The Gardens at Weatherbury
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Comment from edwayans
It was such a nice post!
CAST OF CHARACTERS:
Nicholas (narrator) - young boy (current age 17), telling of adventures since accepting Weatherbury's Groundskeeper job at age 14.
Constantine - garden gnome and self-appointed on-site manager of the Gardens
Sir Archibald - (aka Archie or Sir Archie) eccentric pink armadillo tasked with organization and upkeep of the Garden Shed
Imps - (an imp is a small mischievous sprite) There are a total of four imps: Jerry, Shot, Minah and Sprig. They are charged with the care and handling of the Gardens' maps and other contents of the filing cabinet.
Valentin - (officially the Gardens' DeVine) sentient vine occupying the 'desk' in the garden shed whose responsibility it is to read and interpret the maps contained in the filing cabinet.
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reply by the author on 31-Oct-2020
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It was such a nice post!
CAST OF CHARACTERS:
Nicholas (narrator) - young boy (current age 17), telling of adventures since accepting Weatherbury's Groundskeeper job at age 14.
Constantine - garden gnome and self-appointed on-site manager of the Gardens
Sir Archibald - (aka Archie or Sir Archie) eccentric pink armadillo tasked with organization and upkeep of the Garden Shed
Imps - (an imp is a small mischievous sprite) There are a total of four imps: Jerry, Shot, Minah and Sprig. They are charged with the care and handling of the Gardens' maps and other contents of the filing cabinet.
Valentin - (officially the Gardens' DeVine) sentient vine occupying the 'desk' in the garden shed whose responsibility it is to read and interpret the maps contained in the filing cabinet.
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Comment Written 30-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2020
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Good morning, edwayans, and thank you for your time reviewing this morning. I was wondering, however, what was wrong with the chapter or what corrections needed to be made?? All you did was copy a portion of my list of characters... According to FanStory's rating system (see below - you can find it on the site, here), Four stars indicates that adjustments need to be made to the work. Could you please indicate what adjustments you feel are necessary for improvement on this one? Four stars without any comment whatsoever on content with NO corrections/suggestions for improvement does not seem to fit with the spirit or even the letter of the system...
Six Stars (Exceptional: Simply Outstanding)
Five Stars (Excellent: Enjoyable and no revisions needed)
Four Stars (Good: Adjustments needed)
Three Stars (Below average)
Two Stars (Below Average: Needs lots of work)
I look forward to reading your work and thank you for your consideration, Yvette
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
This is a strong chapter. You do a wonderful job of mixing in dialogue - both internal and external - to move the story along. The story was fun and enjoyable and this easily held my interest. Great job.
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reply by the author on 31-Oct-2020
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This is a strong chapter. You do a wonderful job of mixing in dialogue - both internal and external - to move the story along. The story was fun and enjoyable and this easily held my interest. Great job.
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Comment Written 29-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2020
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Thanx so much for your review of this chapter of Nicholas and his 'gardening crew'... so glad you enjoyed! ;) Be sure to drop in anytime and catch up on their adventures... ;) Take care out there and Happy Halloween! ;) Yvette
