CSP: A Collection of Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 84 "With This Ring..."A collection of poetry
53 total reviews
Comment from Adam Smith
Wonderful! This played out like a home movie LOL. I could "see" everything very clearly. It played on my own memories of so many weddings and it did not let us forget the joy of the day and the fact that every wedding is cause for celebration of a new beginning. Nicely done. Liked it a lot. Adam :)
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2009
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Wonderful! This played out like a home movie LOL. I could "see" everything very clearly. It played on my own memories of so many weddings and it did not let us forget the joy of the day and the fact that every wedding is cause for celebration of a new beginning. Nicely done. Liked it a lot. Adam :)
Comment Written 22-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2009
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Thanks Adam! A home movie! How cool is that for a review?! A woman in love dreams of this day!! Thanks again for your great review. :-)) Sue
Comment from PoesyPoet
I love weddings. Unfortunately for me, we didn't have much money when I got married, 26 years ago and went to city hall. I thought this was nice and I wondering (because you don't look old enough) if this is a true story or just a wonderful contest entry.
PP
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2009
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I love weddings. Unfortunately for me, we didn't have much money when I got married, 26 years ago and went to city hall. I thought this was nice and I wondering (because you don't look old enough) if this is a true story or just a wonderful contest entry.
PP
Comment Written 22-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2009
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I wrote this just for the contest. Believe me, I'm old enough! Are you still married to the same person? Thanks very much for your lovely review! :-)) Sue
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Yes, 26 years and two kids later. My 26th anniversary is Feb. 3
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Then, the City Hall worked just PERFECTLY!! HA! Congratulations!
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
I want to get married in my favorite blue jeans and tank top. Just me though. Sounds like a lovely couple full of love and new life. I wish them all the best in their new chapter. Good luck in the contest
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I want to get married in my favorite blue jeans and tank top. Just me though. Sounds like a lovely couple full of love and new life. I wish them all the best in their new chapter. Good luck in the contest
Comment Written 22-Jan-2009
Comment from jaeladarling
Great poem! I look forward to my own wedding day, some day. You've expressed great sentiment, both tearful and exciting. Thank you for sharing this beautiful poem with us.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2009
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Great poem! I look forward to my own wedding day, some day. You've expressed great sentiment, both tearful and exciting. Thank you for sharing this beautiful poem with us.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2009
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It is a joyful day, knowing you're going to begin a life together with your great love. And so excited about the future! And you will have that! Thank you for your lovely review. Very much appreciated, Sue
Comment from MJMuraco
I loved your poem about your daughter's wedding. It was well written and flowed nicely. I haven't had the experience of my children getting married yet however my son is talking about it.
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I loved your poem about your daughter's wedding. It was well written and flowed nicely. I haven't had the experience of my children getting married yet however my son is talking about it.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2009
Comment from Joan E.
I thought your rhyme scheme and meter were perfect for this poem. I enjoyed the rich description in the short phrase "another's prize" and the "snow" simile. I also found "organ pipes" a clever play on the two meanings of pipes.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2009
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I thought your rhyme scheme and meter were perfect for this poem. I enjoyed the rich description in the short phrase "another's prize" and the "snow" simile. I also found "organ pipes" a clever play on the two meanings of pipes.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2009
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Ah! You saw the "pipes" thing! An accidental, but as soon as I read it back, I saw it and loved it. Thank you for your lovely review and compliments. With regards, Sue
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Aren't those accidents lovely!
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Aren't those accidents lovely!
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Aren't those accidents lovely!
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Ha! Indeed! I should have passed it off as my "brilliance". HA!!!
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Ha! Indeed! I should have passed it off as my "brilliance". HA!!!
Comment from wierdgrace
You bring so much joy in the structure of your poems, and love and emotions as well, this is great. I love the picture and the words, the tear drop, wow. thank you for sharing this. I wish you so much luck in the contest.
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You bring so much joy in the structure of your poems, and love and emotions as well, this is great. I love the picture and the words, the tear drop, wow. thank you for sharing this. I wish you so much luck in the contest.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2009
Comment from rmdelta
Sue,
Ahhh The joy of young love is in the air. I don't know about that anymore. Been married 41 years come April and somehow, I just never understood that rice thing.
Great poem, my friend. Your story is a good one and an excellent contest entry. Good luck.
Reggie
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2009
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Sue,
Ahhh The joy of young love is in the air. I don't know about that anymore. Been married 41 years come April and somehow, I just never understood that rice thing.
Great poem, my friend. Your story is a good one and an excellent contest entry. Good luck.
Reggie
Comment Written 22-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2009
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Reggie, you can't hide behind that romantic heart of yours. Good try!! Thanks for your great review and compliments. :-)) Sue
Comment from mmichelle97219
For me this had a terrific cadence to it until the last line which just kind of stops. I really cannot pinpoint why, it just does. I wish you the best of luck in the contest. You met the challeng well.
Michelle
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2009
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For me this had a terrific cadence to it until the last line which just kind of stops. I really cannot pinpoint why, it just does. I wish you the best of luck in the contest. You met the challeng well.
Michelle
Comment Written 22-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2009
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Michelle, maybe it's because it shifts so swiftly from all the fun, to quickly them having a quiet moment with their kiss. It does just stop. Is that what you mean? Or do you mean the last line has a cadence problem on its own? Anyway, I'm glad you enjoyed it (up to that line -ha!) And I certainly appreciate your great review and comments. With regards, Sue
Comment from jeslaf
"Rice like snow" almost sounds like it could be a line from a haiku, it's SO good it stands up without supporting lines; also loved "another's prize"--shows the transition from family to one of her own. Beautiful. :)
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2009
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"Rice like snow" almost sounds like it could be a line from a haiku, it's SO good it stands up without supporting lines; also loved "another's prize"--shows the transition from family to one of her own. Beautiful. :)
Comment Written 22-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2009
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Yes, it could be a haiku line! Ha!! So glad you saw the transition there from parent to another. Thanks for letting me know that. And thank you for your great review and compliments. Always appreciated, Sue