CSP: A Collection of Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 29 "Manna from Uncle Sam"A collection of poetry
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Comment from bard owl
This is a flawlessly executed poem - both rhythm and rhyme are perfect. And your message is a timely one, with tongue firmly in cheek. I tend to agree with you, though my mind is still trying to wrap around all of that money - yours and mine, being spent. It is like living a terrible nightmare. Excellent, as usual, Sue. Blessings to you, Linda
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2009
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This is a flawlessly executed poem - both rhythm and rhyme are perfect. And your message is a timely one, with tongue firmly in cheek. I tend to agree with you, though my mind is still trying to wrap around all of that money - yours and mine, being spent. It is like living a terrible nightmare. Excellent, as usual, Sue. Blessings to you, Linda
Comment Written 11-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2009
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We are of the same mind, then. Because I am ill over this money (that we do not have) being printed and spent. Has me worried sick. You are right. It is a nightmare. Thanks for your most excellent compliments on the technical side. With warmest regards, Sue
Comment from chaswriter
Sue - You spelled 'stimulus' wrong. It's spelled 'shitulus'. LOL. Loved your soapbox review of Reggie's rant. Also enjoyed this poem. Only Sue can rant with rhyming words and rhythm. That shows your talent. Love it. Charlie
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2009
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Sue - You spelled 'stimulus' wrong. It's spelled 'shitulus'. LOL. Loved your soapbox review of Reggie's rant. Also enjoyed this poem. Only Sue can rant with rhyming words and rhythm. That shows your talent. Love it. Charlie
Comment Written 11-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2009
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HA!!!! Can't believe you saw that! After first bailout in November didn't do any good, the following stimulus packages are shit. So, just had to give it the nickname! LOL!! Charlie, I always appreciate your reviews. Now that I have the time today, I am going to read your "Royal Highness". Sorry I don't get around to the longer pieces on FS. Keeping up with short poems has been difficult enough! Inbox full! HA! Sue :-))
Comment from Mike K2
Well personally, I asked the White House to mail my stimulus package in a plain brown wrapper. Also let several editors know. No need for the neighbors to see what we get.
This poem is a jaw dropper and my first thought is that I hope you were kidding. Your poem is well written and does make good points. They have to get the money from somewhere and categorizing me as rich has helped the government more then me. I am one caught up in the economy. It wasn't being caught up in the overspending as the conservatives said, nor the victimization that the Dems used to get elected, the hard truth that I went though a divorce and was a nice guy that my employer capitalized upon.
I looked at the O's. Obama and O'Mally of MD. I didn't vote for either because I knew the hard truth. I did hold my nose and voted for the Republicans because that to me was the better. To me Bush was decent as a president, but failed as he didn't use his office for leadership afraid of exceeding the preview of the office that he won. I actually cautioned him against this. The problem with politics is that when you get comfortable, you then slip into the status quo. They paid the price and I hope ALL will wake up.
I could just see Bush saying, well the haven't broken the law yet. This is compounded by the nations short term penchant for memory. I feel that office also has a moral obligation and that is where Bush and other Republicans failed. As the Nation as a whole, will deserves what it gets.
I will vote on either side, but what I require is the sense that the politicians have the same senses of the forefathers. Conviction, volition and the understanding of the nation's survival and future. That skips generations.
Again, I loved both the humor and the cynicism. Also the point. It unfortunately falls upon the individual to also think and do their part. Hey! That's me!
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Well personally, I asked the White House to mail my stimulus package in a plain brown wrapper. Also let several editors know. No need for the neighbors to see what we get.
This poem is a jaw dropper and my first thought is that I hope you were kidding. Your poem is well written and does make good points. They have to get the money from somewhere and categorizing me as rich has helped the government more then me. I am one caught up in the economy. It wasn't being caught up in the overspending as the conservatives said, nor the victimization that the Dems used to get elected, the hard truth that I went though a divorce and was a nice guy that my employer capitalized upon.
I looked at the O's. Obama and O'Mally of MD. I didn't vote for either because I knew the hard truth. I did hold my nose and voted for the Republicans because that to me was the better. To me Bush was decent as a president, but failed as he didn't use his office for leadership afraid of exceeding the preview of the office that he won. I actually cautioned him against this. The problem with politics is that when you get comfortable, you then slip into the status quo. They paid the price and I hope ALL will wake up.
I could just see Bush saying, well the haven't broken the law yet. This is compounded by the nations short term penchant for memory. I feel that office also has a moral obligation and that is where Bush and other Republicans failed. As the Nation as a whole, will deserves what it gets.
