Beneath the Tranquil Sheen
Be a swan.86 total reviews
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
I always worry about this partnership with swans because I once heard that one beheaded itself flying into an overhead cable. Sorry to start on that note. But they are a truly majestic bird - so much grace on the surface yet all that activity and drive below, not to mention the role they play with their mate and young. Your verse skilfully and poignantly conveys this sense of beauty, of apparent calm which is often so sadly lacking in ourselves when struggles and stress occur. A lovely almost meditative poem with a strong message of dignity and persistence through adversity. Thanks for sharing, Jessica and good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2023
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I always worry about this partnership with swans because I once heard that one beheaded itself flying into an overhead cable. Sorry to start on that note. But they are a truly majestic bird - so much grace on the surface yet all that activity and drive below, not to mention the role they play with their mate and young. Your verse skilfully and poignantly conveys this sense of beauty, of apparent calm which is often so sadly lacking in ourselves when struggles and stress occur. A lovely almost meditative poem with a strong message of dignity and persistence through adversity. Thanks for sharing, Jessica and good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 10-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2023
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Thank you so much Debbie, I am so honored by your kind words and feedback here! Truly appreciate your review.
Xoxo
Jessica
Comment from ElPoetry001
A very perceptive metaphor for most people going through life suffering from a setback; real or imagined.
A vicarious ride with a metamorphosis into the swan.
Each phrase encapsulates the hidden emotions.
Are we being told about the many [HALT] Hungry Angry Lonely Tired people who seek to endure life with a smile, while hiding the sub rosa of life's burdens?
We are, by an excellent story.
Well done.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2023
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A very perceptive metaphor for most people going through life suffering from a setback; real or imagined.
A vicarious ride with a metamorphosis into the swan.
Each phrase encapsulates the hidden emotions.
Are we being told about the many [HALT] Hungry Angry Lonely Tired people who seek to endure life with a smile, while hiding the sub rosa of life's burdens?
We are, by an excellent story.
Well done.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2023
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I am deeply honored by your review, thank you very much. Your insightful feedback is extremely appreciated!
Xoxo
Jessica
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Thanks
Comment from CD Richards
Sounds like you are very lucky to have such a beautiful area right on your (back) doorstep.
It's sad to contemplate, as you do, what might be the cause of her apparently solitary existence.
Excellent use of metaphor to remind us of an important lesson.
Well done :)
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2023
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Sounds like you are very lucky to have such a beautiful area right on your (back) doorstep.
It's sad to contemplate, as you do, what might be the cause of her apparently solitary existence.
Excellent use of metaphor to remind us of an important lesson.
Well done :)
Comment Written 10-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2023
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Thank you so much, I truly appreciate the feedback!
Xo
Jessica
Comment from WriterHeather
This is a lovely poem you have penned about this majestic swan! How wonderful that you can visit this beautiful creature with your children. Thank you
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2023
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This is a lovely poem you have penned about this majestic swan! How wonderful that you can visit this beautiful creature with your children. Thank you
Comment Written 09-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2023
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Thank you so much, I appreciate your kind words and stars!! Xoxoxo
Jessica
Comment from Teri7
Jessica, This is such a beautiful poem about this beautiful swan. You used great descriptive words and peace as I read each word. I would love to live close to where there was a pond with a swan in it too. Thank you for sharing your elegant poem with us! Great picture! love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2023
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Jessica, This is such a beautiful poem about this beautiful swan. You used great descriptive words and peace as I read each word. I would love to live close to where there was a pond with a swan in it too. Thank you for sharing your elegant poem with us! Great picture! love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 09-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2023
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Teri, thank you so much for your lovely review and feedback!
Xo
Jessica
Comment from Raul1
This poem meets the requirements for the contest. It's beautifully written. The sentences flow with clarity. Excellent work! No mistakes found. I like it. Thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2023
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This poem meets the requirements for the contest. It's beautifully written. The sentences flow with clarity. Excellent work! No mistakes found. I like it. Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 09-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2023
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Thanks so much!
Xo
Jessica
Comment from John Ciarmello
She was a worthy muse, indeed, Jessica! What a beautiful piece of work.
Elegant and smooth flowing like the Swan. It took on her poise and persistence. Beautiful! Best, JohnC
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2023
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She was a worthy muse, indeed, Jessica! What a beautiful piece of work.
Elegant and smooth flowing like the Swan. It took on her poise and persistence. Beautiful! Best, JohnC
Comment Written 09-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2023
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I'm honored by your thoughts and review, John!
Thank you so much! Xo
Jessica
Comment from Brooke MacKenzie
WOW. This poem took my breath away. I really needed this reminder to "stay on the path" and channel my inner swan! How lovely that you had this moment with the swan. You made beautiful art from this encounter. Thank you for sharing this.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2023
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WOW. This poem took my breath away. I really needed this reminder to "stay on the path" and channel my inner swan! How lovely that you had this moment with the swan. You made beautiful art from this encounter. Thank you for sharing this.
Comment Written 09-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2023
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That truly means the world to me, Thank you so much!
Xo
Jessica
Comment from Ulla
Oh Jessica, this is a lovely poem for the Take a Photo Poetry contest. It's beautifully written and I can understand how the swan became an inspiration for your poem. All the best of luck. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2023
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Oh Jessica, this is a lovely poem for the Take a Photo Poetry contest. It's beautifully written and I can understand how the swan became an inspiration for your poem. All the best of luck. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 09-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2023
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Thank you so much, Ulla! I appreciate your thoughts here :) xoxo
Jessica
Comment from Debbie Pope
I enjoyed taking this walk with you. I like how you tied together the plight of the swan and the plight of man. Even before I got to the last stanza, I knew where your poem was headed. You led us into your closure, explaining perseverance so well.
I'm glad I read this.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2023
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I enjoyed taking this walk with you. I like how you tied together the plight of the swan and the plight of man. Even before I got to the last stanza, I knew where your poem was headed. You led us into your closure, explaining perseverance so well.
I'm glad I read this.
Comment Written 09-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2023
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Thank you so much for this lovely review and insightful feedback. Truly appreciated!
Xxoo
Jessica