Comment from Roisin

Excellent

Hey Sue. Such a pity you missed the deadline cos this one could have been a winner. Great poem personifying winter. I love your rhymes and your approach to the poem. It's just a perfect length to say all you want to say. Great job.

Hugs

Roisin

 Comment Written 05-Mar-2009

Comment from Hitcher

Excellent

It is a shame you missed it Sue because I entered this one, nature `a la Hitch and I think I didn't do too shabby a job, but you probably wont get to read it because you have gone walkabout. Yours would of been a excellent entry and my Wicked Winter would of froze your ASS off, ha ha. Sorry! I've missed you friend, what's up?

 Comment Written 05-Mar-2009

Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

Sorry you missed the deadline, but glad you posted your protest against winter anyway. I thought you accomplished it in a very inventive way, by talking directly to winter but never calling him by name. Your imagery took its place. The phrase "does not suit my soul" summarized the situation well. As usual, you chose a great title and picture to accompany your poem, which also had neat rhymes.

 Comment Written 05-Mar-2009

Comment from The Rivaling Mimic

Excellent

Hey, I love winter and I didn't enter. I seldom find time to hang around these parts but when I do I try to leave something on the front page hehe. This didn't need any improving whatsoever.

The Rivaling Mimic

 Comment Written 05-Mar-2009

Comment from mmichelle97219

Excellent

For me this one works well metaphorically, but not as a personification of winter. I thought the language was lovely and you paint a clear picture of a relationship not working out. Good one.
Michelle

 Comment Written 05-Mar-2009

Comment from Juliette Chamberlain

Excellent

Hi Sixteezkid,

I really like this personification of winter.
I particularly like your approach, as though you are at the end of a relationship that is just not going to work, and so you are going to leave.
Good work.

Kindest regards,

Juliette Chamberlain

 Comment Written 05-Mar-2009

Comment from rhymelord

Excellent

Hi, Sue,
I'm back after a short break and find your work just as refreshing as ever. HOWEVER, would you think about dropping the "are" from the end of Verse 1, Line 3.
Regards
Reg

 Comment Written 05-Mar-2009

Comment from RapturedHeart

Excellent

Good for you, Sue! Never thought of winter as 'quirky' before, but that works:). Temperamental - ooooooooooohhhhhhhhhh yes! Like

I cannot weather anymore
Your fronts of lows and highs
- reads like a weather forecast. Was a fun read, too bad you missed the deadline. Take care,
Heather

 Comment Written 05-Mar-2009

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reply by the author on 05-Mar-2009

Oh, yeah...with sudden twists and turns...that's quirky! HA! Yeah, been busy with life's "paperwork" that's driving me insane! Don't even have enough time to review and write these past few days. Thanks for your review, Heather....much appreciated, Sue

Comment from Jazh

Excellent

This is a lovely, evocative poem, Sue, and would have worked well for that contest. The rhythm and rhymes are good, and your images are effective. You describe the end of a relationship (and possibly bipolar as well!) very well. :)

 Comment Written 05-Mar-2009

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reply by the author on 05-Mar-2009

Ha! Yes! Winter is bipolar! That's why I don't want to be near him. God, please give me a reason to go back to Arizona! LOL! Thanks much for your review. Sue

Comment from prodigal

Excellent

It is sad when a relationship changes. It leaves you wondering what happened and why. This was very well written. Your rhyme and meter is almost always near if not perfect. I don't know how you do it. WEll done- Sam

 Comment Written 05-Mar-2009