I will vote on either side, but what I require is the sense that the politicians have the same senses of the forefathers. Conviction, volition and the understanding of the nation's survival and future. That skips generations.
Again, I loved both the humor and the cynicism. Also the point. It unfortunately falls upon the individual to also think and do their part. Hey! That's me!
Comment Written 11-Mar-2009
Comment from jeslaf
Girl, TELL 'em! I love your self-respecting 'take that' to reviewers who would mark you down for opinion rather than artistic skill. That pisses me off to no end, and it's happened a LOT to me; way to tell 'em! :)
Now to my review...like the way you rhyme your rant against waste, it's artfully done and your last TWO lines are my faves, alluding to 'WTF'--why have a damned Declaration, Constitution that mean nothing?! The founding fathers would be sick. Great write, Sue. :)
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Girl, TELL 'em! I love your self-respecting 'take that' to reviewers who would mark you down for opinion rather than artistic skill. That pisses me off to no end, and it's happened a LOT to me; way to tell 'em! :)
Now to my review...like the way you rhyme your rant against waste, it's artfully done and your last TWO lines are my faves, alluding to 'WTF'--why have a damned Declaration, Constitution that mean nothing?! The founding fathers would be sick. Great write, Sue. :)
Comment Written 11-Mar-2009
Comment from skye
Have no fear... I totally agree with your words. I would say and laugh all the way to the bank, but it is not funny.
Great rhymes and lines to carry your message.
Nicely done.
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Have no fear... I totally agree with your words. I would say and laugh all the way to the bank, but it is not funny.
Great rhymes and lines to carry your message.
Nicely done.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2009
Comment from Perp Ihebom
This is a nice poem. I admire your ability to make a poem out of something as unpoetic and unsentimental as fiscal policies and economic jargon. Well done.
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This is a nice poem. I admire your ability to make a poem out of something as unpoetic and unsentimental as fiscal policies and economic jargon. Well done.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2009
Comment from tammipratt
This is something very different for you - I did a double take on who the author was. Wow. Not who I expected. Well done. A bit brave of you. It's got the undertones of an old man, shaking his finger at us. Well done.
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This is something very different for you - I did a double take on who the author was. Wow. Not who I expected. Well done. A bit brave of you. It's got the undertones of an old man, shaking his finger at us. Well done.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2009
Comment from womanwriter
Dear SIXTEEZKID
Girl you truly ROCK!!! And the truth rolls on!
I think you did an excellent job of saying it like it is - and ain't it 'poetic' justice!
Very well done!!
Sincerely,
womanwriter
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Dear SIXTEEZKID
Girl you truly ROCK!!! And the truth rolls on!
I think you did an excellent job of saying it like it is - and ain't it 'poetic' justice!
Very well done!!
Sincerely,
womanwriter
Comment Written 11-Mar-2009
Comment from rhymelord
Science, nature, the Big Bang and now economics. But I can find absolutely no fault with either your poetry or your argument. Here in Oz land, our pollies have gone a step further on the road to penniless perdition. Today, the second of a CASH bonus will be paid by Government, to a huge number of Aussies so that, wait for it, we can SPEND our way out of recession. No longer must we believe that stupid old saw, which built our wealth, "Look after the pennies and the pounds will look after themselves". Grrrrr!
Regards
Reg.
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Science, nature, the Big Bang and now economics. But I can find absolutely no fault with either your poetry or your argument. Here in Oz land, our pollies have gone a step further on the road to penniless perdition. Today, the second of a CASH bonus will be paid by Government, to a huge number of Aussies so that, wait for it, we can SPEND our way out of recession. No longer must we believe that stupid old saw, which built our wealth, "Look after the pennies and the pounds will look after themselves". Grrrrr!
Regards
Reg.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2009
Comment from MJMuraco
I think your poem is wonderful and says some truths that most people don't realize. I could get into a few pages about what I think about the stimulus and what is going on. I won't get into it in this review. I totally agree with your point of view and am scared what is going to happen for our children. He is making things happen fast but not giving anyone a chance to analyze what the outcome will be. If you want to discuss further, PM me.
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I think your poem is wonderful and says some truths that most people don't realize. I could get into a few pages about what I think about the stimulus and what is going on. I won't get into it in this review. I totally agree with your point of view and am scared what is going to happen for our children. He is making things happen fast but not giving anyone a chance to analyze what the outcome will be. If you want to discuss further, PM me.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2009