CSP: A Collection of Poems
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Comment from LegendaryAngel
I think that by keeping the sentences together makes the reading of it better, if that makes any sense. Also liked the last line, not sure why but it was fitting for the ending.
Well done, good luck on the contest.
LA
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2008
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I think that by keeping the sentences together makes the reading of it better, if that makes any sense. Also liked the last line, not sure why but it was fitting for the ending.
Well done, good luck on the contest.
LA
Comment Written 01-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2008
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LA, thanks for your most kind review and I appreciate your specific comments. Sincerely, Sue
Comment from enjoi
You've got the format, and the flow, imagery and all that, but there just seems to be a little something missing, that finally period, something more definite in the ending. Beyond that, it's a good piece, there's just something not connecting fully with me. Which, unfortunately, is the problem with poetry, the personal connection on which they thrive.
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2008
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You've got the format, and the flow, imagery and all that, but there just seems to be a little something missing, that finally period, something more definite in the ending. Beyond that, it's a good piece, there's just something not connecting fully with me. Which, unfortunately, is the problem with poetry, the personal connection on which they thrive.
Comment Written 01-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2008
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enjoi, thank you for reading my poem and for your very kind review. I also appreciate your very specific comments. Will have a peak at it to see what maybe you saw. (sounds like see-saw! ha!). Respectfully, Sue
Comment from Poetic Friend
You did an excellent lob with poetic form and message.
It's quite challenging to write an acrostic without sounding choppy or forced, but your pen mastered the form.
You also superbly portrayed the feelings of depression, a mood that plagues many, especially during this time of years.
Well done, my friend.
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2008
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You did an excellent lob with poetic form and message.
It's quite challenging to write an acrostic without sounding choppy or forced, but your pen mastered the form.
You also superbly portrayed the feelings of depression, a mood that plagues many, especially during this time of years.
Well done, my friend.
Comment Written 01-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2008
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Poetic Friend, thank you for your most kind review and very specific comments. So glad you liked this "downer" piece- ha! Yes, my first acrostic and it was, indeed, challenging. Regards, Sue
Comment from wirenut
Sixteezkid
deep dark depression, excessive misery... shades of hee-haw come to mind every time i hear the word depression. i am depressed just too busy to have my breakdown...
well done
rick
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2008
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Sixteezkid
deep dark depression, excessive misery... shades of hee-haw come to mind every time i hear the word depression. i am depressed just too busy to have my breakdown...
well done
rick
Comment Written 01-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2008
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And thank goodness we get too busy to give in! Thanks for your very kind review. Regards, Sue
Comment from Josipher32
This was a very well written and correctly written acrostic. Acrostics, in my opinion , should have the title the same as the acrostic itself, so great job of that!
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2008
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This was a very well written and correctly written acrostic. Acrostics, in my opinion , should have the title the same as the acrostic itself, so great job of that!
Comment Written 01-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2008
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Josipher, thank you for your very kind remarks and review. Much appreciated! Regards, Sue
Comment from Alexander E Poet
It was a little Cryptic, but a Wonderful poem
Poetically and powerful piece very well done There were no errors. Or No typos. Nothing I Would change. I looking forward to your next poem
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2008
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It was a little Cryptic, but a Wonderful poem
Poetically and powerful piece very well done There were no errors. Or No typos. Nothing I Would change. I looking forward to your next poem
Comment Written 01-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2008
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BRQQKLYN, so glad you liked this poem. Thank you for reading and for your kind review. Much appreciated and with regards, Sue
Comment from lathunder
Well, you did a great job with this and it flowed smoothly. I loved the picture and the words matched it nicely. Thanks for sharing.
L.A.Thunder
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2008
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Well, you did a great job with this and it flowed smoothly. I loved the picture and the words matched it nicely. Thanks for sharing.
L.A.Thunder
Comment Written 01-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2008
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L.A.Thunder, thanks for your very kind review and comments. Very much appreciated, Sue
Comment from Judian James
Well there you have it ... this is depressing! Well done Sue. At least the last two lines have rays of hope trying to shine through. excellent
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2008
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Well there you have it ... this is depressing! Well done Sue. At least the last two lines have rays of hope trying to shine through. excellent
Comment Written 01-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2008
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Judy, so glad you liked this piece. Yet another new challenge for me (acrostic) that I could not resist. Thank you for reading and for your comments. With regards, Sue
Comment from honeytree
Our minds become muddled when one is depressed and some cannot see beyond their depression, until medical advice has been recommended.Helping someone with depression cannot be helped overnight. Depression can take months or years before some positive results can be seen. Depression can be controlled somewhat by medication and counselling by a Psychiatrist.
"Deep and dark moments
Erratic, these meanings
Pose threat to a new light
Raise doubt within my sight
Eyes truth, seeking day.
Spilt guilt getting through
Senses numbed... crafty lies
In webs spun by my hands
Ought not feed their demands
Nor yield to dismay."
I was impressed with the writer's words
Depression is not pleasant to have.
Honeytree.
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2008
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Our minds become muddled when one is depressed and some cannot see beyond their depression, until medical advice has been recommended.Helping someone with depression cannot be helped overnight. Depression can take months or years before some positive results can be seen. Depression can be controlled somewhat by medication and counselling by a Psychiatrist.
"Deep and dark moments
Erratic, these meanings
Pose threat to a new light
Raise doubt within my sight
Eyes truth, seeking day.
Spilt guilt getting through
Senses numbed... crafty lies
In webs spun by my hands
Ought not feed their demands
Nor yield to dismay."
I was impressed with the writer's words
Depression is not pleasant to have.
Honeytree.
Comment Written 01-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2008
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Honeytree, very glad you like this piece. Thanks for your kind review and comments. With regards, Sue
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I am glad you likedthe review.All the best. Honeytree.
Comment from Paul Greatrix
Hello Sixteezkid. This is a very dark piece indeed, laden with forboding and doom. But there is a sun shining behind every rain cloud, is there not?
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2008
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Hello Sixteezkid. This is a very dark piece indeed, laden with forboding and doom. But there is a sun shining behind every rain cloud, is there not?
Comment Written 01-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2008
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There is always that sun, even if you can't see it for a bit! Thanks for your very kind review. With regards, Sue