CSP: A Collection of Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 38 "Break This Heart"A collection of poetry
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Comment from jshep
This reflects so well the ups and downs of loving. How joy and pain can go hand in hand. Still worth it for then by feeling we at least know we are alive. Love the presentation. I can assume it might be your art? VEry appropriate for the words written. As always, perfect flow and rhyme. Very well done, Sue. JOyce
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2009
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This reflects so well the ups and downs of loving. How joy and pain can go hand in hand. Still worth it for then by feeling we at least know we are alive. Love the presentation. I can assume it might be your art? VEry appropriate for the words written. As always, perfect flow and rhyme. Very well done, Sue. JOyce
Comment Written 02-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2009
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Joyce, you got it. Feeling (of any kind) at least makes us know we are alive. Numbness is a terrible place to be. Not my art (which it was!). Thanks so much for your great compliments and review. Always appreciated, Sue
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
There is a lot of feeling in this a strong piece that reads very well through the verses you have done well in expressing your thoughts regards Fuller
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2009
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There is a lot of feeling in this a strong piece that reads very well through the verses you have done well in expressing your thoughts regards Fuller
Comment Written 02-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2009
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Fuller, thanks so much for your close read on my poem. And for your very kind review. With regards, Sue
Comment from RaymondJohn
Nice use of contrasts. I know there are people who require that they either are hurt or pleased, and don't want anything in between. Excellent images and message. A lot of fun to read. Ray.
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Nice use of contrasts. I know there are people who require that they either are hurt or pleased, and don't want anything in between. Excellent images and message. A lot of fun to read. Ray.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2009
Comment from Alexander E Poet
Nice picture, very well written piece, not hard to follow. a very good write and a wonderful take on life. very well done I love the form too, keep up the good work a powerful poetic Potential . Excellent there were no errors. No typo's and nothing to change as far as i can see. I look forward to your next one . QQ,,,
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Nice picture, very well written piece, not hard to follow. a very good write and a wonderful take on life. very well done I love the form too, keep up the good work a powerful poetic Potential . Excellent there were no errors. No typo's and nothing to change as far as i can see. I look forward to your next one . QQ,,,
Comment Written 02-Mar-2009
Comment from Dklrdmcches
your words were very gentle and from the heart. this piece painted a picture of one's heart and gave detail on how fragile it is. very well done and thank you for sharing...DKLRD
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your words were very gentle and from the heart. this piece painted a picture of one's heart and gave detail on how fragile it is. very well done and thank you for sharing...DKLRD
Comment Written 02-Mar-2009
Comment from Fleedleflump
Ah how we yearn when we are lost just to feel; not caring what or why or how, or if it hurts horribly. Life needs sensory feedback. You've expressed you subject beautifully, and with passion.
Mike
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2009
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Ah how we yearn when we are lost just to feel; not caring what or why or how, or if it hurts horribly. Life needs sensory feedback. You've expressed you subject beautifully, and with passion.
Mike
Comment Written 02-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2009
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Mike, you've nailed it. "Sensory feedback". You sure did 'get' this one. Thanks so much for your great review and awesome comments. With regards, Sue
Comment from EllieKaye
Hi Sixteez,
This is gut wrenching. I suppose that is what poems are supposed to do. You portrayed the feeling of numbness longng for that deeper sense of emotion.
Color me with laughter's song
Enlighten me by prose
Stain it all in shades of gray
Contrasting highs and lows
[beautiful!]
ellie
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2009
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Hi Sixteez,
This is gut wrenching. I suppose that is what poems are supposed to do. You portrayed the feeling of numbness longng for that deeper sense of emotion.
Color me with laughter's song
Enlighten me by prose
Stain it all in shades of gray
Contrasting highs and lows
[beautiful!]
ellie
Comment Written 02-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2009
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Ellie, Yes, being numb is a limbo where we'd rather either cry or laugh to feel. Thanks so much for highlighting the stanza you liked. And for your lovely review and compliments. With regards, Sue
Comment from althea777
I liked the whole poem, except for the second line in the second stanza, which feels like it's there only to hold the rhyme. Yet, I liked the metaphor of a lonely heart, waiting for rebirth through love.
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reply by the author on 02-Mar-2009
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I liked the whole poem, except for the second line in the second stanza, which feels like it's there only to hold the rhyme. Yet, I liked the metaphor of a lonely heart, waiting for rebirth through love.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2009
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Well, I don't normally defend my work, but I have to say you missed the entire poem if you felt that way about that 2nd line. It's what the whole poem is about. It's the epicenter.
Comment from FredCollingwood
Geez, Sixties! This is awesome. I think it's one o fthe best I've read in a long while. I've been doing a lot of reviews and although many posts are good, few deserve a six. This one does!
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Geez, Sixties! This is awesome. I think it's one o fthe best I've read in a long while. I've been doing a lot of reviews and although many posts are good, few deserve a six. This one does!
Comment Written 02-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2009
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Fred, Your comments have overwhelmed me. And your 'exceptional' review means everything. My heart and soul is in this piece. So glad you appreciated it. With my warmest regards, Sue :-))
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I could tell that there was something about this poem--something special.
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I have to say thank you, again. Your reviews always mean a lot to me. I know from all your other reviews how closely you do read and I respect that immensely.
Sue
Comment from DreamChaser
I especially love the first line of this poem. It lays out the meaning of the entire verse. What an insightful way of viewing loneliness. Only one who has felt these emotions could put such longing into words. Beautiful and passionate writing.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2009
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I especially love the first line of this poem. It lays out the meaning of the entire verse. What an insightful way of viewing loneliness. Only one who has felt these emotions could put such longing into words. Beautiful and passionate writing.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2009
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DreamChaser, thank you so much for your wonderful review. It means so much. And thank you for your comment about the opening line. With warmest regards, Sue