Willing Hearts
Viewing comments for Chapter 24 "Chapter 14 B"Solve a crime and fall in love at the same time?
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Comment from judiverse
I like the way you handled the Spanish dialogue. This adds a lot of excitement to the story, and there's also the complication of Mateo's numerous proposals to Sami. At least she warned Noah ahead of their visit. I thought perhaps Sami was a little too quick to get into the fact she was calling about a problem. She might have taken a bit more time before mentioning that. You might also do a little more to assure us that Mateo can be trusted. It will be interesting how he carries out his part in the scheme. If he finds out Sami is interested in Noah, things could go awry. Great suspense. judi
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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I like the way you handled the Spanish dialogue. This adds a lot of excitement to the story, and there's also the complication of Mateo's numerous proposals to Sami. At least she warned Noah ahead of their visit. I thought perhaps Sami was a little too quick to get into the fact she was calling about a problem. She might have taken a bit more time before mentioning that. You might also do a little more to assure us that Mateo can be trusted. It will be interesting how he carries out his part in the scheme. If he finds out Sami is interested in Noah, things could go awry. Great suspense. judi
Comment Written 30-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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Thank you for the kind review. I needed to get to the facts fast, or the word count would be too high, and it would have been just fluff.
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You're very welcome. I think it wouldn't take too many words to have a bit of a lead-in before asking the favor. Maybe something about she knew he was a person she could count on, etc. judi
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Will consider it.
Comment from Begin Again
Another outstanding chapter, Barbara. All the undercurrents playing between Sami and the two men was perfect. Truly enjoying your story. Keep up the excellent work.
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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Another outstanding chapter, Barbara. All the undercurrents playing between Sami and the two men was perfect. Truly enjoying your story. Keep up the excellent work.
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 30-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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Thank you for the wonderful encouragement. I appreciate it.