CSP: A Collection of Poems
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Comment from Minglement
This is such a lovely poem of reminiscence and treasured memories. How lovely it all was. I would touch any mom's heart. It's never the same as it was when they were little. Thanks for sharing.
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This is such a lovely poem of reminiscence and treasured memories. How lovely it all was. I would touch any mom's heart. It's never the same as it was when they were little. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2009
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No, it's never the same. But, we've done our job and they become a "different" joy. But a mom cannot ever forget those sweetest moments with her babies and kids. Thank you for your lovely review. Always appreciated. Sue
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So true! Take care, Sue. Hugs, Marcia
Comment from Roisin
This is beautiful, Sue. It's just how I imagine I'll feel when my children finally flee the nest (although I'm sure it will be a number of years yet!). Your rhyme and rhythm are perfect and you've really captured the essence of how children are, with your wonderful imagery and descriptives.
Warm regards.
Roisin
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This is beautiful, Sue. It's just how I imagine I'll feel when my children finally flee the nest (although I'm sure it will be a number of years yet!). Your rhyme and rhythm are perfect and you've really captured the essence of how children are, with your wonderful imagery and descriptives.
Warm regards.
Roisin
Comment Written 08-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2009
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Yes, you will have those days when it all comes back to you. Bittersweet, but thankful that we have those beautiful memories and that they brought such joy. Thank you for your lovely review and compliments. Always appreciated...Sue :-)
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Yes, you will have those days when it all comes back to you. Bittersweet, but thankful that we have those beautiful memories and that they brought such joy. Thank you for your lovely review and compliments. Always appreciated...Sue :-)
Comment from Domino
Beautiful writing, Sue. Perfect rhyme and meter plus a little fun with their spelling amongst your serious reminisces. The 'crayon' verse is so vivid, I can see their concentration with tongues hangin out the sides of their mouths as they create that special Valentine for Mum.
A pleasure ta read. Best wishes, Ray xx
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Beautiful writing, Sue. Perfect rhyme and meter plus a little fun with their spelling amongst your serious reminisces. The 'crayon' verse is so vivid, I can see their concentration with tongues hangin out the sides of their mouths as they create that special Valentine for Mum.
A pleasure ta read. Best wishes, Ray xx
Comment Written 08-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2009
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Awwww....you're SO right. The little tongues sticking out while they're putting their heart and souls into their work. Thanks for bring that up. Ha!! Thanks for your great review, Ray. :-) Sue
Comment from Loyd C. Taylor, Sr
Good afternoon Sue and how soon they grow up. I was just in that places of memories yesterday as I played with my grandson. It's a sweet and heart touching poem. Loyd
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Good afternoon Sue and how soon they grow up. I was just in that places of memories yesterday as I played with my grandson. It's a sweet and heart touching poem. Loyd
Comment Written 08-Feb-2009
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Loyd, thanks for sharing your story of relating to this. And for your very kind review. Very much appreciated. Always, Sue :-)
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My great joy, Loyd
Comment from joan marie
They say they grow up too fast. I think we do too. Love your topics. Reposted some Catnip Capers and Ever life book chapters from when I first started posting. That's why you aren't getting private messages of new releases. Great read as always, joan marie
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They say they grow up too fast. I think we do too. Love your topics. Reposted some Catnip Capers and Ever life book chapters from when I first started posting. That's why you aren't getting private messages of new releases. Great read as always, joan marie
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Comment from rhymer1
You are a new writer of poetry, per your bio, and rose quickly to the lofty rating of #3 in the poetry ranks. Well done. I am going to point out the one spot that needs work in your poem, which otherwise is a delight to read. It is not easy to fix, but it is worth the effort.
into, in the second line of verse two is a natural trochee. The line calls for an iamb at the end so you force your readers to place the accent awkwardly on the wrong syllable.
Slainte, rhymer1
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2009
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You are a new writer of poetry, per your bio, and rose quickly to the lofty rating of #3 in the poetry ranks. Well done. I am going to point out the one spot that needs work in your poem, which otherwise is a delight to read. It is not easy to fix, but it is worth the effort.
into, in the second line of verse two is a natural trochee. The line calls for an iamb at the end so you force your readers to place the accent awkwardly on the wrong syllable.
Slainte, rhymer1
Comment Written 08-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2009
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Thank you so much for your highlighting this error. Thanks to rhymelord, I got myself out of that jamb! HA! I really appreciate your great review and help. With regards, Sue
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Damn! I spent a half hour looking for a decent fix to recommend and missed that simple one by a mile. Good for Rhymelord. He sure outdid me. Slainte, rhymer1
LOL!!! I spent so much time, I thought...hell, go write another poem!! HA!!!
I tried so hard to make that damned thing sound right and there was that simple line.
You're a gem for bringing it up and trying to help! You are awesome!!
**Big Smiles**
Sue
Comment from Paradox Tremors
A beautiful recollection of memories passed. Well written with the passion and thoughts of a loving and caring mother who never forgets the joy of children. Enjoyed this very much my friend.
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A beautiful recollection of memories passed. Well written with the passion and thoughts of a loving and caring mother who never forgets the joy of children. Enjoyed this very much my friend.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2009
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Hi Paradox...so glad you enjoyed this poem. Means a lot. Just had a couple of days of thinking of all the little monkeys when they were little. Even though we're all still so close, those memories of when they were kids sometimes just come upon a parent. Thank you for your very kind review. Always appreciated, Sue
Comment from idalewen
Dear Sixteezkids, For a moment I thought you had 16 kids! Reread it and was relieved to know that your kids were born in the '60's Whew! Am I right? Anyway I want to congratulate you on your charming memoir in rhyme. I particularly liked your third stanza in which you recount the little things they did that were so precious in your memory. idalewen
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Dear Sixteezkids, For a moment I thought you had 16 kids! Reread it and was relieved to know that your kids were born in the '60's Whew! Am I right? Anyway I want to congratulate you on your charming memoir in rhyme. I particularly liked your third stanza in which you recount the little things they did that were so precious in your memory. idalewen
Comment Written 08-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2009
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No, I'm "sixteezkid" because of my being a kid in the 60's. But, good try on guessing! HA! Thank you so much for your very kind review. Am glad you enjoyed it. With warmest regards, Sue
Comment from MsRefusenik
A beautiful poem about being a parent and watching your kids grow. This poem reflects the struggle to let go of your children's childhood as they grow up into young adults or adults. The memories are poignant. Well-written with good imagery, great examples. Lovely nostalgic photo. Thanks for sharing this sweet poem.
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A beautiful poem about being a parent and watching your kids grow. This poem reflects the struggle to let go of your children's childhood as they grow up into young adults or adults. The memories are poignant. Well-written with good imagery, great examples. Lovely nostalgic photo. Thanks for sharing this sweet poem.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2009
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Yes, even when they are married with their own children, they will always be our babies. And sometimes those memories just come back. Happy and sad at the same time. Thanks so much for your great review. Glad you enjoyed it. With regards, Sue
Comment from FredCollingwood
I miss my kids, too. When they were young I wanted that time to never end, but I couldn't wait to see what would come next in their lives. Great poem!
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I miss my kids, too. When they were young I wanted that time to never end, but I couldn't wait to see what would come next in their lives. Great poem!
Comment Written 08-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2009
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Yes, we work so hard to see them grow up with their new-found knowledge and curiosity, yet at the same time, don't want them to grow up. I guess that's the meaning of real love. Thanks very much for your very kind review. With regards, Sue