CSP: A Collection of Poems
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Comment from Johnny Carwash
I'm not a big gambler, but I do love blackjack, so I really appreciated this. The imagery and flow were both superb. Good luck in the contest.
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I'm not a big gambler, but I do love blackjack, so I really appreciated this. The imagery and flow were both superb. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2009
Comment from Judian James
Being new to the site, is this your first one of these with provided words? Fun, wasn't it? You did a great job and I love Vegas, so how could I not love this piece? I have no idea what "long in the chin" means, but somebody must, including you! well done
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2009
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Being new to the site, is this your first one of these with provided words? Fun, wasn't it? You did a great job and I love Vegas, so how could I not love this piece? I have no idea what "long in the chin" means, but somebody must, including you! well done
Comment Written 16-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2009
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Yes, it's the first one I've tried. I liked it because you stare at the 10 words and see if a story can pop up for ya. When I saw the word 'shuffle', it hit me to write about Vegas. I LOVE VEGAS, ALSO! When I lived in Arizona, we'd drive up and spend a coupla days, catch a show and gamble a bit. I DO love blackjack! "Long in the chin" is an old saying of one's jaw dropping, either in disgust or agony, or whatever. HA! Thanks so much for your review. I always appreciate them!...Sue
Comment from Algernon
HAHA, how very true. There's only one winner at those places. Brings to mind a film I once saw. Where there's a rigged, massive poker competition on a paddle boat type thingy. Ahh yes James Garner. He was the bad guy. I think.
A fun poem. BTW, like your new bio pic. Look kinda Swedish or Eastern European. xx
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2009
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HAHA, how very true. There's only one winner at those places. Brings to mind a film I once saw. Where there's a rigged, massive poker competition on a paddle boat type thingy. Ahh yes James Garner. He was the bad guy. I think.
A fun poem. BTW, like your new bio pic. Look kinda Swedish or Eastern European. xx
Comment Written 16-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2009
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Nope! Irish/English....uh, oh. Is there something Mommy ain't tellin' me?? HA!! I DO love to play 21. When I lived in Phoenix, I'd drive up there (about a 5 hour drive) and go see a coupla shows and play 21. Always set my limit, though. Thanks for your review! :-)) Sue
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Ahh, I just realised what 21 is. We call it pontoon.
Hmmm, the Irish were a very busy race. To be sure.
Comment from Hitcher
I have never played in a casino, I have played with the boys, its a great way to make a lot of money fast or leave with empty pockets a long chin. I liked your take on the given words Sue, I'd of ended with cleaning the dealer out and been escorted out of the Casino with a beauty on each arm, ha ha, sorry this is your poem! Good luck friend!
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2009
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I have never played in a casino, I have played with the boys, its a great way to make a lot of money fast or leave with empty pockets a long chin. I liked your take on the given words Sue, I'd of ended with cleaning the dealer out and been escorted out of the Casino with a beauty on each arm, ha ha, sorry this is your poem! Good luck friend!
Comment Written 16-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2009
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Hitch, Hitch, Hitch.........we are the same. What I didn't write was after I walked away with my chin held long, two great looking guys left the table with me (one on each arm, of course) and we sauntered over to the Roulette table for a WHOLE LOTTA FUN! HA!! Thanks for your review, friend. Have fun at the beach (she says, jealously)....
Comment from Minglement
Very clever poem on gambling fever. Your rhyme and rythm are right on. You paint a vivid picture of the lure of the green felt. Great job.
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Very clever poem on gambling fever. Your rhyme and rythm are right on. You paint a vivid picture of the lure of the green felt. Great job.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2009
Comment from Curt Mongold
Ah, you shoulda used it! It would have fit fine in there somewhere!
Great job on this cuz! I love the enjambment! Really gives the flow a kind of kick that I find refreshing and light.
The word usage is consistent and in line with the rhyming pattern and the subject is appealing to so many.
Great job again!
Cuzzin Curt
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Ah, you shoulda used it! It would have fit fine in there somewhere!
Great job on this cuz! I love the enjambment! Really gives the flow a kind of kick that I find refreshing and light.
The word usage is consistent and in line with the rhyming pattern and the subject is appealing to so many.
Great job again!
Cuzzin Curt
Comment Written 16-Jan-2009
Comment from Joan E.
From John Wayne to Vegas in a flash!
I enjoyed your strong rhyme scheme but was especially taken by your fresh expressions: "sit my bones" and long in the chin". Great title, picture and colors.
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From John Wayne to Vegas in a flash!
I enjoyed your strong rhyme scheme but was especially taken by your fresh expressions: "sit my bones" and long in the chin". Great title, picture and colors.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2009
Comment from LynnRadford
This poem displayed a very unique interpretation of the words allowed!
I was quite impressed with the rhythm and rhyme scheme as they combined to tell your tale.
Best of luck to you in the contest!
Sincerely,
LR
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This poem displayed a very unique interpretation of the words allowed!
I was quite impressed with the rhythm and rhyme scheme as they combined to tell your tale.
Best of luck to you in the contest!
Sincerely,
LR
Comment Written 16-Jan-2009
Comment from Domino
Hi, Sue
Love the title - I used ta like a flutter on the tables., before I lost me home and shirt on em, LOL.
'Into that chair; I sit my bones' - with respect this seems a little forced. How about;
'Into that chair; my body hones'? - Just pickin.
Not sure about cliched last line either. Maybe;
'And sure have lost my grin' ? - 'lost' couteracts 'won' also. in same stanza.
Sorry, not tryin ta re-write your clever and very entertaining poem. These lines just stuck out IMHO.
Best wishes, Ray xx
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2009
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Hi, Sue
Love the title - I used ta like a flutter on the tables., before I lost me home and shirt on em, LOL.
'Into that chair; I sit my bones' - with respect this seems a little forced. How about;
'Into that chair; my body hones'? - Just pickin.
Not sure about cliched last line either. Maybe;
'And sure have lost my grin' ? - 'lost' couteracts 'won' also. in same stanza.
Sorry, not tryin ta re-write your clever and very entertaining poem. These lines just stuck out IMHO.
Best wishes, Ray xx
Comment Written 16-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2009
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$^*$&) )(& @#*&#! )(*^!!^* !!&$ $# )^^#%# !!!!! I KNEW YOU'D SAY THAT BECAUSE I FELT IT WAS FORCED! LOL!!!! Stop reviewing with your keen eye!!! HA!!!! I'm gonna think long and hard about this one. Gotta see if I can live with it or not. Blimey!!! (p.s.- thanks for your review - ha!) Sue
Comment from joan marie
That would be my luck. But I did watch a friend win $10,000 once playing blackjack. Can't afford that kind of betting. Last scratch off paid $60 and haven't bought anothe since. LOL Loved the write. joan marie
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That would be my luck. But I did watch a friend win $10,000 once playing blackjack. Can't afford that kind of betting. Last scratch off paid $60 and haven't bought anothe since. LOL Loved the write. joan marie
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Comment Written 16-Jan-2009