and let your mind entertain don't you. There were lots of great locations mentioned in your little offering[shopping in Hawaii, Women!]ha ha. Down under in 10 foot waves, I'd like ta see that!! It was a great bit of fun Sue.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2009
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Yeah, love a little blonde hash now and again. LOL!!! I do love to boogie board and certainly did exaggerate about surfing! Hell, I tried so many times to stand on a board, I finally gave up! But, I can say I sure do love to snow ski! Can't wait to get back on a plane and go SOMEWHERE!!! Thanks for our great review, Hitch. **big smiles** Sue
Comment from glacierbabe
What a wonderful imagination you have. I wish I could spend a day like that. I loved the rythm of this and the rhyme was perfect. I particularly liked:
And hang my ten in 8 foot waves; the best place one can surf
I loved the expression of hanging your ten
I found no errors that need correction. This was a very enjoyable and entertaining read. Good job! :)
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2009
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What a wonderful imagination you have. I wish I could spend a day like that. I loved the rythm of this and the rhyme was perfect. I particularly liked:
And hang my ten in 8 foot waves; the best place one can surf
I loved the expression of hanging your ten
I found no errors that need correction. This was a very enjoyable and entertaining read. Good job! :)
Comment Written 13-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2009
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My daydream was pretty much true about what I love to do, but the surfing bit was ONE BIG WISH! HA!! My boys can surf and I love watching them. A beautiful sight. Thanks so much for your great review. Glad you enjoyed it! Sue :-))
Comment from rmdelta
Sue, it was good, seeing somebody beside my Riley having a pleasant dream. Yours was much more inviting and refreshing, however and one I wish I could take. Great work
Reggie
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Sue, it was good, seeing somebody beside my Riley having a pleasant dream. Yours was much more inviting and refreshing, however and one I wish I could take. Great work
Reggie
Comment Written 13-Mar-2009
Comment from Jazh
Hehehe...Can I come too?? This is a great escapist poem - I enjoyed it. It flows well, with good rhymes. I wasn't sure about this line: "Of heading down fresh powdered runs and moguls where I ski" - it reads a little like you are skiing down moguls! Just my brain today maybe. I liked the Down Under bit....:)
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2009
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Hehehe...Can I come too?? This is a great escapist poem - I enjoyed it. It flows well, with good rhymes. I wasn't sure about this line: "Of heading down fresh powdered runs and moguls where I ski" - it reads a little like you are skiing down moguls! Just my brain today maybe. I liked the Down Under bit....:)
Comment Written 13-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2009
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I am skiing down moguls!!! The toughest part to ski! Kills the legs. Ha! Yeah, had to keep on going to Oz. Could hear the surf! I'm coming in October! Ain't nothing gonna stop me! HA! hanks for your great review, Adele. Cheers, Sue
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October? I'll warn all the moguls....lol
Comment from jaeladarling
Well, you've just described about half my life. LOL It's a great place to go when you need to relax, or if you just need some ideas. The mind is an amazing place (albeit sometimes scary, lol). Great poem - thanks for sharing!
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Well, you've just described about half my life. LOL It's a great place to go when you need to relax, or if you just need some ideas. The mind is an amazing place (albeit sometimes scary, lol). Great poem - thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 13-Mar-2009
Comment from Paradox Tremors
I got a chuckle from this as my day was exactly as you described it. When our computers at work are down there's no much to do except take a flight. Enjoyed the read my friend.
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reply by the author on 13-Mar-2009
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I got a chuckle from this as my day was exactly as you described it. When our computers at work are down there's no much to do except take a flight. Enjoyed the read my friend.
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Comment Written 13-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2009
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Paradox, so cool you knew where I was coming from! Glad you took a trip, too! So glad you enjoyed my poem. And thanks for your great review. With regards, Sue